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creamyjam [2018-12-30 12:09:56 +0000 UTC]

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Long time no see!

My oh my, look at those paws. They're gorgeous!

On anatomy, you took a very daring leap and I love it! However with daring comes inevitable mistakes. While the victim's body is pretty proportional, the attacker's isn't. Her body is more snake-like than a domestic cats, my reasoning behind this is the way the body curls and the too long body because of how her head and chest are angled make her seem more like a snake rather than a cat. To fix that, the best thing in my opinion is to draw your sketch regularly then draw all the circles and basic shapes underneath in lower opacity and see how the shapes interact. Usually you'll find you'll need to tweak a few things and that's great! How I would fix her anatomy is have her head angled down more to face the victim more clearly. With that I would have her shoulders raised to be in line above or at the top of the head. The head will be a bit more closer to the viewer because of the neck extending it forward. Now that the head is lowered and the shoulders raised the chest would be underneath and the body can continue generally like you have in the drawing. Another good at to check your proportions is to draw a back line, it keeps your curves in check and allows you to find the most natural curve for the body. It's kind of like a guideline. Other than this the attacker is pretty good, I can't exactly tell whats going on with her hindlegs, but again the shapes and the back line will help guide you if in need of reworking. The victim's only problems that I see anatomically wise is the too small forepaw with the claws extended, compared to the hindpaw it's quite small. All the legs on this cat are just a bit too short, usually in a position like the cat is a completely extended leg would be buried in the other cats chest/neck fur. While a partially extended would be touching or aiming to hit depending on how bent the limb is. The cat in the background looks pretty good, but it's fairly dark so I can't tell too much.

The shading looks really good! The only thing I really dislike about it is the inconsistency in the lighting styles. On the trees its a soft fade while on the cats its a harsh only on the outer edges of the cats type lighting. It doesn't make too much sense. Same with the grass in the far distance, there's no harsh lighting on it. The shading throughout the grass other than that small grievance is magnificent and it draws the viewers eyes into the fighting cats due to the angle you used. The only other thing is there would be really harsh shadows coming from the cats and the trees due to the time of day that could be near black when they are closest to their source. I also want to say there should be more harsh dark shading where normal shading would go, like under the chin. They still need to be shaded and a little more shading would add to the dramatic impact and dynamics of the piece as a whole.

However on that angle you used, it was so close to making you get a near perfect technique. What I think you wanted to be your focal point, ended up not being it. Where the sun and the attacker's face are in the angle is where the focal point is. I'm assuming yo wanted the focal point to be on the attack and then lead over to the other cat in the background coming to help. If you had placed the sun between the attackers and the victims head and had lined it up to to diagonally lead into the chest of the cat in the background the curved grass/landscape would have then would have lead straight to what is in it's mouth. The stake in it's mouth is I'm guessing an important detail to foreshadow some future event like a bad scarring? or near death experience? I saw you had a part two and I have not looked at it as of yet, but if that stake has anything to do with whats going on in that picture it would have been a great source of interest and foreshadowing for the viewers. I'm sure plenty noticed, but it takes some looking around to notice, not something you see even after a second glance. Bringing the sun between the heads of the attacker and victim would also provide harsher and more dramatic lighting on their faces and could highlight the expressions better.

Overall this is a wonderful piece and I am still in love with he experimentation of poses and dynamics in this image. It's absolutely glorious and I hope to see you post more pieces like this. They're really fun and help you improve as an artist much faster than drawing some banana leaning on a vase. You're on your way to be doing great things in your art <3

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mentospider [2018-08-19 23:17:32 +0000 UTC]

destroy her. do it

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BiohazzardBonez [2018-08-19 22:16:36 +0000 UTC]

IM NOT CRYING YOUR CRYING

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BiohazzardBonez [2018-08-19 22:16:02 +0000 UTC]

D: 
SAMMY NOOO

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Lady-Vixtah [2018-08-19 21:28:54 +0000 UTC]

YESS!!! CHAOS AND PAIN!!! MY FAVOURITE!!!


I've been planning more chaos and pain for my stories, but sadly I haven't been able to get that point.

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WarriorcatsPerson [2018-08-19 21:21:06 +0000 UTC]

"one of the many things that I'm great at... character torture" .... wait your good at that?

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