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contemplation 4

i
turn over
      face the wall
           (in the darkness)
and try to forget
the scent of your skin
      as it lingers
           (cold)
      upon my fingertips







4:09 pm
november 27, 2002
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Comments: 16

only-hope [2004-06-16 02:56:50 +0000 UTC]

a nice saturation of truth. i know this feeling all too well.

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natdaddy [2004-05-01 17:06:11 +0000 UTC]

there should be more i think.

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waiting4chaos [2002-12-07 02:29:48 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful.. Short.. I love this so much man.. you are great.. Happy to have you on my devwatch

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skankinshorty [2002-12-05 01:17:13 +0000 UTC]

I love the poem and at the moment its something I needed to read just to make me happy in a way.

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krisalynn [2002-12-03 14:35:50 +0000 UTC]

Silly Aesta. I think it's very good, simple and very expressive you are very good at that and I like that.

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aesta [2002-12-01 12:38:30 +0000 UTC]

Nifty-keen! Me likey.

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creator07 [2002-12-01 09:21:04 +0000 UTC]

I liek how you use structure in your composing of the poem. Good poem. Short and what I like. I find it hard to relate though. Don't think Iknwo what your talking about. And if you want a real comment maybe more imaging?

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nemish [2002-12-01 04:28:36 +0000 UTC]

Think I know how you felt.

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dreamz13 [2002-11-30 17:04:22 +0000 UTC]

A powerful little gem of a poem.

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82deg [2002-11-30 16:18:32 +0000 UTC]

Oh yes, I agree with all they've said here...your skill to convey emotions beautifully and convincingly continue to amaze me

Great work, Calvin

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kyng [2002-11-30 15:01:26 +0000 UTC]

simple but emotive. I like it.

the layout works well here too.

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strangelove [2002-11-29 20:51:51 +0000 UTC]

lovely..... ur skill abounds in this one, great job.

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maxrom [2002-11-29 20:30:54 +0000 UTC]

Masterful expressionism. I love the emotions you convey. Amazing.

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5t3iggy [2002-11-29 20:01:10 +0000 UTC]

expressive poem.

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eluzion [2002-11-29 18:00:40 +0000 UTC]

i love it when the words show up without telling you why they are there.. this is a lovely little piece though...a moment in time isolated so beautifully in these words. i also like how you placed (in the darkness) (cold) apart from the rest. this added to that experience of isolation for the reader. lovely...lovely...lovely..!

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n0deal [2002-11-29 17:59:35 +0000 UTC]

Impressive how you can convey emotion so succinctly.

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