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thank you so much for the interesting critique! ^^
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I love the picture. I love it so much. I think you're better in making black and white drawings because they tend to look better than the coloured ones. I like the leafy shadows thingy on the person's shirt, and I just love your strokes they are so perfect! And the faces shadow like thing on the left looks like just one but then copied and faded using the clone tool XD And the face of the person looks very real although the whole drawing doesn't suit with the name. But the line that came from the person's chin is a bit out. Probably need to be thinner. And I just realised, I like your signature e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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Thank you very much for a great critique!
>>And the faces shadow like thing on the left looks like just one but then copied and faded using the clone tool XD
No, all of these faces was made separately, you can check it in Photoshop - they are not "copied-pasted" ^^
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Yep. If I look properly, I can see that clearly. The mouth is slightly different. But everything else about it is so precise!
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A very noble expression of the painted person's feeling AND thoughts. There is a certain sadness around the girl and a question in her eyes covering the will of her soul, which seems strong but insecure of its capability to reach its aim. In any case the girl does not seem to be an introverted person, but lost in a world which does not show anymore interest in her spirit. The game of black and white expresses this state on the one hand and shows on the other hand that the artist is able to express her soul without a host of crying colours, but in a very fine and clear way, which is really impressing!!
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The only two colors used.
Black and white.
I think the artist has lost his colored pencils.
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Thank you very much for an amazing critique!
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No prob! I am honoured you requested it 😊
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The style of art you do is very beautiful to me. You do a mixture of abstract and normal art all in one witch in my opinion seems very hard to do. To have an imagination so strong that you can put to completely different styles of art into one. In my opinion, You have perfect vision, originality, technique, and impact!! Now don't let my complements get to your head! After all, i'm only twelve so I don't have much experience in art yet. But no matter what, You keep making art work that's even better than this one okay? You have a great talent. Don't let it go to waste! You're AMAZING!! ^-^
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Thank you for an awesome critique!
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I like this as experimentation and applaude the effort, but as a finished piece it is not integrated and the disparate elements compete. My primary issue is with the silhouettes; specifically the heavy, cut-out, flat black face, which overwhelms the delicacy of the image. It's repetition in flat grays is overdone, as if you don't expect the audience to "get it." Simply put, that huge face demands attention. It pulls the eye into itself and sticks the viewer there, unable to move around the whole of the image.
Remember the eye must be free to move. This is an example of how one element can 'trap' the eye. Its dominance makes the rest of the drawing almost inconsequential, as it overwhelms the delicate face. The heavy black slashes work much better as they intrude without overwhelming the fine painting, and due to the break in those black slashes, your eye is directed to the face where it belongs. The error is one of melding competing, dissimilar technique. The cut-outs add very little and give that part of the image an uninteresting cartoonish feel, whereas the right side is delicate and moving.
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Thank you for the critique!
But, by the way, if you was not impressed (Impact = 2 stars), why did you wrote a critique? ^^
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Toughen up, kid. Oh, I am impressed with the direction of your work, but it is far from the height of perfection, right? If you ask for a critique, once in a while you'll get a real one and guess what? Everything you produce isn't brilliant, dynamic, technically excellent, or visionary, yet! (None is.) Any artwork has elements that work and those that don't, even with the likes of Matisse. You asked for an assessment, I gave you a fair one. If what you are after is only praise, you really shouldn't ask for a critique, because that is not the purpose of a critique. Critiques are about pointing out areas that don't work, and those that do. Take it or leave it. I wrote a critique for you because you have talent, and assumed you would take a fair, specific assessment in order to better your work. How would YOU grade that piece? Is it really the best of the best of the best of your work? Does it really deserve The Best of all Possible Praise? No. The piece would be far more powerful with tight cropping and an elimination of the black cut-outs all together. The face is marvelous - very touching, but it's the WHOLE that must be considered when you ask for critiques - not just the good parts. Making art, and being an artist, requires a tough exterior. I don't know if you are in school, but take it from me, a real art critique is blood in the water - they do not spare you. Nor do the galleries that might take on you work. You'll receive many praises and many knocks along the way - it's what you do with them that makes the difference.
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Well, there is no "perfection" in fine arts at all. It is not a math: you can't be "right" or "wrong" when you paint. Other people can say that they "like it" or "not like it", but every opinion is subjective. That's the basis of modern art: impressionism, expressionis, surrealism, dada, cubism, surpematism, etc. It's an important factor when you're trying to make a really good critique. There is no "The Best of all Possible Praise" at all - I hope that you're joking when you're writing this, especially if you're claiming that you have a competence in art history. Critique is always subjective - it's just a kind of opinion, and there is no "best opinion" or "worst opinion". You said something about "height of perfection"? Fine arts have no pinnacle at all. All the ratings are subjective too, they exist in a heads of viewers, but not in an objective world. I hope that this text will be useful to you. Good day! ^^
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Of course you are right. I was just taken aback by your comment. To ask for a critique then wonder why I would give one if it wasn't, what . . . ? at least a 3?? surprised me.
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Wonderful work, you're really good at capturing those emotions that are just too hard for many of us to put down on paper, but are still experienced.
For me, this speaks volumes, it's rather close to heart. On a personal level I disagree with one of the critiques saying about the black silhouette being too overbearing for the image; for me that is a very good representation of the level of despair loneliness can bring at any one time. The shadows fading away represent to me the times when loneliness subsides; but it is still there, just in the background.
Then again, I could just be projecting my own thoughts and feelings onto it! I think it all works really well
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wow, thank you for the really interesting comment. I liked to read it ^^
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thank you so much ^^
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You have my gratitude.
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A strong relationship between the viewer and the art piece. Magnificent!
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thank you very much!^^
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очень интересная композиция, и на мой взгляд, очень удачная
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emotive
good use of shades of grey etc
would like to see this in oil on canvas!
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I love this idea of how it has different silhouette of a person. To me it represents the emotions one goes thru in that trip to loneliness.
We show a front to many when there is a turmoil of emotions going inside.
Even in a room full of people a person can still be alone.
Your drawing says it all without words.
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thank you soo much *_*
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You could separate and make two parts to your paintings,one part is of the portrait and the other canvas is of the emotions and abstractions regarding of what the woman is feeling.You could do triptychs.Personally,I wouldn't keep asking for critiques because you will become too aware and this will paralize your natural flow of creativity.Academical is fine,but in small measures.
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Always welcome,if you need any advice,just ask.Im not on deviant art just to show off my creations,I also like to help.The nature of art can be a cruel place sometimes.Thats not to say that you are suffering or anything because you are a great artist.
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thank you very much!
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just draw the woman,I can see the abstract and experementation side of the figaritive,becoming paintings in their own right.
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thank you so much, friend!!
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Anytime tsukiko
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Wow!!! Very wonderful work!!! Я вижу очень большое - глубокое одиночество...
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