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OH LOOK! SUCCESSFUL USE OF DIAGONAL PANELS! W00T!
Uh... Yeah. I had this page 95% finished on thursday night, when dad yelled at me to go to sleep. And on Friday, i had the holiday part with my friends and Saturday I felt kinda sick and slept and... I have many excuses for why this wasn't posted sooner, but I don't think you really wanna hear them
In any case, this page is better than the last one (I sincerely hope, anyway). But WOW, I have no idea how to draw a handgun. And I, uh, couldn't get a ref because I was at school and yeah, awkward much and so on... So I just sorta made it up XD But I got to draw more runes!! Yay!
Kept the BG a LOT lighter this time around, so it should be easier to read and understand what's happening and all.
I don't know what the @#$% Asylum's leg is doin' in panel 3. He needed to look like he's moving, but I couldn't get it to look right and oh well, it came out ok. Or something.
Cier was originally grinning maniacally again in panel 1 but it looked weird, so she's sort like 'eh' instead.
OH GOD, I AM SO SICK RIGHT NOW @_@ *CoughHackWheezeDead*
Cier is (c) ~NightHead
Asylum is (c) Me
The Cure is
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Personally I loved the brief flashback. It made me double back and check it again because I realized that wasn't Cier's hand. Actually I think the gun looks pretty good!
Cier's 'eh' expression works well.
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Well to be honest I didn't know -where- the flashback was from, but I could certainly tell when I looked back at it again and put some thought into it that something was different here.
If it was the hand of the robot girl (her name escapes me now) maybe it would be more obvious with the blue circuits I think she had on her skin?
Personally I like thinking it was some past event even further back than entering the hospital, but that's just me.
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What's the story behind panel five? A flashback or a hallucination, maybe... Either way it looks awesome. <3
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Given that this is Asylum we're talking about... Perhaps both?
(Hint: Think Round 1)
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EGAD!!!! O_O
I curse your ability to draw hands once again!!! D8<
I hope you get to feeling better!
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I take it Panel 5 is him hallucinating? 8O That's my guess. Herher. Awesome, AS ALWAYS. Panel 4 is...really rather frightening. His cheekbones freak me out. XD In a good way, though. I hate to see what her arm's gonna look like. *cringes* I hope you feel better sooooon! DX *pats back*
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Or remembering. Take your pick.
^_^ Thanks. Yeah, her arm... Isn't going to be pretty. There's not going to be any close ups or anything, but still...
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Err, that's what I meant. Hallucinating a memory? Does that make sense? XD Ouchies. >.<
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XD When we're talking about Sy, it does.
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Don't worry, it's neither going to be shown up close nor that graphic... Probably.
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Heh heh, graphic... blloooooooood!!!
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Mmm... Not much blood involved with Acid Burns. Gorey melted flesh? Possibly.
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Im curious what is asylum's voice supposed to sound like when he speaks? Also how well would he handle radiation, and electricution? Dose his anatomy differ from humans, like dose have organs that humans don't, or dose have extra organs that humans do have (like two hearts, that kind of thing), or is he plain lacking certian organs? How do you get those runes by the way because they really kick ass?
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This may sound silly, but I've always imagined him sounding an awful lot like what Trent Reznor sounds like in this song- [link]
Radiation is an interesting case. He'd deal with long term low-level exposure MUCH better than humans do (i.e., he doesn't/can't get cancer in the typical sense) but he'd be affected by high-level exposure the same way (radiation burns, radiation sickness, etc.). He might be able to recover better/quicker/at all, since his body fights off anomalies within itself very well, but that'd depend on just how exposed he was. Needless to say, if you dropped him in a nuclear reactor or blow him up with a hydrogen bomb, he's not coming back out, incredible toughness aside.
He'll handle electrocution about the same as humans in the '
His anatomy actually does differ from humans, in rather... Unusual... ways. Aside from his entire body apparently being made of tougher stuff and the fact that he has Black Light Acid in literally half the liquids in his body (most prominent being blood and tears and have I told you this before? I can't remember), his joints and muscles have some odd qualities to them. Despite having spent a very long period more or less completely inactive, his muscles seem resistant to atrophying and his joints seem capable of much more motion than normal human ones, although he rarely takes advantage to show it. And I don't just mean double-jointed, I mean 'holy crap, how is that physically possible' jointed. Not to mention he doesn't always seem to fit properly in his own skin (and I don't mean in the metaphorical sense). As a general rule, there are a ton of small oddities about his body that aren't usually noticeable unless you're paying attention. People around him can't help but get the sense something about him is 'off' though...
He might also either have an extra organ in his body humans don't and/or two of a certain organ... Which is it? Well... That'd be spoiling, eh?
The runes? I actually make those just by doodling squiggles and adding dots and lines until they look rune-ish. And add a layer filter to make them grow. That's about it. I'm glad ya like them though!
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Out of curriosity when do your Asylum story will he have a love interest? If so what species will he or she be?
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No love interests, sorry. Well, no outright ones. I do imply things that could be taken as him and another character being interested in one another, but I don't really plan on him getting paired up with anybody, mostly because I honestly don't think it'd work out with any of the characters in a way that'd make for a healthy relationship. All of whom, by the way, are human.
The story's pretty much 'gen' at the end of the day, y'know? I feel like I haven't created the right character for Asylum to end up with, but I balk at doing so for fear that pairing him up with them would be the only reason they existed, and that'd make them a Sue, and... Yeh. No love interests unless something drastic changes.
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Hah, nice panneling and the sword to gun trick is something she would definetly do 
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Thank you. I'm really sorry about the OOC bit, I've been trying, but I just can't seem to get the hang of her... I hope it's not too bad...
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I'M SORRY FOR GETTING YOU SICK!!!!
The page looks nice though....
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If you hadn't mentioned the getting me sick thing, I don't think I'd have immediately recognized you because of the icon change O_o;
In any case, you're forgiven. Especially since Dad is letting me stay home today
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so that's why you're not at school...
BTW- I need K-chan's contact stuff so I can register her on Anime Boston too
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I'll send it to y as soon as I get it, she just hasn't responded yet.
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It looks a little wierd in panel 5 and 6. Sy has a hold of her arm and there is no black ooze stuff and Cier is not holding her gun in 5.
Then it jumps to panel 6 and she is back to holding her gun again.
The artwork looks amazing. Don't be too hard on yourself. You do amazing work. Hey, your the one who has to do the writing, directing and artwork. And you came up with an original character. This looks amazing for doing all of those 3 as one.
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Perhap Panel 5 is a flashback or hallucination?.. Think back to Round 1...
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Page looks great, the gun looks good even though you didn't have a ref. I hope you feel better soon.
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You're welcome.
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Shadow sword to shadow gun...cool but kind of a cheat but at least he had grabbed her arm,that'll be a good trade off since he'll only feel the pain while Cier gets acid on her.
Nice job on the 3rd and 4th panel,very intense and dramatic.
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Yeah, that's... Kind of a weird thing about this battle. Her powers are specifically meant to cause pain, his powers just cause a lot of pain by nature
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Well,at least he won't die though the length of the pain lingering there is still a question in my head
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It lingers for a while. Watch how Asylum holds himself throughout the rest of the pages, he's usually going to be slumped with his right arm hanging loosely and his other arm wrapped around his stomach...
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Reasonable reactions to such attacks that though somewhat improbable in reality but believable in fiction
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DAY-YAMN the first two panels are superfine.
Actually, I like it better with Cier having an βehβ expression in the first panel. It actually ends up being a lot more evil and menacing that way, because it seems to say, βno matter- Iβll just shoot him then.β
The problem with Syβs leg in panel three is mostly his left foot; it should be flexed upward more in that kind of sprint. Thereβs also some congruency issues with the rest of his body:
1) his torso should twist a little more at that speed, and be angled more toward the foremost leg (twisted away from us).
2) It just doesnβt seem like his back leg is stretched far back enough in comparison to his leading leg. In this frame, his back leg would be in itβs backmost extension, with his foot just starting to leave the ground; in some cases, it might help to exaggerate that extension to give him more speed.
(Long explanation is long. And probably confusing)
I actually think some of the cooler gun designs come from no-reference moments. I think it works particularly well here, because Cier isnβt human, and wouldnβt have any average human gun.
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Yeh, I see what you mean on all of that. Man, I just can't draw people running or walking. Hands? No problem. Backflips? Sure. Walking? Nooooo. Not for lack of trying either... Anyways, thanks for the advice. I think I forget how the body twists when you run a lot... and I never seem to know what to do with the feet...
XD Probably because that way they don't have to make logical sense. But yeah, that was exactly my train of thought.
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ouch. didn't think that was how he was going to attack... well, ouch if Cier is actually able to get hurt by it...
hope you get better!
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In panel five... Why do I get the feeling that it's not from the here and now?
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Oh, you know... Prolly 'cause it's not 
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Bah, man, I love Sy's head. I realize it's not a mind one would aspire for, but I love how well you've got it developed, and all the subtle stuff you put in! Very engaging.
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What the-!? The blade changes forms!? Oh boy.
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Thanks! Intense is a good thing, man, I can totally live with that!
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Also worth mentioning is his eyebrows.
They're splenderiffic. I want to know where he gets them done.
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So basically what you're sayig is that in order to get beautiful curved eyebrows, all I have to do is get myself checked into an insane asylum...? Hmmm...
I think I'll start with distrubing the Peace....Then I'll gradually move my way up from there.
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It's good to have goals! Work for your dreams!... And perfectly shaped eyebrows!
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-sparkly eyes- I will! With the power of heart and mind, I can accomplish anything! -grabs a chainsaw- Tee hee.
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