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Published: 2012-11-01 13:08:29 +0000 UTC; Views: 6423; Favourites: 41; Downloads: 21
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Question: I'm still in doubt about the text size. Is this readable for you as well?
Sorry for the switch from 'you' to 'Ed' in the text, but I couldn't really figure out a better way to describe this. I'm not a writer, so if anyone has a better idea, shoot!
Panel 2: Ed's arm looks weird, something with the perspective that didn't turn out well and made it look short.
Panel 3: Al saves a cat ^^ (and I so hate city backgrounds)
Panel 4: Al's suitcase is too small
Panel 5: Win has weird face (and I still hate city backgrounds)
=> lots of mistakes in this one, but I'm not in the mood to change them right now so...
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I wouldn't mind bigger text either. My eyes aren't what they used to be!
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lol I will put it bigger right away!
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Ha ha the text could be bigger, but I'm liking it so far - it's certainly different from the previous episode, but I'm liking the writing style as well as the art (which looks a lot better like this by the way!).
You're certainly updating pretty quickly! It was only a couple of hours ago that I was reading the first page, so now you've got me all excited! Keep going withthis pace (if you can), I can't wait to read more
Also, if you ever want a critique from me, then let me know, I'd be happy to help, I'll critque the story as well as the art if you like, but I'll have to read through the previous story properly this time 
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Hey! The quick updating is coincidence
Next pages will be dialogue again, now it's just Winry's thoughts to explain the current situation.
I'm always open to critique, so if you have the time and are in the mood, why not?
I have a piece of fanfic coming up as well, that will explain what Ed's doing and why Winry's waiting, but it's not finished yet. I think I can use some help on that one, since English isn't my native language and I hade bad choice of words and spelling mistakes myself.
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I see, then once I find time, I'll definitely get down to doing that, right now I'm busy with a University essay; but honestly, I don't mind the wait on the fanfic, keep us in suspense for a while!
If you want a Beta-reader for the fanfic then I would love to do it! I'm doing a course in English and Writing and we're always encouraged to do outside projects. I'd love to do it, just let me know
I shall have a check now for some new pages anyway
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