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Sokkhue — Zombeid Page 3
Published: 2012-01-15 19:31:53 +0000 UTC; Views: 1916; Favourites: 24; Downloads: 6
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Third page of the comic.The first three pages where for a school assignment, where we had to create 4 characters and put them in a situation.
I hope you guys enjoy this.
Please tell me what you feel, criticism is appreciated.
Update:
Fixed Tobias' cap.
And fixed the dialogue in the last speechbubble.
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Comments: 48
Yup! He can be at times, but he is mostly just very self-centered.
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Yeah I can tell XD
lmao XD
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insane much? nice art but this guy is seriously scary!
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Page 4 and 5 is up, more is coming.
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I'm curious on the backstory of the Machete guy and the Mannequin (or is she a blow up doll ? haha)
It's a nice little crazy story you've got as an idea. It definitely needs fleshing out and I would suggest you refine the characters' 'voices' a bit more. You have Machete guy pretty well figured out, but I'd add some more colloquial language to make him seem less formal with his speech. The trick with speech, is the more correct you write, the better the grammar and the more precise you write, the more formal the tone. For example "Just promise me you stay here until I return" as compared to "I'll be right back, you just wait right here for me darlin " see the difference in tone? Just a tip anyway.
but I love the gritty style, I'd definitely be interested in reading more.
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Dialogue is my worst side, I'm not good finding the right words for the characters. Thanks for the tip, I find it helpful and I'll keep it in mind. Especially now when I introduce the other two characters. And, Like you wrote, I need short but effective lines. Good example you wrote there.
Again, thanks for the comment I appreciate it alot.
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I love zombies!!! NICE!!! Love the grudgy-intro, I'm looking forward where this is going. Keep it up!
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Thank you, I'm working with the next pages at the momment.
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A apocalypse will do weird things to people
The B/W colour style looks good
These first few pages open a load of questions, which I think is the best way to introduce a story
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i really do hope you are going to continue with this
it looks amazing!
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Hahahahaha! She aint going NO WHERE! TWISTED ASS DUDE! I love it!
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Haha, thanks. I loved reading your comments. They became crazier for each page.
I am working on a frontpage for the comic, and later I plan to expand the comic by ten pages 
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I got you on my watch. Your book is a breath of fresh air. The first 2 pages being so hilarious sold me instantly.
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I think it was a nice little short comic for your assignment besides a few things. I don't like the digital tones and such, it just doesn't mix well with the traditional work and needs practice and some of the art was a bit iffy but overall I liked it.
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Yeah, I need to practice with tones, and perhaps colors. I like the tones in the first page, though.
But thanks for the hones comment!
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You gotta add more! The conflict hasn't entered the story yet!
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I plan so. I need to work more on the characters and a story.
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I... I love zombies... I really do... /so happy right now hugs comic
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I like the environments mostly in this comic(very atmospheric as I have said before) , and I feel that it has basic a good and strong story.
criticism:
-I feel that the story ends to fast , I think you should make this comic longer.
-And an other thing on this page at panel 2 he is not interested of saving them , panel 3 the girl try to convince him, panel 4 he is suddenly convinced, he change his mind so fast, I think it would be more interesting if you made more panels when she is trying to convince him, and show why he gets convinced.
I hope my criticism and comment helps.
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Thanks! I appreciate your criticism.
I know it's short, but the assignment had restrictions. I where gonna draw 10-14 panels plus a page showing the enviroments. And I only had a week to work with.
But later we are going to have a bigger task, about 10 pages. I think I'll make a sort of sequel.
And yeah, I agree about the character change his mind to fast. My planning for this wasn't the best, I changed alot on the run. The doll was supposed to be a real woman at first, and the kid was gonna be some dude with glasses. And I still don't know what do make of that character killing zombies in the first panel.
And the dialog was added last.
But thanks for the comment!
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If you are making a sequel, I will be happy to read it
Hoped my comment helped a bit.
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Hey Sokkhue I think you should continue on! Now I want to know whats going to happen! I like how you set up these pages and unfolding the story and characters to us! Keep going!
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Thanks! I hope to make more of this later. I haven't spend much time on this, if I continue this I want to flesh out the characters and perhaps color it?
But thanks for the support!
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l like kinda a high school of the dead meets i am legend with a unique art style
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It seems that the following scenes will be more action based! (if you ever plan to continue this
You did a great job as always, I guess your assignment was greatly appreciated
Btw, have you given a name to the main character?
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Thanks! Actually, I don't have a name for the main character lol. I'm so bad at giving names. The only character I have an idea for a name is that kid in the first panel. But I won't reveal it yet.
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Yassh, I'll continue this sometime.
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I hope so. My teacher mentioned something about a 10 page project. Oh, I am excited.
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It would be amazing! 
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