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thomasnl β Improvisation V
Published: 2005-07-03 00:16:35 +0000 UTC; Views: 253; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 3
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Through our mindswe see a hole
That leads into
the inner soul
A righteous path,
a dark one though
And if we enter
it shall close
And once weβre in
we cannot go
We cannot leave
for we are whole
We finally live,
we finally know
So many stories
went untold
Yet where we go
itβs not the same
We have no home,
we have no name
We have no love,
we have no games
We have but
righteousness to claim
We live with hope that we are free
We live to live and not to be
And all the chaos makes me see
My freedom lies only in me
To live outside this living world
To love the love and not the girl
To feel the pain and not the wound
To find the lies behind the truth
That is what life is all about
No second thoughts,
no fear, no doubt
We never cry
we never sleep
And we acknowledge
we are free
Comments: 4
The first part really struck me as some kind of a revelation or so.. you know.. like a prediction in some fairy tale... Amazing...
But slowly the poem changed for me and it became some common truth, but very well thought-through and also very nicely put.
As a whole this one has kept a strong mystery to me... which I like very much 
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I was thinking of some fairytale introduction when I wrote the first bit...I think
Huge thanks for the 
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Yeah I think you managed very well
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