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Published: 2009-02-17 06:51:33 +0000 UTC; Views: 2623; Favourites: 76; Downloads: 28
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---i.
tonight you are building a man out
of blankets and pressing your face where
his neck would be. you close
your eyes and pretend your pulse
is his and bite your lip and try
so hard not to cry.
ii.
tonight you are looking for a man
who sees the shadows in the way
you hold your wrists. he could.
he could, so you know it's possible.
iii.
tonight you are not beautiful but you
are so broken.
iv.
tonight you slam your fists against the
wall and wonder what it is about you
that is so easy to walk away from.
what it is about you that is
so easy to leave behind.
v.
tonight the man with a pillow face
is softer than the body you used to climb
but it's all you have.
you'll take it. it's better than being alone.
vi.
tonight you press yourself
closer to a memory until you can
feel it digging into your skin.
it hurts, you think,
but it's something real.
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wow. i love the last part.
your writing is so honest and genuine!
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i and iv are the best. <3 You're absolutely amazing.
I've only clicked on three of your pieces and I've loved all of them.
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very very stunningly beautiful. so amazing it makes me want to weep with the realistic flair you put into romantic words.
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thank you SO much.
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stating the obvious is no problem at all.
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I tried my best not to cry when I read this, it felt so real.
Feeling like this is so... destructive (at least for me)
*holds her blanket-man tight*
I loved it. keep up the awsome work <3
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it is destructive... it's that feeling at night that makes me want to... hurt myself to cover up a different sort of pain. most of these nights have passed, now, but every now and again the feeling creeps up on me and I find myself crying myself to sleep.
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oh my goodness. you are so talented.
this took me somewhere, thank you
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i thought all this can only be felt... i never thought i would read something like this!!! well written, must say
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thank you... this poem is a testament to some of my hardest and loneliest nights.
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so thats the strength of your lines and i want to thank you.
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Its beautiful... You've managed to capture the way i've felt in a way I couldn't even explain if I tried.. its absoluetly amazing..
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I'm glad it meant something to you, and sorry you've had to feel this way... it's a terribly lonely and heartwrenching feeling.
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I could just see this midnight scene with this person and these pillows and the window open with the moonlight leaving an image of squares on the bodies.
And I think this is spectacular.
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"a man who sees the shadows in the way you hold your wrists"
this brought me somewhere different, for sure.
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powerful powerful poem
with amazing imagery
"tonight you are building a man out
of blankets and pressing your face where
his neck would be." 
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Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) and has been selected as our “ Pick of the Day”. It is featured in a news article here: [link] and on our main page.
Keep writing and keep creating.
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thank you so, amazingly much.
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It was our pleasure
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I generally don't like poems in second person, but this is absolutely gorgeous.
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This is so beautiful and tragic and so close to home...
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if i cried, i would cry now.
part one killkillkillkilled me in a very brutal manner. you'll hear about it on the news.
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intensely sad and it colours my eyes all sorts of blacks and blues (with very small, smudged splatters of yellow).
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you, my dear, are one hell of a writer.
you are also a great bed buddy
love you!
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oh my god I had no idea who you were at first and I freaked out. but then I got it.
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You surprise me everytime. I never think it can get better but then it does. This is so sad, but very beautiful. It really does sound like how I think things. Bravo, once more.
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that means so much to me, honestly. I hope you're doing well.
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I am, I hope things are getting better for you too... It sounds like things are really hard for you right now, but i hope that things start to go better...
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I absolutely love this! Great job.
vi.
tonight you press yourself
closer to a memory until you can
feel it digging into your skin.
it hurts, you think,
but it's something real.
(holy shit)
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thank you.
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All of it was worth posting, that one is just the perfect ending to it.
You're welcome
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This one works really really well... I think its the way you've broken it into a few sentences within most of the stanzas... like
"but it's all you have.
you'll take it. it's better than being alone."
it feels very similar to the levels of voice in your mind when you read it in your head
[my attempt at a sensible comment
sadly, I think sometimes the broken things are the most beautiful
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you don't sound pretentious at all! never fear.
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