Comments: 30
DJaimon [2011-04-22 08:54:46 +0000 UTC]
Overall
Vision
Originality
Technique
Impact
This the first time I had ever written a critique, so I'm pretty sure it contains many errors. Or something. I wouldn't mind if you disapprove and bombard this critique, but I hope that you'll give an explanation as to why you do it.
Now... I'll try to critique as fairly as possible with the DA FAQ as a guide.
Vision – Does the artwork present or reflect a point of view, theme or idea?
All I can say that the picture is very simple. It's basically a picture of 4 Transformers racing, nothing more, nothing less. The picture reflects the theme (racing) straightforwardly. There's nothing else for me to interpret, unless that this picture holds a very deep meaning or something that I missed out. (which I highly doubt)
Originality – Is the artwork fresh or new in its style, execution or approach? Is it something you haven’t seen before in its particular genre? Does it surprise you?
It isn't a whole lot original, to boot. I've seen many other pictures of Transformers racing. Their designs aren't all that original either, since they're all related to Blurr and exerts a reasonable amount of his IDW and TFA designs. And is that a Drift-helm I see there? However, I do appreciate that you didn't completely copied Blurr's design and added some of your own designs. The racetrack isn't very original too, it basically being a simple arena with no special features.
Technique – Was the artwork skillfully created? Does the artist exhibit advanced knowledge of the medium and/or bring special focus to the craft of the medium used.
Colouring:
The choice of colour is perfect, with all the light in the arena, the colours are unsaturated and fits in perfectly with the background.
The thing that irks me most about the picture is of the distinct lack of shading. (not highlights, this picture has enough of that) Examples are Cliffstrider's left leg and the back-flap at her bottom. The same goes to the lights/camera on top of the racetrack. However, I do understand that you had used some gradient to replace it but it still looked weird. There is also the lack of shadows too, from the contestants and the beams that supports the lights/camera. But then, I'm not familiar with the cell-shading style, so I might be too unfair in this case.
The highlights in the picture is bright and makes the details on the characters pop out, especially Sonic. I have no qualms about that. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/let… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Lick)"/>
I also love the motion blur effect you've added, it makes the picture dynamic~ <3
Impact – Does the artwork resonate with you or evoke strong emotions? Does it make you think? Does it blow your mind?
When I first saw this picture, I think it's very pacey and full of action. Though, it doesn't really 'evoke strong emotions' or 'blow my mind'. To sum it up, it doesn't make me go "SQUEE OMG" It's pretty simple to my eyes. Their expressions are easy to read too: Haste looks confident enough to overtake Cliffstrider, with the latter having an amused and competitive expression. Sonic looks very smug while Ashbringer's expression clearly warns him to watch out.
Sonic's pose looks perfect. However, I think the other poses are a wee bit stiff. Haste and Ashbringer should hunch more and Cliffstrider's back should bend a little bit. And I think Ashbringer's neck is too long. Her left thigh can be raised a little higher and her right leg pushed further to the back to indicate that she's giving it her all to beat Sonic.
Don't be afraid to apply the squashing technique to your pictures, heck, even the TFA animators used this technique to make the characters look more dynamic too! |'D These two guides may help you improve more on poses: [link] [link]
Deviousness – An average rating based on your selections within Vision, Originality, Technique, and Impact.
Overall, I think this piece is wonderfully executed, but it has a few errors that I think needs correcting. I hope you'll keep up the good work! :3
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Shioji-san In reply to DJaimon [2011-04-24 04:34:19 +0000 UTC]
Could have made my own yes, though that would be longer thought process, and like with the race track wasn't interested in thinking so much xD
and no actually I didn't I just saw her alt thought it was cool so wanted to give them something similar for an alt though their actual alt is different, but I was first inspired by hers
indeed I suck with them so much ><;
yes yes it did which was why it took so long to reply I not into long post xD though I do appreciated it
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DogiCrimson [2011-10-18 00:53:19 +0000 UTC]
Tried to check was there other TF OC that was named Flamer. I'm glad I did, these two looks AWESOME.
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Tartly-Sweet [2011-05-06 07:13:36 +0000 UTC]
So does this mean you're for cannon x OC relationships now or is this just for the fun of the game you're making? *a little confused *
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ImaginationDiva [2011-05-03 13:44:51 +0000 UTC]
So whose Blurr's sparkmate?
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Israel42 [2011-04-25 03:55:20 +0000 UTC]
COOL. Tho the color's seems a little too pale.. ^^ all in all it's okay.
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Nortstar [2011-04-24 18:58:27 +0000 UTC]
wow it is so great pic ^^
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AnimePeep33 [2011-04-24 02:43:03 +0000 UTC]
ohh their designs are really spiffy. X3
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Silnev [2011-04-22 05:00:21 +0000 UTC]
how did you do the blurr on the front two?
Also cool pic.
-Silnev
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Shioji-san In reply to Silnev [2011-04-22 05:53:01 +0000 UTC]
I used motion blur on them
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Silnev In reply to Shioji-san [2011-04-27 01:10:34 +0000 UTC]
-_- of course
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Shioji-san In reply to Silnev [2011-04-27 03:57:59 +0000 UTC]
what's with the '-_-'?
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Silnev In reply to Shioji-san [2011-04-28 20:15:49 +0000 UTC]
Yes you r right I should've done =_=
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TheLoneDucky [2011-04-21 22:45:06 +0000 UTC]
Good Work!
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dark-joys47 [2011-04-21 14:45:02 +0000 UTC]
so it's Twins vs. Twins?
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Shioji-san In reply to dark-joys47 [2011-04-22 02:44:04 +0000 UTC]
I just created them about a week ago, they be Sonic (blue) and Haste (purple)
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Shioji-san In reply to dark-joys47 [2011-04-24 04:05:59 +0000 UTC]
0,o I don't see how she has boobs
and I just liked the name sonic, I came up with many names but none were as good as sonic so I kept with it ^^
thanks =3
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dark-joys47 In reply to Shioji-san [2011-04-24 13:36:04 +0000 UTC]
well, i probably just forgot my glasses when i saw it, by i have 'em now.
...you're right.
your welcome :3
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