pdogone [2016-01-22 22:03:50 +0000 UTC]

I had this pairing when I let my thoughts go when I go for a walk.  Im not a writer but I like to try short stories.  working on one with Traynor and Deana Shepard.  But this is very interesting and heating up! 

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eecarter333 [2014-06-15 10:44:41 +0000 UTC]

I had to read the beta'ed version because of the grammar and forgotten words and even then there were some that were left out. 

example: "Kia Lang was 'there' before us.

"Why am you really here, Commander? You could contact me also." I think it should read "Why are you really here, Commander? 

I might have written that last part a bit differently.: "you could have contacted me. though the QEC." meaning the quantum entangler communicator


It is an interesting start and yes a very unusual paring.  I think your brain gets a head of your typing though. I do that with my own writing. You may wish to read it aloud to yourself and you can pick up words you left out but thought you've written in mostly likely there were there in you head when you put fingers to keyboard ( I would have said pen to paper but who does that anymore?)

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Knight-commander12 [2014-06-10 15:57:15 +0000 UTC]

Interesting couple, can't wait to see more

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Louyetu [2014-06-09 08:28:39 +0000 UTC]

Yaaaaay ! Nice !
Original couple. It might a little fast, since we don't know exactly how Shepard fell for her, but it's nice anyway !

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Shadowknight1121 [2014-06-08 04:57:15 +0000 UTC]

very good start i can' wait for more.

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Tomatoeskilleuse [2014-06-07 17:36:31 +0000 UTC]

Your story is very sweet, I like it, but I'm just confused about one thing : could you be more specific* why Shepard fell in love with Tevos ? What is this famous article ? After all, Tevos and the Council is a pain in the ass for Shepard.

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MikeShen001 [2014-06-07 16:50:35 +0000 UTC]

Hey Servala there were a few mistakes (grammar mainly) that were causing my OCDness alarm to go off like a bat out of hell.

Here is the corrected version:

"Preparations to make of which I never thought they would be necessary..." 

Commander Shepard was about to say something, anything, that would alleviate the agony in Councilor Tevos's voice. But she had no words and she just stared into the empty comm room, even after the connection to the Citadel had ended minutes ago. 

They had so mercilessly failed on Thessia and now the planet, the blue jewel of the galaxy, was lost. The asari retreated and they could not even evacuate their population. For all their intellect, all their skills, they had not been prepared.

Shepard's throat was tight and dry. She had to go, her crew waited to discuss the next steps, but she could not move. She leaned her head against the wall, eyes closed. The metal cooled her forehead and the gentle hum of the ship grounded her.

No one, not even her closest friends Liara, Ashley, or Tali knew of her love for the asari Councilor. Especially Ash mocked her often, that she finally should look for a nice soldier for some stress relief, but then she laughed and shook her head. She wanted no one else and if she had never spoken other than official to Tevos, the asari was the center of Shepard's dreams. The Commander did not pursue the feelings, it was just too much that stood between them, but against her dreams she was powerless.

Ironically to disappoint Tevos, to see the desperation in her eyes, to hear the breaking of her voice was too much, even for her as an experienced soldier. She had to go to Citadel, had to see to her, to tell her face to face how sorry she was.

"Joker, we’re heading to the Citadel" she informed her pilot, before she went to her crew in the hope they had found a track for Kai Leng. Then she would take care of Liara, because her best friend suffered no less.

...

It took the Commander a lot of persuasion to get in Tevos's bureau. The door opened with a hissing noise and she found herself in a dark, dimly lit room. Shepard had never been in the asari embassy, or other non-human, and she looked interested around.

"Siria, I told you I do not want to be disturbed," the gentle, but very weary voice of Tevos sounded from the back of the embassy.

"Yes, she told me." Shepard went in the direction and her eyes cached the Councilor. Tevos sat on a bright sofa. Her right arm was draped over the back and she hold her neck, while she clutched a handkerchief with the other. The moist gleam in her eyes threw Shepard off track. 

"Commander?" The Asari cleared her throat. "Can .... Can I do something for you?"

Shepard coughed nervously and bobbed up and down. She looked as Tevos slid her hand from her neck over forehead, dabbed her eyes, and stood up. "Um," she searched for words. "I ... you had the conversation ended so quickly and..." 

Tevos came closer and her usually expressive eyes were outlined in red. "Not a nice feeling when someone is doing that with you?” Shepard laughed dryly and shook her head. It would have been funny if the circumstances were not so overwhelming.

"I wanted to ask whether you have any further information?" She followed Tevos to the darkened windows and the Councilor let them get a little bit more transparent. Shepard's gaze slid over the fine lines of the asari's face and she wanted so much to be able to stop the pain. 

"No more than you, probably. The communication is still dead and ... and...." The asari hung her head and took a deep breath. "I doubt that we can restore it. Thessia is lost."

The sadness in her words tore Shepard and she felt helpless. "I'm sorry." Tevos clasps her hands behind her back. 

"Have you any idea, how Cerberus could learn about the place so quickly?" Shepard asked after a few embarrassing moments of silence. She searched desperately for a topic, to not going to have to leave again, to stay close to the asari. 

Tevos gaze drifted to a point in the distance. "No. Even if the existence of the temple was no secret, yet its true meaning was. Even I have learned recently from its true purpose." Her hands clutched her forearms and Shepard wished she could take her in her arms. “Maybe ... they followed you?"

Shepard moistened her lips. "Kai Leng was before us in the temple. He had killed the scientists before we arrived." 

Tevos exhaled slowly and nodded. "Then I do not know it, and I ... I know I should have answers, yet..." Shepard reached out and touched Tevos on the upper arm. The asari looked at the hand, but she did not shake it off.

"I'm sorry." Shepard felt like an idiot. Otherwise articulate, she missed her vocabulary now. It was the mix of long-held, secret love, the closeness and Tevos lonely sadness. 

"You already said Commander." Shepard slid her hand through her hair and Tevos followed the movement.

"Yes," she brushed a strand behind the ear and swallowed. 

"Why am you really here, Commander? You could contact me also."

She tried a smile as she looked Tevos in the eye. "I was not sure if you do not hang me again." 

Now the hint of a smile lightened up the Councillor’s face. "Then you could ask me this time whether it is some kind of game." Surprised that she remembered Shepard blinked several times.
"So, why are you really come to me?" 

The Commander took refuge in a military attitude, she clasped her hands behind her back, and breathed slowly one time in and out. "I had to make sure that you are fine." Tevos eyes widened and in fascination Shepard watched in awe, as the drawing her forehead shifted. She believed she had not ever seen a asari, whose drawings pleased her so well. They only deepened the beauty of Tevos's face.

"Why?" The Councilor looked past her, but then their eyes met again. 

"I ... was worried." 

Tevos smiled and touched her on the shoulder. If even gently, it was enough to set the young woman on fire. "Do you take care of everyone that well?" She did not sound repellent, just tired. 

Shepard crossed her arms over her chest, she just did not know how she should keep them, as she nodded. "It's part of my job." She smiled and when she saw Tevos smile it made her heart jump.
"You should not be alone, not after such a setback." 

The green eyes of the asari darkened. "And why do you think I am alone, Commander?" 

She stiffened and Shepard cursed herself in thought. She really did not know much from Tevos life. She could have ask Liara to find out everything important, but she had not wanted to dig in the asari's privacy. "You sit alone in your office." She tried to appease. 

Tevos closed her eyes and for moments pain lingered on her face. "Well, perhaps my bondmate was on Thessia?” 

Shepard had never thought that Tevos was bond, and she was taking a risk by looking at Tevos left hand. "No bracelet."

Tevos chuckled and nodded. "Because you are right." She put Shepard again a hand on her shoulder. "Thank you Commander, I really appreciate that you have seen after me." Shepard was suddenly with a sinking feeling aware that she said goodbye. She felt well in Tevos nearby, and also felt that it helped the asari. She looked into her eyes and came closer. Tevos hand slipped from her shoulder and remained on her upper arm.

"Commander?" Her beautiful voice got a breathless note and Shepard did something of which she dreamed for so long. Since she had saw the first time Tevos photo, as a simple soldier on a mission she had long forgot. What she had not forgotten was the image of the Councilor and her soft, full lips. Shepard had imagined how they would feel and she knew if she missed this moment, she would never get the opportunity again.

She grabbed Tevos at the hip and looked into her eyes, then she lowered her eyelids, and their lips met. The asari's warm, sweet breath met her and Shepard had to force herself not to become to bold. Tevos did not respond, except for a faint yearning whimper as she increased the pressure gently, stroking her tongue over her lower lip.

Shepard ended the kiss and expected a reaction, anything between kicking and a slap in her face, but nothing happened. She hold the Councilor still at the hip, but Tevos right hand slid to her own lips. Her index finger grazed over the full lower lip and the Commander could hardly pull her eyes away. Only the expression of absolute surprise in the eyes of the asari let her look up.

"Commander…" she asked in surprise.

"Is it that long ago?" Shepard replied with a counter-question. She hem as Tevos tongue replaced her fingers and licked her lips. "But that was not your first kiss?" She meant it as a joke, but the amazement of the Councilor surprised her.

"Commander, have you actually a clue how old I am?" 

She laughed and shook her head, intoxicated that Tevos had not yet parted from her. "No. It is difficult to estimate the age of an asari. In addition, all say in the first centuries, they were just so and so old, and from five hundred it change to 'I've experienced in my thousand years already so much'" Shepard smirked. "Four Hundred?" she estimated with a wink and Tevos smiled. 

"Flatterer."

The Commander felt encouraged, as the fingers of the Asari pushed into her hair and then slowly slid over the top of her ear. Her whole body was on fire and she bent her head to kiss the Councilor again. This time Tevos came to meet her, hesitant yet, but as their tongues touched, Shepard had to hold her tight, otherwise she would have slipped to the ground. Tevos's hand rummaged through her hair and then held her by the neck. Shepard could not get enough and yet she forced herself not to be too rough. The Asari reminded her of a shy deer, confused by her own feelings, ready to withdraw at any moment. 

"I wanted to do since Udina had thrown you to the ground," her voice was rough and she cleared her throat. 

"You shot him," Tevos seemed fascinated by her hair, because she rolled up another red streak, and brushed her thumb over it. 

"It was not enough," a dark, dangerous undertone crept in her voice, a repressed anger that the man had dared to touch the asari. Tevos hand covered her cheek, the desperate look in her eyes was gone, and Shepard nearly drowned in the green. It was different than her own eye color, deeper. "Let me hold you." Shepard suggested. “How long has it been since someone has taken the burden off your shoulders?"

Tevos looked away. She knew exactly how long it had been since: centuries. Since someone she had loved above all else, had broken her heart. Centuries in which she had devoted her entire being to their people. Centuries she had been alone. It was so long ago that she could not even remember how it felt. "You want to embrace eternity with me?" She could not believe that she asked that question. Ironically, Commander Shepard. Tevos felt how her cheeks heated up.

"In the life I lived, I cannot promise an eternity, but one evening. An evening where I want to take care of you." Tevos smiled. She did not believe that Shepard had misunderstood her. The Commander, however, felt the heart beat up in her throat. She assumed that deeds would help her more, and she kissed Tevos again, waiting for a sign of defence, but the Councilor cuddled up to her, and an unexpected desire captured the Commander. Her hand slid to the closure of the robe, but Tevos shook her head. 

"No." Shepard nodded and fought her disappointment, but the asari covered her cheek with her hand. "Not here," she looked around her office. "If, if we want to do this, then come back in two hours at my apartment. I'll wait, but I will not be disappointed, if you should not …"

Shepard stroked Tevos's crest and was surprised how soft the skin that felt under her fingers. By the scales she would have thought it would be rougher, not like pure velvet. "The Normandy remains overnight. My crew is searching for hints." 

Tevos pulled away from the embrace to activate her Omni tool and shortly afterwards flashed the Commander hers. She saw the address and swallowed. "You have to go now." 

Shepard nodded, but looked back from the door once more, to watch how Tevos was touching her lips again.

If I have missed something, I do apologize. However if you like me to beta read any other stories let me know and I'll see what I can do

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