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Vector-Brony — Doctor whooves Shadow fall part 5
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When you said cyber men, you should've said cyber mares
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I literally "HNNNNNNNNNG"'ed when Cadence did that. SO CUTE
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Please tell me ! is Derpy really married and who is her husband ?
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princess cadence horn ?! and her mother and father horn !!
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When cadence was a filly she was a pegasus, not an alicorn. Please read the crystal heart spell, it will explain it all
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now i know sure it's almost the exact same thing as inkrose's headcanon!exept for Derpy,Lyra and the doctor!
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but... the queen is a pegasus... how can create a magical barrier?
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Ah, you will have to wait and see.
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Finally some one knows that Cadence was a pegasus as a baby!
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And working on a Origin to how she turned up in the woods
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First - I'm loving the consistent quality of the art in this story.
Second - I'm enjoying the direction this story is taking.
Third - Sorry, but karkovice1 barely spotted (or at least mentioned) a third of the grammar/spelling mistakes, which are the only things that are spoiling this for me. I write for a hobby, and proper grammar and spelling is essential for me. I'm on DA every day and I would like to offer my services as proofreader.
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I will make you one my go to people. My grammar sucks! I'm more on a Engineer than I am a writer. Thank you for offering your services. I always appreciate the help
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omg i just love these! D: IM BECOMING OBSESSED
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Yes Lyra, we all made that face a few panels earlier.
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P.S. I like how you colored Lyra's irises like an Evil Sith Lord's. (E.G. Evil Anakin.) Because a sith lord's eyes, if they're converted like Anakin's, actually change to that icky yellow-red color. (And, of course, can be changed back.)
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You go Cadence! Get the mean, Sombra-manipulated Lyra and teach her a lesson!
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This is very good what you're putting together here, I can't wait for more! ^^
However there are a few mistakes that you might want to revise
(Not counting the title panel) So in panel 10/11 the wrong form of there is used, instead of "their" it needs to be There.
Also in the same panel, it should be who, not how. which I'm sure is just a typo, but it will help with the flow.
Next, and this one isn't that huge of an issue, but when lyra is calling the Doctor a liar, a comma/ period is missed. "Master showed me the truth, how you all have been lying to me" now either a period or comma should be placed after "me" to show a change in subject, because you're going from talking about doctor hooves and such to talking about seeing the humans, thus the subject is change. Again just something that might help the comprehension of the passage.
Finally, just some inappropriate capitalizing errors, nothing major.
Other than those, it is turning into a great read, and I really hope to see more
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First off, I wanna comment that this seems rather rushed. I've noticed several spelling mistakes with this.
For example, in the first panel, it should be "AN event" and not "A event" in Dr. Whooves' first speech bubble.
Derpy's speech bubble has her saying "hurt or WORST" while it should be spelled "WORSE".
Finally, in Dr. Whooves' second speech bubble, you misspelled Derpy "Derby".
Secondly, a question about the Cadence that appears in this part. She can't be the alicorn Cadence who was Twi's foalsitter, can she? The Cadence we know was in her teens when she first started foalsitting Twilight Sparkle... many thousands of years after this all takes place...
But if it IS the same Cadence, that means that she stayed a filly for thousands of years, which is highly improbable. Besides, why is she not an alicorn!?
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First off thanks for the pointers in my Grammar. If you don't mind could I ask you in the future to proof read some of my comics? I'll credit you in the description.
And secondly, In a Book produced by Hasbro called the crystal heart spell, we are told that filly Pegasus Cadence was discovered in woods outside a village and was adopted by a family of Earth ponies. When she grew up she reversed a love-stealing spell cast by a pony called Prismia. Prismia wore a magic-enhancing necklace that amplified her evil and jealousy, but when Cadance confronted her, the necklace amplified Cadance's love. Once Prismia changed her horrible ways, Cadance was surrounded by magical energy and transported to a strange place where she met Celestia, who adopted her as her royal niece
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Sooooo... according to that book, Cadence was born two thousand years or so before Celestia's time, then was sent forward in time; and this is the Cadence we're looking at?
BTW, I would certainly be happy to proof read your comics! 
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Pretty much. the comic Is a bit of a idea on how she got to the future and how she ended up in the woods.
That should be fine. thank you for the help
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Are you my mummy? I expect this reference >~>
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that had to be on of the scariest doctor who's I've watched.
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I order you to do part 6.
This is amazing, keep up the good work.
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OMG!!! wow!!! my mind just got blown! absolutely amazing!!!!!!
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This is a really interesting and well done comic. And a nice idea to let Cadence be a crystal princess from birth. But why didn't you crystalize the ponies this time? Didn't feel like using the effect for it?
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I didn't use it to show that the Crystal Ponies have dropped down to a level 2 state. like in the crystal empire, when you see the crystal ponies have three stages, Sad, normal and crystal.
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Aaah! Emotional state shown through coat-change. I get it, of course, it seems logically.
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oh yea lyra and cadence are friends arn't they why else whould she be one of her brides maids
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Ok. You got a watch from me. This gonna be gooooooooood!!!!
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I'm calling it: This is actually Cadance's ancestor, who happens to share her name and appearance.
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nope, they take her into the fetcher
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So, candace is 1000 years old. Shining Armor is married with a grandma
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I guess they take Cadence to the future.
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Just remember to not cross the line between canon and headcanon my friend.
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