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SitaraGirl — Love is just some words
Published: 2010-03-21 11:31:02 +0000 UTC; Views: 469; Favourites: 7; Downloads: 3
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Love is just some wordsWhat is love? Love appears in many ways.
For me love is just some words. Beautiful words.
Sweeter tasting than chocolate.
Better scenting than the prettiest flowers.
Words that warm up the coldest heart,
Which fill the saddest person with joy.
That touch every part of your body with only a few letters.
They won't always reveal themselves with the first glance,
But affecting you deeper than you think.
They are talking directly to your heart.
Beautiful words,
So beautiful, that it makes you cry.
Words sang by an angel and knowing no distance,
Which make you shiver with less than one line.
Words, which are actually no words, but meanings.
Even though it's not always written or spoken, you can hear it.
You inhale them with every breath. You feel them with every heartbeat.
And even though it hurts sometimes you want to hear them.
The words are everything you have got. And all you need.
They make you go up in the morning and appear in your sleep.
Words that are always with you.
Words which you listen to in the silence and that guide you,
Whatever you do, wherever you are.
But still,
For me love is just some words.
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Comments: 7
For one; I love this. The emotion in this is very clear, so I think I should start this comment out with this lovely huggy emoticon.
You used a lot of description in this piece, which really cut it for me. I'm a sucker for description and big words. On top of that, I found I could really relate. I had a few bad experiences that left me thinking love is just a word. I still guess I somewhat thing that way... but that's besides the point.
Two things bugged me about the piece, though both of them were probably deliberate.
One, I noticed some lines ended with commas and then the line after that would still start with a capital letter. It's just me being a grammar nazi, but I just thought I'd point it out.
Another, was the format. How after every period or comma, you'd start a new line. I think you could have developed a way to break it up into larger sections in an effective manner that could've had a larger impact on the reader.
Besides petty things like that, I really liked the piece and I can tell you have some great talent. Keep it up!
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thank you so much for ur feedback and im really glad u like it.
keeping up the work is difficult though...its rarely that im in the right mood to it...mostly im more the drawing kind of person
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This is a very nice piece. It has a large depth of emotion and some very nice imagery. I really like it. The only thing I would state that started to get a little tiresome was the repetition of "word" and "words" (19 times in this poem including the title). You can cut out a couple of them and it would still be clear. Other then that I think it is very nicely done.
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yer, ur right... i guess i will rewrite it and cut a couple of them out. thanks
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WOW, what a beautiful poem. I like that I'm in love LOL
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im glad u like it
...seems like there are not that much people who think the same as u..but doesnt matter to me..i wrote it cause its what i felt in this moment...and i wrote it for a special person who understood and felt what i wanted to tell him... *smile*
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