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Published: 2017-01-27 00:12:17 +0000 UTC; Views: 215; Favourites: 15; Downloads: 0
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I drew Sloth with a flame a little bit ago and I thought I'd share it here as well!Opening critques because I know there's a lot I need improvement on and anything will help! Thank you!
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Overall, I'd say that this is a pretty decent piece!
The lighting from the flame accurately affects their whole body and illuminated the proper areas, while also fading towards the areas farther away. Where it could be improved is that the character could get significantly darker and more shaded towards the bottom/where the flame isn't hitting the figure to provide more of a contrast between the light and dark to make the light from the flame have more impact on the drawing. The coloring of the lineart helped with this a lot as well. Stronger shading can really make the visuals "pop" and give it more impact overall.
The design of the character themselves is also quite nice. Good use of color theory is employed and used skillfully throughout the design, making it pleasing to look at and providing a coherent scheme to put the character together. The matching symbols on the gloves and shoes also provide a nice sense of unity to the drawing.
Where it could be greatly improved is the composition and the quality.
The composition is pretty flat. With the character right in the center of the canvas its pretty plain and not very dynamic. Although the character has some dynamic elements to it (the flow of the tail and somewhat the positioning of the body) it doesn't help to bring a ton of movement to the piece which the composition isn't exactly helping. My suggestion would be next time to exaggerate the flow and feel of the character more, and to make them off from the center of the drawing to add visual interest.
Also, more context to be given to where the character is in the world. From this we know that they are in the sky when its snowing... which is nice! But with some context we perhaps could learn more about the character in a subtle way. Perhaps adding a cityscape in the background or a forest would help us get a feel kinda where this character likes to hang out (or, float around maybe in this case).
The quality of the drawing is also pretty decent. The coloring has a nice water color feel to it and provides a nice unity to the design (along with the shading, like I mentioned above). But where it could be improved is the lineart. On some parts of the drawing the lineart is thicker and one line, but others it is more sketchy and it is obvious where you were "feeling out" curves and hard spots. My suggestion here would to be to take the time and go back and clean up your lineart to make it either all sketchy, or to be a bit cleaner to make it feel more "complete".
Anatomy wise... the drawing is really proportionate for the most part! The arms and legs are a good length and are actually pretty nice! The hands are really well done and where the ears are placed on the head is perfect for the style you drew in. Where it could be improved (and im sure you knew this) is the feet and the length of the torso. The torso is a liiiitle but long and makes the good proportions of the arms and legs seem off, so if you made it a bit shorter that would be benefit the overall anatomy of your drawing. As for the feet.... I know feet are really hard to draw... on the right leg you did well angling it right but on the left leg not so much. My suggestion would be to look up a TON of references on that particular angle of foot so that you can sketch out a base for it and get the perspective right before drawing the shoe on top.
The tail has some weird lumps to it which could be fixed if you iron out the lineart (like I mentioned above) for a pretty nice lil tail on this dude!
One thing to note anatomy wise is the hair and how its relative to the actual skull of your character. This was something I struggled with for a long time with my characters (and something I could point out to you if you asked me to with some of my old deviations) where the hair comes off the head too much and almost looks like a wig or hat of sorts. How you fix this is sketch out the base of the head for your character, and then, on a new layer (or just over the top of it where you can erase your base later) draw the hair onto them. Keep in mind that hair typically only comes an inch off the top of the head, and if it goes farther than that it has a tendency to look awkward. THAT IS only with particular haircuts though!! you have to look at your character and see if it looks awkward with that rule before going on. Characters with Mohawks for example don't follow that rule, but characters with bowl cuts will! Just something to keep in mind!!
Okay I think that's about it... sorry for the wordy review, but I wanted to give you some good critiques and kinda explain my thought process while I was doing it! I hope that was helpful, thanks for the chance to critique because I love your art and want to see you improve ^^
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I feel very very sorry for not seeing this sooner! Sadly I cannot have this display on the deviation page and I am really sorry I did not reply sooner!
First I'd like to thank you for all the helpful feedback you gave me. I really appreciate it and it will help me in the future as well!
Hmm you have a point with the lighting. I think while making this I should've paid more attention to how light interacts with objects, like hair or the clothing. Hmm well thank you for the tip on that as well, it's definetly something I need to work on.
Well thank you for that! The design itself is a work in progress. Human characters are considerably a bit of new territory for me, but I really appreciate the compliment on that!
Now that you mention it the whole picture does look a little disinteresting and not as dynamic as you said. While the elements are present, the pose itself is not very interesting. Not in the center you said? Alright I can work with that! Thank you. I will try to movie him a little more next time.
And yes, you mentioned a little more context in the background? I don't know what I was thinking when I made this, I think I was meant to add something like it but I couldn't get it to fit. I guess it was careless on my part for the background. But still! A suggestion for a more detailed background is really helpful! Especially since it might make the character actually look like they're in a unique world in contrast to a random snowing skyline.
Now the lineart portion I actually didn't notice myself. I thought it looked cleaner when I was doing it, but looking back I see it wasn't. You have a really good point that the lineart looks sketchy, and at the time I honestly didn't notice. Thank you for drawing my attention to that! I'll do my best to clean up the lines next time.
Human anatomy is also really new for me, and this was one of my first attempts at drawing a full body image with a sort of pose, so I really appreciate you saying it looks okay for the most part (except for the torso and the feet). Feet are just extremely frustrating, I'm going to need to find some references, as for the torso, that was a little mistake on my part ahah. For awhile I was making the torso too long and the legs really short, so next time I'll try to make the torso shorter.
Oh my goodness hair! It's so difficult to style or draw. I was having a lot of trouble picking a hairstyle for this guy or drawing hair, but yeah I can see that the hair looks a little odd now looking back. lol I see what you mean! Thank you for the help! I got to work on just drawing hair in general as well.
Hey don't apologize for that! I really really appreciate you taking the time out of your day to critique this piece for me! You gave me a lot of really helpful tips and advice I wouldn't have seen unless you said something so thank you for that! And oh gosh thank you again! I really love your artwork as well, so you writing a review for me made me really excited ahah.
'Thank you so much! I'm sorry I took forever to reply to this! Seriously though! I really appreciate your advice and kind words!
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No problem!! I know how it is i forget to respond to things a lot too xD (or, ya know i cant think of the words)
But i love your art too and want to see you improve and im glad this helped out!!
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I DIDNT
IM SORRY FOR THE COMMENT SPAM-- I FEEL BAD
THIS IS RIDICULOUS
THIS IS G R E A T
I CANBT I loVE SlothTH
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OMG DON'T SAY SORRY ITS OKAY, I DO IT YOU TOO XD
THANK U
HE LOVES U TOO
BUT IM GLAD YOU LIKE SLOTH AHAH
almost wrote smooth there instead of Sloth
mmm smooth
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S C R E A M S
*uses base to make me x sloth art*
HES BEAUTIFUL Ive alWAYS LOVED HIM AND
your designs are fuckfingf gorgeous
s m o o t h
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OMFG THAT COMMENT MADE ME LAUGH SO HARD I ENDED UP CRYING AND I'M NOT JOKING I AM FEATURING THAT SHIT
U GO CHILD
LIVE OUT UR DREAMS
sloth has a bf already but that doesnt matter
FRICK IN CHILD IDK WHAT I WAS DOING PLS
thank u xD
s m o o t h i e
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OMG!!! IM KILLING HIS BF....... HE CANNOT HAVE MY... MY SLOTH......
WELL OBVIOUSLY YOUR UNKNOWING LANDED YOU IN A GOOD SPOT CAUSE yOUR DESIgns are JSUTSND
JUST
s c r e a m
smooooooooooooth leg
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PLEASE NO CHILD DON'T KILL HIS BF
DON'T DO THAT
HAVE MERCY
oMG NOOO STOOOO
WELL SO ARE YOURS
AAPDUAFS.KERBTGERSGBHRTKGVHERG
Y E L L
SMOOTH LEG TO FRY AN EGG FOR CRAIG
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ITS TOO LATE!!! HES ALREADY DEAD.
I KILLED HIM, ALL FOR MY SLOTHY-POO
MY DESIGNS ARE SHIT >:^(
I ONLY COME UP WITH SEMI-GOOD STORIES
BUT NOT THE FUCKING CHARACTERS THEMSELVES
S C R E E C H
SMOOth leg fries mY EGG FOR DEG
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Holy hell, I love how it looks slightly sketchy but still somehow manages to be clean. What satanic god are you?
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Pfft thank you XD I honestly don't know what I did! Ahah.
Youll never know...
MWHAHAHAHAHAAHHAHA
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Can anyone critique your art? If so, I would like to make a submission. Maybe full of satire?
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Go for it! Anything you have to say I'd be willing to hear! Anything will help! Even if it's Satire.
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bOI no I cannot draw that well XD but thank you
no don't feel bad !
all you gotta do is practice! ;D
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i have been practicing drawing for 7 hole years
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