MinasPassion [2017-01-02 09:19:45 +0000 UTC]
Hi Ashley,
it's time for us to give you feedback for your awesome entry in the Clerith Contest!
First of all, I would like to mention that we really enjoyed reading your story. The idea of the plot was fresh and Aerith's role seems very interesting.
In the beginning, the reader actually is a bit confused because she seems completely out of character. However, reading this chapter until the end, it feels like something is going to happen later, which might make a change (?) and bring back the Aerith that we used to know. Either way, you did a great job in making the reader want to learn more about what's going to happen.
Overall, you told the story very well so far and your creativity seems to know no limits!
We liked that this fic was mainly told through dialogue and your writing style is very comfortable to read.
It's a bit unfortunate that the chapter is so short but we are happy that you finished it for the contest and we wish you good luck!
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