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Published: 2018-10-15 23:45:54 +0000 UTC; Views: 6622; Favourites: 81; Downloads: 44
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Page 20. Something unexpected)Sorry for a such long waiting.
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And she just discover that the talisman can make more than just the holder fly.
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It'd be pretty remarkable if the powerful talisman lost a wrestling match with a child.
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Well, they don't know how powerful this talisman)
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I believe I know what it's going to happen next. The Talisman is going to uncontrollably send things to float in the air without control.Β
I can't wait for next page! I hope it won't take too much time next page, please.Β
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Well, perhaps)
Thanks, I'll try to make the next one soon.
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Hey, few edits you could make to fix some grammar errors. I capitalized the parts I changed. Hope it helps:
1st Panel:
Applebloom: Remove the 'at'; should be 'take it off first'.
Sweetie: "AREN'T you afraid of what she said, THAT this badge could be dangerous?"
Scoot: "Pfft, that's stupid. WHAT could be dangerous ABOUT flying?"
2nd Panel:
Scoot: "...I think I see SOMETHING there THAT will help..."
6th Panel:
Sweetie: "That means I'M NOT DOING ANYTHING right now."
7th Panel:
Sweetie: "I thought it JUST GAVE you levitation."
8th Panel:
Sweetie: "...technically it CAN be called levitation."
9th Panel:
Scoot: Remove 'now'
Sweetie: "Well, IT PROBABLY worked..."
Sweetie: "the power of Scoot's badge is much HIGHER than mine."
10th Panel:
Scoot: Change 'I' to 'I'LL' and remove 'TO'
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love the story so far, I am adding it to my rather extensive watch list (so many good comics and fan-stories...not enough time). Keep up the good work.
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Very cool, I need to go back in the story because I think I missed many of the pages.
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This is really hard to read. You might want to find a better translator.
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Umm, what was hard exactly? Some mistakes?
Usually people in comments help me fix some of them.
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YAY a new paige
I'm just waiting for something sharp flying fast to Scootaloo and she almost caught.
That she noticed that things fly is not necessarily good if you can not control it.
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I think she already realized about she can't control it, so she just want to take it off first.
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Yes, down with the talisman. Otherwise, who else injured.
I would know someone who would get that down safely.
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...Mmm, maybe she'll figure it out eventually. ^^
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Or maybe something else will happen)
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Well, if she doesn't figure it out, the only other thing that could happen is she doesn't figure it out. 
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Yeah, but what also could happen while she try to figure it out.
We'll see about that)
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