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SpiderMilkshakeOctober 19th
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Published: 2016-01-14 20:21:39 +0000 UTC; Views: 2349; Favourites: 42; Downloads: 0
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Description October 19th

I arrived at home a pure soul
but I retreat a mosaic of soles.
Yes, I have been stepped on,
I have been led and brought on, spat on,
had the rod on, been beat and been broke.
At least you like my lyric.
At least your bootmarks no longer ache
and glow hurt-red. Marks, my words
when they pelt the ground, raindrops
falling but not on my head;
they cool my wounds. Even nature
is sympathetic. It gives you a sun today
and an excuse to burst from your dungeon.
I say take that chance. There is a want
for freedom there. Boot-march is a twisted
soundtrack there and it has gotten old;
the bright thoughts of bright leaves
and the dear faces of the strollered children
all wide-open and enamored with everything,
are writing you a new set of lyrics.
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Comments: 18

p-uqq [2017-03-22 02:01:21 +0000 UTC]

Bro october 19 is my birthday

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Cumulonimbi [2017-03-20 04:38:15 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations on the DD!  

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salyssong [2017-03-19 23:17:31 +0000 UTC]

It describes my relationship with my little sister beautufuly.

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PenguinTranquilizer [2017-03-19 19:10:32 +0000 UTC]

Congrats on the DD!

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xLunaCoynex [2017-03-19 16:05:09 +0000 UTC]

OMG I love this poem it's so beautiful ,and unique. Also my birthday is on October 19th!

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p-uqq In reply to xLunaCoynex [2017-03-22 02:02:43 +0000 UTC]

Same !

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SpiderMilkshake In reply to xLunaCoynex [2017-03-19 16:22:48 +0000 UTC]

^^ Thankee kindly! I appreciate it! 

X3 And Happy extremely-belated Birthday! 

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MissAddledMiss [2017-03-19 15:27:07 +0000 UTC]

This a very lovely piece. The imagery in this is really breathtaking.

I like how the tone shifts slowly from a meditation on pain to something that seems rather hopeful and healing.

Congrats on the DD!

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SpiderMilkshake In reply to MissAddledMiss [2017-03-19 15:35:56 +0000 UTC]

^u^ Thankee kindly! Glad you enjoyed.

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jixeh [2017-03-19 14:49:59 +0000 UTC]

congrats on the DD! this is a very nice poem
october 19th also happens to be my birthday, haha

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p-uqq In reply to jixeh [2017-03-22 02:01:59 +0000 UTC]

Same !!!?

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jixeh In reply to p-uqq [2017-03-22 02:11:09 +0000 UTC]

cool ;o; 

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p-uqq In reply to p-uqq [2017-03-22 02:02:25 +0000 UTC]

Tbh when it adds that "?"

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SpiderMilkshake In reply to jixeh [2017-03-19 15:03:37 +0000 UTC]

^u^ Thank ya! Glad you like it! 
XD Nice!

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jixeh In reply to SpiderMilkshake [2017-03-19 16:12:24 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome~

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LostGryphin [2017-03-19 14:20:07 +0000 UTC]

Congrats on the DD.

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SpiderMilkshake In reply to LostGryphin [2017-03-19 15:03:51 +0000 UTC]

^^

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TristanCody [2017-03-03 20:32:53 +0000 UTC]

I really like the poem as a whole and how you tie in word play and realistic pains and emotions. However, I do want to make a comment on the use of the phrase "hurt-red". I love the intention of it, but I feel like everything else has a lovely, meaningful sharpness but that phrase. It seems to interrupt for me.

Of course, this is just my opinion and I'm not saying that the poem is bad because of the phrase.

I look forward to seeing more from you in the future.

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