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something44 — Let Me, Hold Your Hand
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Published: 2008-03-25 13:32:40 +0000 UTC; Views: 2992; Favourites: 59; Downloads: 19
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Cold winds breeze throughYour long black hair,
Uttering words into your ear
Sweet nothings to hold you
Dear,
“I wanna hold your hand.”
As we stroll along the shore
Whispering words from the heart,
Slowly, holding you tight,
Feeling your heart beat
Next to mine,
Steadily,
“I wanna hold your hand.”
As if there’s no tomorrow
Breaking away from this sorrow,
Sadness, which will bring me
Lost times, if we’re apart,
Whenever we depart,
Please…
“I wanna hold your hand.”
And feel your breath
Speak my name,
Uttering the same phrase
That will bring me peace
As I stare into your eyes
Waiting, for your answer,
Love,
Let me hold your hand…
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Comments: 59
how i love this one! 
romantic isn't it?...brings back shattered memories..
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Haha. Yeah, the romantic in me. LOL! shattered memories I see. Everybody has at least one... a time where you were at your height, emotionally that is. The lovey dovey cheesy stuff and all. XD
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You speak very lovely words that put me in a dream. Beautiful work as always.
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Good Job! it's very sweet ^_^ Me and my friend Katie read this and immediatly knew it was based on the beatles song ^_^ lol, we win
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LOL! Thanks. Yeah. This was based on the Across the Universe's rendition of I Want To Hold Your Hand.
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walang kapantay pagiging romantiko mo, bro..
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Haha. Yan din sabi ng mga ex ko... kaso walang magagawa ang pagiging romantiko sa totoong buhay. Paminsan kelangan maghiwalay para sa mga praktikal na dahilan.
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yun nga lang, bro.. talagang ganun..
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i think we all remember how it felt when we were young and in love.
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Yes, I think so too. Young love will forever be my heroine. But I believe that after numerous relationships we sometimes lost that and become more realistic...
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Ah, i love your romantic stuff. <3:. Actually I love all your work, but that's not really the point 
I really like this one in particualar because if you take the indents out it say:
"Dear, steadily love, please...let me hold you're hand". And that is pretty sweet in itself. Can I have a piece of your talent?
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Haha. You actually noticed that? Great eye. I did have a reason why the lines always go back to the left before uttering the lines "I wanna hold your hand". Sure, if talent can be extracted to one person to another. XD
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Can I borrow your hand? maybe I can learn through osmosis
LET ME HOLD YOUR HAND!
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LOL! That cracked me up. Pretty witty. You even used the title of my poem.
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So lovely!
Loved the Across the Universe song, actually an OST of I Am Sam!
I envy your time to write! Tell me, do you have any tips how to finish something, like a novel? Coz I can't finish a thins I write (except for poetries)! Thanks!
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Thanks! LOL! Actually I have very little time nowadays. Before I write one poem a day but now I rarely get to write in a week. Thesis is killing me. Novel? I haven't even started one. Haha. But here's the thing. If you're not in a rush, you could at least write a page a day or when your muse is shining. ^_^
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wow! at wala kang inspirasyon dito?! that's double wow!
very sweet... made me say "awwww" without that crappy feeling of sappiness...
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Haha. Oo nga. Wala. Puro imaginasyon na lang yan. Kung ano ang gagawin ko kapag may nakahanap nako. ^_^
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Oh man, I Love Across the Universe, and I too have a copy of the album and listen to it repeatedly!
They really did winders with the music!
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Haha. Yeah. The soundtrack was amazing! ^_^
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Yeah! I just love it!!
Except, even the deluxe version is missing like 3 songs, so I have to get a digital copy from my stepsister for the extra songs.
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holding hands, such a simple way to show affection.
i love the beetles!
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Ah yes, young love. I love them as well! ^_^
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aww, this is such a sweet poem, and I absolutly love the structure.
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Thank you! I appreciate it. ^_^
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cute or what?! sheesh, talk about me feeling all warm and fuzzy
I must compse myself
What I liked about this was the repitition of the speech, that was incredibly effective in reaching into my emotions, and tugging.
A question about the structure, independent of the words:
I got the feeling that the text kept veering to the right, as if the person is moving on, but then the quote bings it back to the left alignment, as if that's where thoughts always lead; was that intentional?
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Haha. Thanks! Well, the left side of the chest area is where the heart sounds are louder...even if we say that the person is right handed or dominant in the right, the heart can still be felt best on the left side... Since this poem is more or less about yearning, then I guess these statements should come straight from the heart. ^_^
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That is one of the most intense and thoughtful explainations I've ever read about reasons for structure
Kudos to you! It's very inventive
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*tear* This is so beautiful and heartbreakingly wonderful
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Thanks pheebz! I'm glad you liked it. Hope you're doing okay.
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Raw emotion rolled into a heartstring-tugging and heartfelt poem.Absolutely brilliant.
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Wow, thank you! I'm honored by your comment.
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You're welcome.
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