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cartoonistforchrist [2015-08-31 04:00:39 +0000 UTC]
I liked the art of Mias and Elle, and thought I'd check out their story. Are you interested in corrections? These are the errors that I found:
4th paragraph 1st sentence it should be in
15th paragraph 2nd sentence it in should be in it
My mind automatically corrects as I read, so I thought I'd pass it on to you. If you're not interested, then I won't post them then.
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SuirenShinju In reply to cartoonistforchrist [2015-08-31 04:13:34 +0000 UTC]
If it were more recent writing I wouldn't mind the extra set of eyes, but as this version is a couple years old now, correcting it at this point isn't a high prioirty.
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ImagineCloudNine [2015-07-13 01:33:52 +0000 UTC]
I like this story thou awesomeness.
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ImagineCloudNine [2015-07-13 01:33:30 +0000 UTC]
what are these characters from originally?
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Swanbreeze [2015-04-28 09:05:35 +0000 UTC]
All Mias and Elle fanfics seem to include Elle being kidnapped by Mias, then somehow getting wronged by Elias, and saved by a team of Abernos and Mias! Whew...
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merupuri2583 [2013-09-03 23:30:33 +0000 UTC]
Your story is so awesome!
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Orbins [2013-06-30 15:06:58 +0000 UTC]
what would you do if you were trapped by a mystical pervert
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zachani In reply to Orbins [2015-10-28 21:18:07 +0000 UTC]
Escape Bond style yo
The way you worded that was absolutely amazing
(you just made my day, in other words)
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SuirenShinju In reply to Orbins [2013-06-30 16:06:57 +0000 UTC]
I dunno XD I'd probably be hesitant at first, but given that I'm lonely and often sexually frustrated, I'd go for it
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snoopgirl55 [2013-04-28 20:47:16 +0000 UTC]
OMG XD I love this! Epic writing you deffo put me to shame lol
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Emilyrose2245 [2012-12-09 02:08:17 +0000 UTC]
that was amazing your such a great writer!
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LyraSilverfors [2012-06-22 12:17:15 +0000 UTC]
Uh... I just found this because I accidentally stumbled over it reading another Mias and Elle fan fiction. Now I am totally hooked to those characters and another story about them. When am I supposed to sleep??
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redflowerblooming [2012-02-18 18:58:37 +0000 UTC]
Hurry Elle!! A mystical pervert has trapped you!! You must escape!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Aragirl [2012-02-10 02:58:52 +0000 UTC]
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Aragirl [2012-02-10 02:57:59 +0000 UTC]
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startraveller776 [2011-12-07 02:26:18 +0000 UTC]
Yay for Elle biting him!
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DreamsOfHim [2011-11-03 04:35:59 +0000 UTC]
At first i saw a picture you had drawn and i got hooked on the Characters. When i looked at your profile and saw that you had a story i damn near died of excitement and man after this chapter im already hooked. I love it.
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qingthing [2011-10-28 14:05:18 +0000 UTC]
aaaaah the supsense! the excitement! i'm hooked :')
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SuirenShinju In reply to StressedJenny [2011-10-09 22:12:24 +0000 UTC]
Oh Miss Jenny, your compliments could make me swoon. XD I shall do my best to continue spinning my own version of your wonderful tale. Thank you very much for taking the time to read it. I truly appreciate it.
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Bunny-Tune-94 [2011-10-09 09:40:35 +0000 UTC]
More!!!!!!!! I hate cliffhangers!!!!!!
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SuirenShinju In reply to Bunny-Tune-94 [2011-10-09 15:23:56 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much. Hopefully inspiration for chapter 2 shall strike quickly. Usually when I'm on a obsession with a certain pairing I can write an entire story in a matter of a couple days. Knowing I have people waiting for more is even further motivation so please be patient for now. X3
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Bunny-Tune-94 In reply to SuirenShinju [2011-10-09 15:30:01 +0000 UTC]
I know how you feel. I'm writing my own Mias and Elle story but it feels awkward cos I'm 16
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SuirenShinju In reply to Bunny-Tune-94 [2011-10-09 15:51:12 +0000 UTC]
Well I've been writing fan fictions since I was in middle school. I'm 21 now and still not sure about half of what I write. Most of it has always been for my own personal satisfaction, but what's the point of writing and creating fantastic adventures and interesting characters if you can't share it? You aren't going to get better at something without practice and feedback. I've gotten so little feedback though. If it helps, I'd be willing to read your story and give you some pointers. English classes were my specialty after art so I know at least a few things.
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Bunny-Tune-94 In reply to SuirenShinju [2011-10-09 16:05:58 +0000 UTC]
I can relate to that. I started writing when I was 11 but stopped cos of my dumbass english teacher, started again at 12 but stopped again for the same reason and started again at 14. English is my best subject too, I'm studying it at sixth form.
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SuirenShinju In reply to Bunny-Tune-94 [2011-10-09 22:10:16 +0000 UTC]
Ah, I guess I never had a problem with a English teacher... probably because my mom is one and I had connections XD But I know certain teachers can just ruin a subject. While I do believe you need to have a natural talent for writing, hard work and determination can get you far if you're willing to work at it. I'll read through your fic a bit later and see if I can give you any advice. Until then, hang in there. If it's something you really enjoy, you can't let anyone detour you from it. As long as you don't give up, you'll be fine. ^^
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Bunny-Tune-94 In reply to SuirenShinju [2011-10-09 22:32:52 +0000 UTC]
Thanks that means alot.
People have been telling me I've got the skills but the half time I'm like: "WTF have I just written?!"
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SuirenShinju In reply to Bunny-Tune-94 [2011-10-09 22:41:41 +0000 UTC]
Your harshest critic is always yourself hun. I struggle with confidence issues in just about every aspect of my life, aside from my love for a boy <3 *giggles* Your love for anything can take you far, even in writing. Don't give up!
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Bunny-Tune-94 In reply to SuirenShinju [2011-10-09 23:12:48 +0000 UTC]
Not really. Not many people chose English language in sixth form.
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SuirenShinju In reply to Bunny-Tune-94 [2011-10-09 23:15:09 +0000 UTC]
Not to sound like an ignorant American, but what do you mean by sixth form? ^^'
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Bunny-Tune-94 In reply to SuirenShinju [2011-10-09 23:30:38 +0000 UTC]
In England after we leave school at 16 we can either go to college or sixth form to choose subjects we want to study.
Sixth form is more like school but its not compulsary education so we can go home earlier and have free periods.
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SuirenShinju In reply to Bunny-Tune-94 [2011-10-09 23:54:51 +0000 UTC]
Ah okay. Uh... I never claimed I was arrogant, just ignorant and I did spell it right. You have now confused me XD
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Bunny-Tune-94 In reply to SuirenShinju [2011-10-09 23:56:29 +0000 UTC]
I put arrogant instead of ignorant -_-' I need to pay attention more!
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Bunny-Tune-94 In reply to SuirenShinju [2011-10-09 15:30:00 +0000 UTC]
I know how you feel. I'm writing my own Mias and Elle story but it feels awkward cos I'm 16
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