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Published: 2012-05-04 19:34:59 +0000 UTC; Views: 1683; Favourites: 21; Downloads: 1
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Remi, the sad guy from the first pages shows up... with a bazooka.Page 6 [link]
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If only I was into artwork this much.
Amazing though!
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Thanks! I'm rebooting this comic, and it will be in colors
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I think the school looks awesome in the final panel, I really need to practice drawing backgrounds…
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reference is your friend! I think I've used reference for almost every panel.
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Yea, even better is reference that you've taken pictures of.
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I actually went in a game an took picture from there, it's easy and fun.
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awesome! I wish i could make buildings like yours
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They are pretty hard to build.
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yes, i can see. Keep up the good work!
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i'm not experienced, but this page looks awesome, i think it fits your style more than some of the other pages. i don't really know how to explain.
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Jeg er noe enig med Trinityinyang, om overgangen, du kunne lagt til for eksempel 2 ruter øverst hvor døm tar inn eksplosjonen for så å se i retninga raketten kom fra og oppdage Remi.
Du kunne så ha tatt døm 2 siste rutene og satt døm som start på neste side.
Men sånn generelt er sidene til nå ganske så awesome, du har gjort en skikkelig jobb
Ooh, en ting til, rocket launchern er litt for liten i rute 4
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Mhm, det kunne vært en mulighet. De neste sidene hadde kanskje blitt litt vanskeligere å lage da, med tanke på det kommer ganske mye dialog som skal være med.
Men jeg hadde sikkert løst det.
Takk for kommentaren.
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Jah, trur jeg du hadde løst fint, men trenger ikke stresse med det
Men er det her sidene du skulle ha i tegneserie albumet?
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Yup! Men de blir på norsk i heftet, lol
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Funker det, har min på engelsk da, funker lissom mye bedre
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Ja, det funker egentlig best på engelsk. Men min går ok på norsk, karakterne har jo norske navn så
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Okay, this time I'm gonna be critical. It's clear that Remi shot a rocket at the zombies, though the fluidity of the scene could be more. It transitioned somewhat abruptly. There was some room for a few things to make the scene flow more smoothly. Like, showing the two other characters to "absorb" or comprehend the situation right after the explosion. Actually there's a whole lot of possibilities to make the scene a bit smoother. What I just said is just one of the many possibilities. I'm usually not this critical to you since you make consistently good work. This will be a first critical opinion from me.
On the positive side, you've managed to create detailed drawings without losing the clarity of the scene. I can see how the scene goes without being confused. The transition from the 5th panel to 6th panel is clear and smooth. On the 5th panel, the slight black fading effect helped with the transition.
^ ^ Keep it up the good work, okay?
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I agree with you, thanks for the input. I kinda feel stupid forgetting such a obvoious thing. I focused too much on Remi's apperaence and the transition from the streets to the school, I guess I got a bit lost.
Next time I work on a project, I'll make sure to have people come with feedback earlier on, so I can fix the misstakes I might not see.
But I appreaciate the criticism, I really do. It's what I need to improve. Thanks!
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^^ Well, I wouldn't say it was obvious. To spot that kind of thing, I have to "feel" it, then describe it in words. Though I may come off as picky, I like it better when things to move at a fluid and steady pace.
Like when someone tells me to get a glass of water, I'd be a bit annoyed though I feel obligated to do it anyway. During the time I get annoyed, I paused for a bit thinking whether I should get it or not. In a way, it feels more human as we do not react with lighting speed and we think about the things we do. Though it's not required to give your characters realistic qualities. There's plenty of cartoony characters that people can sympathize. I mean, you can do anything when you create a comic. And so many ways to make it. Just decide on things that you think feels best.
^ ^ I guess I said a bit much. If you would like feedback from me, I'll help out when I can, okay?
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