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Published: 2018-11-01 23:12:08 +0000 UTC; Views: 614; Favourites: 17; Downloads: 0
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"Oh wretch, most profane...Thou who hast desecrated that which we held most dearI bid thee rejoice
For though thou art undeserving of justice, I have come to deliver thee justice
Justice long overdue for the the crime committed against our people
'Tis only fair thou shouldst knowest thy executioner, so allow me an introduction,
I am Fuyumori Shiroki, sole survivor of the Kageyuki clan
Disciple of the great Kazegami Narimoto
The executing hand of Lord Akarai
Lieutenant of the Kitsurai
And by the blood on your hands and the ice in my heart
You shall not live to see the dawn..."
"Oh, hi there!
Unfortunately I don't have such an impressive CV, so you can just call me Ferox"
Right, so I've been imagining this scene for quite a while now and I'm happy to have finally depicted it!
I'm generally happy with the outcome, but I feel it can be even better (at least it's a million times better than the last kitsurai painting... *shudder*) In particular I think I could have played with the lighting a bit more, but oh well.
LORE TIME!
I mentioned earlier that kitsune in my setting don't physically grow extra tails, but during certain techniques ghostly images of extra tails become visible. Each spectral tail corresponds to one "shade" a kitsune can project, i.e. the kitsune can detach a fragment of their consciousness and have it act independently. This feat allows them to overwhelm opponents, perform complex multi-step magic effortlessly and multitask in general.
Critique and feedback is most welcome!
Done in watercolours and black india ink.
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"Oh, hello! I met you when you were only five, remember me? You used to be so cute!"
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"!
You know my dark secret...
OMAE WA MOU SHINDEIROU!!"
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Well, as far as revenge poem goes, that introduction is fine and all. Typical Japanese honor stuffs; hopefully her enemy also abides to tradition the same.
Then again, amusing if it really is the case of your characters interacting 
And as far as portraits go, I'll give this two thumbs up
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Haha, it was actually me poking a bit of fun at those anime battles where one party just goes on forever about their titles and accomplishments 
And unfortunately for her, her opponent here is Ferox, who could care less about etiquette, but that would require effort, and he doesn't care enough about it to put effort into having disdain for it XP
Well, put it like this... her accusations are not untrue, but Ferox does regret what happened. If I ever get around to writing the story then the event in question happens fairly early on.
Thank ye! 
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Okay, then. If you have any more story ideas about these two, do ink em out
Reminds me that so far, none of my (colored) characters (aside from my Zootopia characters) actually interact with one another
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When I saw this I had to say that this is amazing man!
The short scene in the description is also perfect That comedic contrast in tone and time is amazing! X3
And as someone, the great Balimbang calls "good at drawing terrifyingly severe, stern, characters" (Balimbang), the expression of complete severity and hate is perfect!
I also love the simple and subtle design of the fox on her outfit!
I do have a few small critiques mainly in the pose department. The main issue here is from the line of action, which is the flow of the character's body, here it is literally straight from her head to the tip of the fan, posing plays a very important role in enhancing a character's tone and mood, in this case, she is trying to be intimidating, and overwhelming. The metal fan using foreshortening is very good at giving the mood off along with her raised head and disgusted look, but due to her chest being so straight, she comes off as smaller than usual, you want her chest to be puffed out a bit because it makes a person look bigger and stronger than they really are, also it makes them look more confident, which adds to the intimidation. Arching her back more and puffing out her chest also helps solve the fact that her center of gravity is a bit off and she is probably going to fall forward if she stands like that.
Another small critique I have is with the foreshortening of the metal fan, it's a bit too low in the piece. I understand that she is pointing at someone below her, but in a piece like this, it would be better to lower the perspective of her body and not her hand. The reason for this is mainly dependent on the focus point you're trying to achieve. In this case, I am assuming you want the viewer to stare down the end of the fan. Even in a piece like this where the eye attraction is focused on something besides the face, the face still plays a be part in attracting the eye, it's like the Jupiter and the sun on a star map, the sun is obviously the main thing, but you can;t but help to look at Jupiter a bit. The fan is so low in the piece and so far from the face creates an effect where your eyes begin to wander between the two, which is fine, but that large space between the two that it creates a feeling of disconnect in the piece. An easy way to fix this is to bring the item of focus very close to the head. I have a very similar piece with Somber " The Barrel of a Gun " where foreshortening is used to draw focus to an item. By having Somber's expression clearly visible while staring down the barrel of a gun, it kind of combines the feeling in a way. Another thing you can do with the fan's foreshortening is to also have a contrast in detail, this one helps focus eyes more due to detail contrast, but also adds more "character" to the fan, showing that it has been worn and used implying that she knows what she is doing.
One last thing that I would say is to darken the shadows a bit more and have more defined highlights, its night time and even with a full moon its dark outside, and the contrast goes a long way to intensifying the piece. If you don't mind, I did a small amount of editing, I darken the colors and intensified the hue, I would do more in darkening the shadows but that's a bit more difficult. I don't really have a simple fix for this as it is watercolor, which generally is lighter in hue, all I can recommend is, try getting some colored pencils and going in and use the more saturated shade to enhance the shadows. Vengeance By Wickuse Dcqxhwo-pre (Edited)
This is nonetheless an amazing piece! And right after Sister Friede for the best piece you've ever drawn!
I also loed the lore and hope to see how this encounter unfolds X3
I just couldn't wait to talk about the glory of this piece and I won't be critiquing the rest of the inktober stuff because I can't really find much wrong with them, they are all amazing! And most of the issues you actually fix in later ones
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Thank you, 'tis most kind of you to say that! ^_^
Haha, I was actually poking fun at those anime battles where one of the opponents launches into a long winded speech regarding all their titles and accomplishments XD It was largely inspired by this scene: youtu.be/jDXHru70i7U?t=260
Well, as someone who is inclined to agree with the great Balimbang, I am most flattered that you would think that
Thanks! Initially I intended to keep everything a subdued colour, on account of her basically being part of a secret police, but it seemed to be lacking something. So I decided to add a crest, and since Kitsurai is derived from the words for fox and lightning, I went for a lighting fox
Ah, I see what you mean! I should have adjusted her back a little, yeah. One her character traits that I wish to stand out though is that she has a very unassuming physique, and is even a little short, and that most of her intimidation comes from her personality and prowess. Basically that typical "You wouldn't expect that she could be a threat until you're already dead" kinda vibe. But I agree that she should be puffing her chest a bit more, even if it doesn't help her cause
By the time I thought it would work better to add more foreshortening to her body I was already in the process of inking, and there wasn't much to be done except resolving to be better next time 
Aw, your right! I should totally have added scuff marks and little dents to the fan upfront!! Thanks, I shall commit this to memory!
I agree that the contrast could have been much more intense, but I was a little unsure and ended up falling in one of my biggest pitfalls: "playing it safe" Next time I do a piece like this I'll have to look at a lot more references to see how shadows react in low light. Watercolours can achieve quite brilliant hues, actually, I just tend to use them fairly diluted for softer transitions. Basically I'm just not using the medium to it's full potential, but we're working on that! I actually have a set of water soluble pencils, but I don't have much experience combing them with watercolours... methinks some experimentation is in order!
Thank you so much for the incredibly in depth feedback!! Seriously, if my art teacher in high school was even 10% as attentive as you, I might actually have learned something in three years XD
Man... I have most of the story planned out in detail, but I'm just nor sure how to set about starting it! I'm uncertain whether to write it as a book or to make it a comic. I have much more faith in my ability to write a book than to make a comic, but I sorely want to draw almost everything! Maybe it could be a book with a ton of illustrations? I dunno. But I'm happy you found it interesting, it gives me a lot of motivation
Much obliged! And believe me, even I don't have much left to say about the last few Inktober pieces, so you are really excused XD
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No problem man!
I feel that the pose does not affect the intimidating nature of her, as the idea of innocents is looks, expression, and design. I also think my having a more unassuming someone looks, the better the intimidation effect as the contrast amplifies it. In my opinion, the look of a baby point a gun with a death stare at me is more intimidating than a large buff guy doing the same X3
I have no clue about watercolor so XP, but I would love to see what you can do with them!
No problem man! And I know what you mean, at teachers are notorious for lacking feedback, wish I had someone to look at me art back then and now XP
I actually recommend then, to first write out a book, and then adapt it for comic format, so you can have the story down and done, and then all you need is the drawings for the comic!
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I hope she has wards against pyrokentics
Otherwise she'll be getting a face full of fire from me
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Annoyingly enough she seems to be resistant to just about everything except punches, but good luck landing one!
But despair not, for she has a hidden weakness... You see, she was the one who taught Akarai to make tea, and she considers the way his tea turned out to be her biggest failure ever. You pretty much only have to mention it and she will retreat to a corner and start muttering things like "I have brought shame upon my house and my clan!" XD
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Holy Kitsune! I really love this piece.
the expression really shows the enemy won't see the dawn of another day.
Awesome what you did with those ghostly tails, Like the idea and how you drew it.
hahaha I'm not so special i'm just Ferox, XD
Senpai is there still place with the kitsurai?
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Thank ye kindly! 
Yep, just Ferox. At least he's humble about it XP
Why, yes there is! It's inside a dimensional rift in a remote mountain range though. So what looks like just a river and a few trees is actually something the size of a small country. And it looks like Ferox is public enemy number one 
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Most welcoming mate.
wait wut you mostly don't really like how they turn out? C'mon they are very good!
Sure Ferox and humble, doesn't really sounds like they mix good together.
*gets sparkles in eyes*
I'll do my best to find it, i've been through multiple dimensional rifts. Teach me senpai!
XD but flarkin why is Ferox public enimy number one! XD what he did to deserve this title.
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On the one hand I feel a sense of accomplishment, but as the artist I just can't overlook all the mistakes that are made XD I just feel like I can be better.
Yeah, you're right. He's just being sarcastic X3
All shall be revealed! If I ever get around to actually starting the story... -_-
Well, put it like this... none of the accusations Shiroki made are false, but Ferox deeply regrets what happened.
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Stick to the feeling of accomplishment! It's good to see the mistakes you might have made and remember them when making the next artwork. I'm sure the next one will even look better with these earlier mistakes in mind.
yeah sorry i'm really bad at giving advice
I'll wait for it, I know how hard writing story is.
aawh poor Ferox
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Yup, because what else can we really do? 
haha, you give yourself too little credit. A little encouragement can go a very long way!
Actually, if all goes well, I might start working on it over the December holiday!
Yup, the poor little pyromaniac XD
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