Comments: 64
ashimbabbar [2014-07-03 22:57:49 +0000 UTC]
it's a clever story, I like the narrator's harrassed, bleak perspective and the way the personalities spawned ( never mind that it's not an accurate representation of D.I.D. )
speaking of actual D.I.D., I'd be interested to know whether you've read Daniel Keyes' 2 books on the Billy Milligan case ?
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TheVoiceofMadness In reply to ashimbabbar [2014-07-04 03:19:22 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad that you enjoyed it, and now I haven't read those books.
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Morticia-Lynne [2014-07-02 07:03:15 +0000 UTC]
Though I felt slightly offended while reading this, it's entirely forgivable due to the wonderful piece it is.
Dialogue, storyline, creativity and quite the turn of events made this a piece to remember.
Also, was there a hint of relativity to the five stages of grief in this somehow? Though not directly, it seems to have enough brushes that it just enthralled me all the more.
A absalotely stunning piece of work, that reminds me of classic psychology-based stories. (and gives me a feeling of nostalgia as well as rebirth for literature.)
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Mazdi In reply to dreameroftheblue [2014-07-03 17:17:40 +0000 UTC]
Jeepers this is literally the same thought I had! haha
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C-A-Harland [2014-07-02 05:07:52 +0000 UTC]
This was great. I loved the five personalities, and the reasoning behind the creation of each one.Β
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TheVoiceofMadness In reply to Scr1b3 [2014-07-02 03:52:34 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad that you like it enough to want more, but I don't think that a sequel would work out as well as I'd like.
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ThyRoyalAwesomeness [2014-07-02 03:18:14 +0000 UTC]
This is truly amazing. Not only is the story intriguing, but the grammar and punctuation is nearly perfect, not to mention its easy to read, especially considering the situation you chose to write about. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
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ThyRoyalAwesomeness In reply to TheVoiceofMadness [2014-07-02 03:23:07 +0000 UTC]
I'm telling the truth. I rarely ever find writers at this level, and most of them are grammatical messes. Its a good story and I'm very glad i got to read it.
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miistical [2014-07-02 02:46:47 +0000 UTC]
You deserve that DD, that was quite enjoyable to read! And I usually hate these type of pieces! Very well done indeed.
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HypnosiShannon [2014-07-02 02:34:21 +0000 UTC]
Whoa, you got DD? Now I feel like a hipster for reading it when you posted it lol.
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TheVoiceofMadness In reply to TheGalleryOfEve [2014-07-02 02:19:25 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so very much! I still can't believe that I made DD, to be honest when I saw all the feedback messages I assumed that I had done something to make people mad Β
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nightshade-keyblade [2014-07-02 00:16:58 +0000 UTC]
Incredible. The way you managed to create all those personae and the dynamic between them is so believable. You also did a fantastic job of the detective's analytical skills.
Bravo!
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TheTigeressWithin [2014-07-01 21:40:30 +0000 UTC]
This was great! I like how you displayed the different personalities of Mr. Five.
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TheVoiceofMadness In reply to TheTigeressWithin [2014-07-01 23:49:01 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I tried hard to make each personality different in every way possible.
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nothing-creative [2014-07-01 21:39:46 +0000 UTC]
This is a very interesting concept, for sure! I liked the word choice and writing style of this, as well as the simple ending. It made sense, and the logic wasn't too difficult to follow. Nice job, and congrats on the DD.
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TheVoiceofMadness In reply to nothing-creative [2014-07-01 23:49:38 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I'm really excited and surprised by how this story blew up overnight.
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nothing-creative In reply to TheVoiceofMadness [2014-07-02 00:09:51 +0000 UTC]
It definitely deserves the attention!
And you're most definitely welcome.Β
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TinyandHuge [2014-07-01 20:05:22 +0000 UTC]
epiciness!
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N-Lovad [2014-07-01 16:57:38 +0000 UTC]
I really liked the concept you wrote about (guy having to question someone with unreliable personalities), though I thought making it longer and more detailed would actually make it better. I didn't get a good sense of Douglas' personality the first time reading it, and not so much of Peter's either. But, I still liked it. And the clipboard guy was cool.
Joseph sounds like a 19th century Englishman...
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TheVoiceofMadness In reply to N-Lovad [2014-07-01 23:53:41 +0000 UTC]
I also wanted to make it a bit longer when I first wrote it, but it was designed for a contest in my area that had a limit on word count so I shaved a few details that weren't absolutely necessary. I'm glad that you liked it!
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DragonFireArt [2014-07-01 16:41:41 +0000 UTC]
I never read the short stories on here, but you pulledΒ me in after the first few sentences!
Amazing story! I had lots of fun reading it.
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neurotype-on-discord [2014-07-01 15:31:44 +0000 UTC]
Is this set in the sixties? It just seemed like that to me.
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TheVoiceofMadness In reply to neurotype-on-discord [2014-07-01 23:51:13 +0000 UTC]
I had a sixties vibe in mind when I wrote it, but to be honest I didn't think I knew enough about the time period to make it specifically in that time period. I decided instead to leave the time setting open to the reader's interpretation.
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TheVoiceofMadness In reply to neurotype-on-discord [2014-07-02 01:48:31 +0000 UTC]
That's a good point. I'm going to leave it as is however, I like to have each story stay as it was when I put it up so that I can go back and see how I've changed as a writer.
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straygod [2014-07-01 14:26:58 +0000 UTC]
this is really well written but it's a shame to see another good work of fiction or writing about DID that describes the individual as insane or locked up in an an institute and completely deranged. Β i am diagnosed with DID and i found some of the concepts here misunderstood and poorly represented. Β it brought up some pretty strong emotions and i'm frustrated with the idea that these kinds of representations of this condition continue to be disseminated. Β
treatment for this disorder should never involve the 'original' attempting to force the others from the mind. Β these kinds of ideas actually damage the patient further, and long term treatment is designed to find ways of allowing each part to communicate and work together in order to reduce the amount of dissociation and lost time, and recover suppressed trauma in order to explore and deal with uncovered issues in therapy. Β in reality there isn't an original part; the splitting occurs in childhood and doesn't allow for a fully cohesive personality to ever form. Β DID can't be created in adulthood, but suppressed parts often emerge during adulthood which can give the appearance of it manifesting as an adult.
i realise it probably wasn't your intention to be offensive here but i found the ideas written and described abuse incredibly triggering. Β if you'd like to learn more about DID please throw me a note.
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TheVoiceofMadness In reply to straygod [2014-07-01 23:56:50 +0000 UTC]
I'm sorry that you feel that way, it wasn't my intention to offend anybody. I wasn't trying to base Mr. Five on actual DID, just an easier-to-write version of my own creation. I designed his disorder to make the story faster paced and easier to understand, not to reflect actual DID. I'm very sorry if I offended you, I wasn't trying to make any statements or promote any stereotypes. I just wanted to entertain my readers.
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straygod In reply to TheVoiceofMadness [2014-07-02 00:14:22 +0000 UTC]
the problem is that it's generally assumed that the above representation is the normal experience of multiples and using mental health problems in exaggerated ways like this only furthers fear and ignorance and the isolation felt by multiples. Β for a very long time i was terrified by the idea of coming out about my diagnosis because of the way i might be perceived because of the erroneous ideas circulating. Β would you use an exaggeration of a physical disability as a character trait or definition because it might entertain your audience? Β it's the same concept. Β DID is based in trauma - it's a survival mechanism. Β those who develop DID have generally experienced massive abuse - physically, emotionally, mentally and spiritually, often all of them, to such extremes that their personality bifurcated. Β so using it as an entertainment is kind of offensive. Β
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TheVoiceofMadness In reply to straygod [2014-07-02 01:54:32 +0000 UTC]
I'm not saying that the story is entertaining because I'm exaggerating a disorder, I'm saying that I only exaggerated the disorder for the sake of the narrative. I know that DID doesn't cause dangerous behavior, and I wasn't trying to say that it does. I'm very sorry that I offended you.
Let me try to explain my thought process: When I write a story, I'm creating a hypothetical world where reality, space, time, and people behave the way that I decide. With that in mind, I decided that in this world there could be a disorder similar to (although much more dangerous and extreme than) a disorder that I've heard of but know nothing about. I thought of it the same way that I would think of giving a character magic powers. Of course it isn't realistic, but the magic is interesting and adds a bit to the narrative. Mr. Five's disorder isn't supposed to be realistic by any means, it's only supposed to be interesting.
Again, I'm sorry that I offended you and I didn't mean to offend anybody when I wrote this.
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EskeltheIceMaster [2014-07-01 10:32:02 +0000 UTC]
Amazing, you sir, are a genius. Β
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