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RioQuin [2011-02-06 00:49:51 +0000 UTC]
(As an unrelated comment, I keep reading your signature)
I think this is a great short story, at gives all the details without having to point out each one exactly (even though I still don't know what tweed material looks like). It's well written without much in the way of spelling mistakes, and any grammar errors are constrained to the dialouge alone, where grammar errors are acceptable.
On the plot itself- a very creative way of defining how the pack deals with those that threaten it, when faced with them. It shows that as a group, the pack seems ruthless, but on an individual level, it is as complex and disorderly as any other so-called organizations with people who are outcasted, outright, and just plain against its teaching. It goes on to describe of one particular threat, whose popularity is where the problem was laid.
I'd go on to write about the characters, setting, and maybe even the theme and farther into the plot, but I'm not on the critque list. I enjoyed reading this, as it was both a sober tale, and relatable subject.
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RioQuin In reply to TheTinkerThinker [2011-02-06 10:11:20 +0000 UTC]
There's a lot to think about when I read something. Literature is something of a passion with me (as is art, and everything else dA has to offer). So, it really isn't a problem, I enjoy writing. ^^
And I shall read the other story, too. ^^
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RioQuin In reply to TheTinkerThinker [2011-02-06 10:41:07 +0000 UTC]
I enjoy your art just as much as I enjoy your stories. The level of the depth does affect the way I review and think about the story, but also it just depends, like when I have my creative bouts (which happen at such awkward times, admittedly).
Unfinished stories usually have a lot of detail, plot development, and even amazing characteristisms, it's just they usually lack a conclusion in the plot. XD
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KigaWeirdo [2010-09-25 19:56:53 +0000 UTC]
A lot better than I had expected from the start. I like it a lot, actually. Very well written. :3
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Leonca [2010-09-16 03:05:09 +0000 UTC]
You have a unique writing style. Very enjoyable. Details like the shredded pamphlet being carried away in the wind stand out and really help move the scenes along at a brisk pace. I also like Weatherman’s character, with how serious and focused he is.
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TheTinkerThinker In reply to Leonca [2010-09-16 05:17:07 +0000 UTC]
Art trades kinda involve "I draw what you want and you draw what I want" exchanges but that might not work as well with writing.
I was wondering if we could both do a scenario piece of a chance encounter between one of our characters, from different angles.
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Leonca In reply to TheTinkerThinker [2010-09-16 05:53:23 +0000 UTC]
That could be fun, each writing our own interpretation of the same scenario with both characters.
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TheTinkerThinker In reply to Leonca [2010-09-16 08:18:02 +0000 UTC]
I'm itching to write about Hunter again. How about you?
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Leonca In reply to TheTinkerThinker [2010-09-16 20:11:58 +0000 UTC]
Sure. I’m still getting the hang of writing for Sombra, but I think they’d have some interesting interactions. Should we each just come up with our own scenario for what happens?
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TheTinkerThinker In reply to Leonca [2010-09-17 00:07:09 +0000 UTC]
Sure!
I reckon it'll be a blast of a encounter (if there's anything left) XD
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