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SoImStillUnsure — Reckless In A Black Dress
Published: 2010-08-31 07:42:55 +0000 UTC; Views: 9733; Favourites: 337; Downloads: 70
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Description She's the girl,
in the parking lot of the liquor store.
On her knees for some guy,
because she's too young to go buy the vodka herself.

She's the girl,
kissing him on the cheek,
with that cat-like smirk,
Pocketing the bottle of poison,
and turning an ivory skin back.

She's the girl,
pressing 100 miles an hour,
with the star-kissed sky,
and the city lights
blurring as she speeds through the streets.

She's the girl,
showing up an hour late
for her school dance.
In that little black dress,
that every guy wished was less,
and every girl wished were handcuffs.

She's the girl,
coyly biting her lip,
wryly smiling your way,
playfully blowing a kiss,
as she heads for the punch bowl.

She's the girl,
watching the colorless liquid
seep into the red,
Grinning to herself,
as she sees havoc in the future.

She's the girl,
spreading her crimson lipstick
across the face of a dozen guys.
As the music pounds to the beat
of a thousand thrashing hearts,
and laughter spreads through the air,
like the alcohol through their veins.

She's the girl,
that thinks this temporary fun,
this reckless lifestyle,
is replacement for love or happiness.

She's the girl,
that thinks if she can ruin everyone else around her,
make them as drunk,
as fucked up,
and broken down as she is,
maybe she'll finally know what a true smile feels like.
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Comments: 255

SoImStillUnsure In reply to ??? [2013-04-01 02:07:23 +0000 UTC]

Why thank you!

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AnonymousPoetGirl In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2013-04-01 14:04:40 +0000 UTC]

Your SO welcome. You deserve it. It was the first poem in a long while that actually succeed in moving me, if you know what I mean.

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Nessie905 [2012-01-18 15:29:08 +0000 UTC]

I really like this.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Nessie905 [2012-02-07 22:22:08 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much

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Nessie905 In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2012-02-07 22:29:11 +0000 UTC]

My pleasure

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looneywizard [2011-02-21 09:27:21 +0000 UTC]

to the dark side you've gone.
me likey.

sorry, i havn't been in the mood for reading latly. i woldn't be so far behind on your work otherwise. gotta bit of catchin up to do, but i'm sure i'll enjoy it

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to looneywizard [2011-02-21 19:09:18 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much, and no need to apologize.

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MoonlightSilverWolf [2011-01-19 04:37:18 +0000 UTC]

It sounds like a poem my English teacher would make us annotate. XD Which isn't a bad thing, mind you. Very wonderful, well done.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to MoonlightSilverWolf [2011-01-19 05:06:14 +0000 UTC]

Haha well thanks, I think!

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RosaEnora [2010-11-28 19:10:22 +0000 UTC]

ive been that girl before, only difference is that i never went to far till my friend stopped me. She was wise enough to make me change, this is really a great poem

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to RosaEnora [2010-11-28 21:18:53 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much.

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RosaEnora In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-11-28 21:41:15 +0000 UTC]

your very welcome

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BlindxMinds [2010-11-13 13:13:00 +0000 UTC]

love the imaginary language you use and how your description of her behavior refelcts her feelings....especially the last stanza is brilliant, it gives a deeper meaning to the other stanzas and it is brilliant as an ending, because it actually makes you feel sorry for her...
truly great poem
I wrote something similar to this, but I hadn't been reading this poem for a long time, so I didn't remember it anymore, but I just looked through my favs now and found htis again ...lol...you can ckeck it out, if you want to

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to BlindxMinds [2010-11-13 17:21:07 +0000 UTC]

Aw, thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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TheLunaLily [2010-10-27 03:20:12 +0000 UTC]

This is wonderful. I really enjoyed reading it

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to TheLunaLily [2010-10-27 03:21:58 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much.

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TheLunaLily In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-27 03:36:53 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome

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Darkvampyre123 [2010-10-20 14:18:47 +0000 UTC]

This poem is the bomb! I love it!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Darkvampyre123 [2010-10-20 22:18:12 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much.

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Darkvampyre123 In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-22 09:37:48 +0000 UTC]

My pleasure

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sade132 [2010-10-17 19:39:22 +0000 UTC]

that was rlly good

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to sade132 [2010-10-17 22:10:00 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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sade132 In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-17 22:13:40 +0000 UTC]

ur welcome, u deserve it

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Evairy [2010-09-29 13:28:36 +0000 UTC]

Brilliant!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Evairy [2010-09-29 13:30:50 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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WanderingHere [2010-09-26 20:27:14 +0000 UTC]

i really loved this.

but omycrap, that's a lot of groups.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to WanderingHere [2010-09-26 20:46:04 +0000 UTC]

I know...s'crazy. But thanks.

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DemonGhoul [2010-09-25 08:39:03 +0000 UTC]

Whoa.................Wow...........just wow.............
SO AWESOME

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to DemonGhoul [2010-09-25 15:12:11 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Kassi-Kamira [2010-09-24 16:02:57 +0000 UTC]

#dALinkSystem 'd here: [link]

- - - - -

Firstly, j'adore the title. It's completely beautiful.

I really like the way you've repeated the line She's the girl... throughout the poem, and the way that it lends itself to the changing continuity of the piece.

The fragility of the girl works so well throughout the piece, and the changes in everyone around her - and her story - are intriguingly stunning.

"Maybe she'll finally know what a true smile feels like." My absolute favourite line in the entirety of this. It just brings everything to a head and really rounds the piece off fantastically.

Definitely a

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Kassi-Kamira [2010-09-24 23:59:59 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it...

But I'm sorry...what's the dALinkSystem?

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Kassi-Kamira In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-09-26 03:44:24 +0000 UTC]

I absolutely did!

It's a group where you link to other deviations in the artist's comments.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Kassi-Kamira [2010-09-26 03:46:32 +0000 UTC]

Ooooh. okay.

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dayydream-believer [2010-09-21 10:45:02 +0000 UTC]

Wow I loved that Especially the ending

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to dayydream-believer [2010-09-21 13:14:15 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much

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neonxaos [2010-09-19 14:13:09 +0000 UTC]

I kinda like the title, actually, and I get the vibe you're going for. I just think the actual text needs to be a little less reckless to be more recklessly effective. I hope you know what I mean If you cut some bits and pieces and tightened up, this could shine.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to neonxaos [2010-09-19 16:12:35 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much. I'll definitely take that into mind, and hopefully put it to work in future pieces.

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Kasmiria [2010-09-19 06:47:17 +0000 UTC]

The ending was beautifully executed~

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Kasmiria [2010-09-19 06:49:14 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much.

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Rowoin [2010-09-10 15:42:33 +0000 UTC]

this is nice I like how you put it

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Rowoin [2010-09-10 15:59:05 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Rowoin In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-09-10 16:29:20 +0000 UTC]

your welcome

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Third-Shadow [2010-09-10 00:29:18 +0000 UTC]

Very nice piece, a bit sad considering it reminds us all of people we've known.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Third-Shadow [2010-09-10 00:35:48 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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dreamersleepwalker [2010-09-09 14:36:07 +0000 UTC]

yeap, liked it... honestly not the beginning, but when she started pouring vodka into the punch... I said aaahhhh, no! loved the ending.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to dreamersleepwalker [2010-09-09 14:48:52 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed part of it.

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dreamersleepwalker In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-09-09 22:17:54 +0000 UTC]

it's a nice poem actually

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Athazagoraphobias [2010-09-08 01:48:50 +0000 UTC]

I like this. I know that girl.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Athazagoraphobias [2010-09-08 02:12:08 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much.

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RedDragonfly [2010-09-07 23:33:30 +0000 UTC]

Very nice. I like that the character is not the cliche "sweet little bad girl" but someone very real and seriously messed up.

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