Sableblix [2005-04-26 04:02:54 +0000 UTC]
Interesting pattern. I really like it, but I think it lacks a certain emotional punch that a lot of your other poems seem to have about them. It left me thinking, but not really feeling, if you know what I mean. And in line 2, I think that's admirers. I'm not sure of my spelling, but I think you need more than one.
But keep it up. It's fun to check the account and see someone's put stuff up. |>
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UnholyHippo In reply to Sableblix [2005-04-27 01:15:22 +0000 UTC]
Thanks for the catch on admireRs!
Its not a really emotional work, no. Like you said, just made to make you think.
It was off a concept I recalled from some British poet.
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