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TwilightHinata — Untitled Poem
Published: 2007-08-19 00:33:00 +0000 UTC; Views: 2379; Favourites: 45; Downloads: 16
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Description I’d give you all of my heart
If that was what was best
Though you already have most of it
I’d give you all the rest

I give in to what I gave you
You can control me with so many things
I’m like an overused puppet
And only you can cut the strings

It’s like you know my every move
And you bend me to your will
But you knew that if I was broken
I’d obey you still

I said that I was mad at you
But you know how good I can lie
I didn’t want to believe my words
Because each one made me cry

I tried to cut the strings today
And I tried to break free from your grasp
But I know I’d still come if you called me
And that my free will would not last

I don’t mind being your puppet
Use me as you will
I’ll be waiting here forever
As long as you need me still

One last show for the people
Let’s see what this puppet can do
I’d do anything you wanted
If you said “I love you too”

If I could give you my heart
I wouldn’t hesitate to
But I can’t give away
What I’ve already given you
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Comments: 44

sorceror1000 [2010-01-31 02:15:46 +0000 UTC]

This is amazing. Great work. It reminds me of a situation I'm currently in and I feel the same way. I most certainly won't forget this poem. One of the best I've ever read.

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TwilightHinata In reply to sorceror1000 [2010-01-31 05:00:52 +0000 UTC]

Awh. Thank you so much. It really means a lot. And thank you for the fave as well.

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sorceror1000 In reply to TwilightHinata [2010-02-01 12:58:27 +0000 UTC]

no problem lol

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Cookiegirl123 [2008-12-18 04:27:01 +0000 UTC]

Love iiitt!!! nice job

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TwilightHinata In reply to Cookiegirl123 [2008-12-19 02:07:40 +0000 UTC]

Aww. Thanks. =]

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elfquest4 [2008-05-10 14:56:42 +0000 UTC]

Great poem, but i'm very confused. Naruto? I know it's an anime, but are you talking about some person who's account name on something is Naruto?

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TwilightHinata In reply to elfquest4 [2008-05-10 15:26:55 +0000 UTC]

Yeah. It's about someone I really know. Heh. Sorry about the confusion.

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elfquest4 In reply to TwilightHinata [2008-05-10 15:35:16 +0000 UTC]

That's ok, thanks for explaining!

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TwilightHinata In reply to elfquest4 [2008-05-10 15:37:54 +0000 UTC]

Haha. You're welcome.

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kimlien [2008-03-17 22:16:25 +0000 UTC]

Oh my, I love it You really put your heart in this, and it's touching

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TwilightHinata In reply to kimlien [2008-03-17 22:44:27 +0000 UTC]

Thanks a lot. And thank you for the fave.

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kimlien In reply to TwilightHinata [2008-03-18 19:35:16 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome ^^

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Minnietta [2007-11-09 21:36:31 +0000 UTC]

Whoa This is awesome <3 It very well written ^^ Instant

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TwilightHinata In reply to Minnietta [2007-11-09 21:44:28 +0000 UTC]

Wow. Thanks!

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brook-chan [2007-09-12 22:56:38 +0000 UTC]

AWW i just wanna hug you!That's one hell of a poem ><

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TwilightHinata In reply to brook-chan [2007-09-13 19:18:05 +0000 UTC]

Um. Thanks I guess. And thanks for the watch too.

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brook-chan In reply to TwilightHinata [2007-09-14 16:27:15 +0000 UTC]

your welcome

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Itanova [2007-09-03 02:37:44 +0000 UTC]

beatiful

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TwilightHinata In reply to Itanova [2007-09-03 14:48:01 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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uzumaki-demon-gurl [2007-08-21 20:07:04 +0000 UTC]

i read the description you really put your heart in this or else i woulda got bored and clicked off cause i usually do that to people (i've never done that to you or any of my friends though your writings always have the strogest undertowe) i have a short attention span sue me i see a window and i sit in it T~T i see a fly i swat at it i see a lightning bug i chase it till i get bored of trying to make a lantern out of it see thats me and my attention span i miss the sun i never thought i'd miss it ause i reside in darkness

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Raine2 [2007-08-20 22:24:29 +0000 UTC]

Just like everyone is saying, you read this and you can tell you put your heart into it. It really inspires me to start writing again. Also, I always read descriptions

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TwilightHinata In reply to Raine2 [2007-08-20 22:30:44 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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aaronvegeguy [2007-08-20 18:25:48 +0000 UTC]

i like it : )

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TwilightHinata In reply to aaronvegeguy [2007-08-20 18:30:47 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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ninjagal [2007-08-19 21:01:46 +0000 UTC]

Very nice!

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TwilightHinata In reply to ninjagal [2007-08-20 13:41:47 +0000 UTC]

Thanks...

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ninjagal In reply to TwilightHinata [2007-08-20 19:01:38 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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izzet-flectomancer [2007-08-19 05:56:51 +0000 UTC]

you know i read every thing you write. i loved your poem

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Zet206 [2007-08-19 03:21:47 +0000 UTC]

Aww, that's beautiful. I'm sorry Naruto is such a bitch right now

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TwilightHinata In reply to Zet206 [2007-08-19 03:26:16 +0000 UTC]

Hehe. He is a bitch. Damn, I hate this. You wait until the next time that he is on gaia! I will spam him! Haha! He better add me to his stupid friends list if he gets on soon. *sigh* But at least Naruto gave me one good thign right now. It seems people really like this poem. And I like it too. Probably because it's the one that has most of my heart in it. You really like it? I wasn't even gonna post it... but...

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Zet206 In reply to TwilightHinata [2007-08-19 03:27:08 +0000 UTC]

wait.. he has a Gaia? What's his name?

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TwilightHinata In reply to Zet206 [2007-08-19 03:29:50 +0000 UTC]

Idk... I forget... Menma-kun sent me a message today that told me what it was. And then he told Temari-chan what it was when I forced her to call him for me.

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Zet206 In reply to TwilightHinata [2007-08-19 03:34:02 +0000 UTC]

oh. Crap. I think I'll ignore him maybe...

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TwilightHinata In reply to Zet206 [2007-08-19 03:37:15 +0000 UTC]

I don't think that you'll have a problem. Naruto's just dumb that way. But, did you really like the poem?

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Zet206 In reply to TwilightHinata [2007-08-19 03:39:27 +0000 UTC]

Yes, I did! I can tell you put your whole heart into it.

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TwilightHinata In reply to Zet206 [2007-08-19 03:41:03 +0000 UTC]

Well, I think I'm gonna go to bed. I've had a rough day. And, if I try sleeping now, I might be able to sleep by 3am. Good night, Sakura-chan.

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Zet206 In reply to TwilightHinata [2007-08-19 03:43:48 +0000 UTC]

'night! TTYT (talk to you tomorrow)

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Apple-Rings [2007-08-19 02:18:16 +0000 UTC]

This is the most prettiest thing ever. ^^

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TwilightHinata In reply to Apple-Rings [2007-08-19 02:36:10 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, Sai-chan.

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omgz-omgz [2007-08-19 00:36:42 +0000 UTC]

i love it. its really good. the way you wrote it too was beautiful. i feel the same sometimes too. you arent alone in this world.

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TwilightHinata In reply to omgz-omgz [2007-08-19 00:38:49 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. Thanks alot.

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omgz-omgz In reply to TwilightHinata [2007-08-19 00:41:33 +0000 UTC]

your very welcome

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Trinityx68 [2007-08-19 00:35:16 +0000 UTC]

You put your whole heart into it?
---it shows...

I loved every bit of it.
Very true and very deep.
Keep it up.

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TwilightHinata In reply to Trinityx68 [2007-08-19 00:39:31 +0000 UTC]

I'm guessing that's a good thing? Thanks.

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