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And on to the real chapters here... Time to reintroduce the team and bring everypony up to speed on their "new" problems.
- Polecat
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>βYou gonna buy that tomater
-ββtomatoββ, Iβm pretty sure. (small error)
>Their torso and hips were so emaciated they bordered on skeletal, barely seeming
powerful enough to support their massive bat-like wings.
-I wonder... was this always their (original) description, or was it slightly modified after seeing the episode with the βchangelingsβ ?
>She could put her hoof on a statue that bore her likeness proudly, and yet no pony would connect them together.
-I ββTHINKββ some (honestly, I would say the vast majority that arenβt βsnobsβ or dumb) ponies would recognize her, at this point. Maybe not run after her and hug her, but still...
>I always get chocolate whenever shopping for food,β Skillet answered >βIt keep her from rest of my ingredients.β
-Itβs like cheese with a mouse :3. One pretty hyperactive mouse that can teleport.
>the gryphon as she snapped a carrot slice
>βI thought you only ate meat?β Clockwork asked.
-Griffins eat meat, mostly, BUT! also vegetable and fruits...
>βWe were the heroes of the day, but that day has passed.β
-Yeeeeeeeah... Itβs not like, for real, people normally cling to heroes and movie stars as much as they can(before, during, and after events), or anything, right ? *roll my eyes*
I say : (plot) convenience.
> Clockwork snorted, βYeah rightβ¦ I havenβt had a buckfriend since before this whole thing
started.
-Wait ? What about Galaxi ? ...there was a βthingβ between them, in the last story.
... Whatever they are cooking must be burning by now, with how long they are talking ? ...
>the corruption that led to the creation he-who-must-not-be-named,β
-Voldemort ? Tirak ? ...Pazuzu ?
>βMaybe, but Princess Luna promise that both Galaxi and Tome would be back
-ββpromisedββ ? (small error)
>itβs just too much of a bother to keep turning it on and off for public appearances.β
-Heh. The Princessesβ mane work on an on/off basis, like a (lava-)lamp.
>I seem to recall that Celestia does have a weakness for Cloud Cake.β
-She does LOVE her cakes.
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Well, this first chapter was relatively interesting. From what I got, it was mostly for some exposition and setting the ββmoodββ for the (main) character, from before to now.
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Tomater was intentional. I'm down here in the south, and it's a common alteration, thus I was trying to give the vendor there an accent.
It was always how I envisioned them, but I wanted to re-describe them with some updated skills of mine, plus the knowledge from another reader that "gryphon-like" was a really poor way to describe them. I always envisioned them like Ridley from Metroid honestly.
They could, if pressed, but in the crush of a busy market, who is LOOKING for a celebrity? Everyone/pony just wants to get their stuff and go home...
Skillet knows his marefriend well.
Hey, you brought up gryphon diet that up LAST book, I'm addressing it!
I don't know. In the case of war, people tend to move very quickly beyond it and try to put it behind them. WW2 is a good example. The Greatest generation got their parades and such, but within a year things were pretty much back to "life as normal".
Actually, she and Galaxi were damned good friends, but I never said anything beyond that....
Skillet's a good cook. At that point they were mostly prepping ingredients anyway.
He who must not be named... Your second guess is correct. it's a nod to the previous MLP generations.
Again, Skillet used "promise" there as part of his accent.
I had to explain the difference somehow. I figured I'd just hang a lampshade on it and move on...
Cakelestia LIVES...
Aye, Chapter 1 is usually the set-up, reintroducing the characters and showing how some things have changed. Given your thoughts on Galaxi & Clockwork tho, I'm surprised you didn't mention the end of the chapter...
- Polecat
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"Hang a lampshade..."? You turned Luna INTO a lamp. As Nova255 said, "like a (lava-)lamp." I actually love the idea that they can change their appearances to fit the need. It explains Luna's appearance shift from season 1 to 2 well. So Luna's hair is normally light blue, but she can make it like the night sky. Celestia almost always use her flow-y (?), multi-colored hair, but is her hair normally that pink look that's so popular?
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Well, yes basically. That was the general bit I wanted to address.
- Polecat
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>the gryphon as she snapped a carrot slice
>βI thought you only ate meat?β Clockwork asked.
-Griffins eat meat, mostly, BUT! also vegetable and fruits...
*Hey, you brought up gryphon diet that up LAST book, I'm addressing it!
*cough* --> [link]
Meat AND, at the very least, fruits. Omnivore.
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>WW2 is a good example. The Greatest generation got their parades and such, but within a year things were pretty much back to "life as normal".
-But, in your example, it's a 'standard, non-magical/no super-heroes' reality, and it was still ''generic''(roughly speaking) soldiers VS generic soldiers.
Here, a bit like in comic books (Marvel, DC, etc..), while each sides still have their generic soldier, here we also have (super-)Heroes.
In those (DC, Marvel, etc..) series/books/movies, you don't see (for the most part, except for the occasional 'enthusiastic fan') people running after them, but the majority still recognize them (In their costume, at least. Thinking of Iron Man, Thor, etc... I saw The Avenger, recently).
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>Given your thoughts on Galaxi & Clockwork tho, I'm surprised you didn't mention the end of the chapter...
-Well, I had already mentioned a line about that (them together), and some other comment had already mentioned the ''Oh noes ! He's pushing her out of his heart ?''...
Also, about 'them together', it seemed that was some good ''chemistry'' between those 2, in the previous story ? I could *swear* there was some indication of something probably more...
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As I said, I'm addressing it.
While I'll give you the comic book settings, they would recognize those heroes in costume... not when they're banging around in civvies. Furthermore, I would compare the Specials and what happened with the Imps in a different way than the super hero comics that inspired this story.
They were close as friends. There may or may not have been chemistry... but I go into some of that in later chapters as well. Would you believe CW never really was exposed to the idea of anything other than a stallion/mare couple? Again, I address that as I go, but they never were more than just good friends.
- Polecat
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Oh, and... >Cover Art by Kloudmutt
-I don't see any picture in the page ?
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Mm, that is indeed an unfortunate mental roadblock Clockwork is facing down, she's even pushing Galaxi away...
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Aye, that she is. She's pushing all the ponies away... as you saw in Chapter 2 when she let Trixie have it...
- Polecat
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Yeah... if memory serves, she's essentially going through PTSD? Or something similar, I forget the exact symptoms.
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PTSD, yes. I don't know if I'm doing it exactly, I'm having to rely on a pre-reader I'm using to keep it close to the symptoms, since I don't truly know PTSD myself. So yeah... there may be a bit of creative license in there on it too...
- Polecat
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Mm, well it seems pretty close to how I understand it at least.
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Sounds like what soldiers go through when coming home from a war. Poor Clockwork is the kind that has difficulty adapting. Those situations don't end well for them.
Good flow to the story BTW. Enjoying what you've laid out so far.
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Aye, you hit it on the head, PTSD (Post traumatic stress disorder). It CAN end well, but one has to learn to adapt, but Clockwork is trying to do it on her own so far, yes?
And thanks. Don't worry, there's a LOT of story left to go. I don't know where the end is, as of yet, but I know it's a good ways off (I anticipate more chapters that book 1 )
- Polecat
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Part of getting through an mental trauma is getting help from your friends. Clockwork pushing her friends aside and trying to deal with it herself is only going to make it worse me thinks. Poor mare.
That's means the ending will be a surprise even to you.
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Aye, Poor Clockwork.
And no, I have the entire arc outlined and know where it'll end, I just don't know how long/how many chapters it will take to reach that point. At the moment, it's a good way off, for sure.
- Polecat
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Of course. Still might be fun to fly by the seat of your pants in pursuit of an ending, sort of in Pinkie Pie-esque fashion.
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I've done that before, but with as many moving parts as this one has, I couldn't do it. It was simply too complex.
- Polecat
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Yes, I see. It's very ambitious of you. I hope it works out.
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So far so good.
- Polecat
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I hope those "plasma heating elements" aren't really plasma heating elements. Otherwise your cookware will catch on fire.
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Well considering Clockwork uses Plasma Bolts from her machine, I think she has a slightly different understanding of them (more comic-book like) than the reality of Plasma.
- Polecat
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So then the answer is "Yes, those "plasma heating elements" don't actually use plasma."?
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So then those plasma heated elements would use it as a base element to conduct the heat to a separate cooking surface. It would be powered by a central core with a heated "element" fed off it to heat a separate and free-standing heated pad. In short, it'd work fine, but you couldn't have the plasma directly on the heating element, you'd need a containment separate that uses it to heat the element at will.
Yes I majored in technobabble.
- Polecat
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It's not quite technobabble. You could use plasma to conduct heat a surface for cooking. It's just crazy inefficient, and an engineering nightmare to boot.
I'm justing to going to believe that she's made the common mistake of believing fire is a plasma, and the stove is really an ordinary gas range.
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Like I said before, this is the comic book version of Plasma....
- Polecat
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I don't even know that that means.
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I know this comment was posted almost a month ago but, here are my two cents. In the comic book universe, physics don't follow the same rules. A super hero/villain can grab the prow of a full super-tanker and lift and instead of ripping off a little sheet metal and a few bolts, the ship and it's 200 tons of cargo will be lifted vertically. Later, that hero/villain may be standing on the third floor of a building, punch someone and send them flying 50 ft through several reinforced steel girders without moving an inch despite the fact that to generate enough friction to arrest their movement, they would need to weigh several thousand pounds and subsequently break through the floor. In summery, physics and comics don't mix. In comics, when you want to say something is advanced of "high tech", it is either uses "plasma" or it is nuclear. A "plasma" stove is just a stove created with advanced technology.
I need to stop commenting at one in the morning. I either make a complete fool of myself or just take things way to seriously. Sometimes I even do both!
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It's a PDF file. I think (I don't know for sure) that if you don't have a PDF reader on your browser, it can't view it. Unfortunately Deviant Art didn't allow me to post the larger chapters I've been writing in any other format without breaking them into multiple posts.
- Polecat
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The elements of justice, with their leader...PHOENIX WRIGHT!!! Oh if only it were that easy. Loving this so far, can't wait for more.
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Mwahaha. it's NEVER that easy.
- Polecat
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Intelligence Vs. Wisdom
It's a difference in whether you can have lots of information on the mind or be very smart in small bursts of cunning.
Personally a bit of wisdom goes a long way and can give one great perspective, whereas intelligence tries to fight nature instead of working with it but has power behind it like none other. "Knowledge is power, power is pain. If you had to ask, why should I explain?" In essence knowledge will always lead to pain for someone, somewhere at some given time. Just because you don't have a lot of intelligence doesn't mean you can't be wise and vise versa, but both at the same time and you have a David Xanatos in whoever posssesses those traits. Basically the ability to gambit things to your advantage no matter the circumstance without relying on luck or sheer grit to save you.
Last Thought: It's always the most quiet before a storm and I'm guessing where all this is going to soon, I'm good at predicting things given enough variables to work with like the changelings coming up in that episode before they made a full appearance. Anybody with a knowledge of the Fae will tell you trouble is on the horizen. In any case it's nice to see Clockwork has the normal life blues, adds a bit of realism to her character whereas Flourish is still just as surreal as she ever was.
The greatest super power anything could have is the power of adaptation... AMAZO proves as much by being a literal Deus Ex Machina in being able to plow through anything with super powers. Clockwork works against the flow in unexpected ways... I've always been a bit of a philosophical reader haven't I?
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Aye, that's often how it's considered. Usually a person has a decent balance at both, but if you have an extreme amount of one, usually the other suffers a bit.
This is still the warm up, so the storm is still rumbling in the distance.
- Polecat
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