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Published: 2007-07-26 02:38:08 +0000 UTC; Views: 10970; Favourites: 476; Downloads: 0
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I'm guessing dA isn't going to let me do my formatting properly, so I screenshotted the poem in Word and then made an image of it in Photoshop. Hopefully it's readable in one form or the other. Apologies if it's not.I was a bit inspired by ~sarjan 's poem Unconscious Debate , mostly because I liked the shape of the poem and thought it had been a long while since I'd written a concrete poem. This one started simply but quickly spiraled into something much larger than I thought it would be.
The three spires are intended to represent atheism, theism, and agnosticism, respectively. Hopefully everything else in the poem is self-evident.
Please, please let me know what you think.
edit: Uh, and thanks to whoever properly categorized it. I couldn't find any other place where I could display the image as my poem, so I just went with Visual Poetry... (Honestly, I'm kind of surprised there's no 'Concrete Poetry' form choice, but alas...)
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omggggg... i love this... especially the way it's done ... i can't explain... this is just amazing
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And I was wondering how you formatted it so successfully, when I can't even get dA to give me a few extra indents. That's clever to screenshot it and save as a jpg!
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Love it, nice concept and the writing is beautiful as well
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Excellent use of concrete poetry! I've seen concrete poetry done badly, but this was done soooo well! I really like the line about "I know that there is no such thing as a holy war, despite the press." So true.
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I love it, the first written piece i'll have faved in quite some time. i like the shape and how all very different kinds of religious belief (counting atheism as no god and agnosticism)
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Great job. A very deserving daily deviation. I particularly like the sentence that ties all three of the "steeples" together.
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I love how you've constructed this piece. While I note that the central spire would not include those who believe in a flawless god of pure goodness, and the spire to the right does not include all agnostics either*, the messages you still work very well.
*Agnostics, by definition, believe that there might be something beyond their comprehension in the universe, rather than that of the viewpoint you have written, where it seems to be someone who already knows that there are things they cannot know. A small difference, but an important one.
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wonderful!!
i just loved it, very nice representation
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I've been in all three spires... This is utterly amazing. You've shown how everyone has in common, despite what we convince ourselves. I think you've stumbled onto one of humanity's biggest lies: that there is such a thing as an "other" of theological bent. And you tackled morality, the human condition, and theistic religion as a whole. (And that "God is sex" part is intriguing, too)
Well done.
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It is both simple and complex but above all else beautiful.
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This is really beautiful. I'm definitely a middle spire person, but (as a lot of people have mentioned) I love how all three come together to form one understanding. I wish a lot more people could find the "threads that bind" instead of the scissors which cut us apart from each other. Anywho, this is very well worded, and formatted just perfectly. Absolutely deserves a DD, congrats.
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That's really sweet and really clever. I strongly encourage you to try your hand at more complex typography or, in particular for this piece, practice a little calligraphy and put this on paper in India ink.
Or, if you want, I could try my hand at the latter for you.
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this is simply amazing 
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I love how the three different beliefs all connect further down into one message. Very beautiful and elegant.
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My absolute favorite line was "I know of right and wrong and bathe myself in shades of grey." It's the kind of metaphor that gets everything across perfectly--not being obvious, but not being ridiculously subtle either. Everyone knows the idea of "right and wrong" as "black and white," and of "gray" being the in-between; you've taken that and furthered it. And "bathe" gives the idea of total submersion, of nothing else--again, really powerful imagery. (Though I don't think "imagery" is the right words for that; I just don't know what else to call it.)
I also love the way you've formatted it all so perfectly, fitting the shape but not making any lines awkward in doing so. The way that each of the spires begins so differently, but flows into the same main idea, really underlines the idea of "binding threads," the similarities across all of society. (Even all the lines, themselves, look like threads when you think about it--more wonderful formatting.)
If any part could be improved, it's the end of the middle spire; it just doesn't flow into the "threads that help to bind" line as smoothly as the others do. But I really just love the rest of the poem. It's all so wonderful, so symbolic, and such good writing.
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This is beautiful. I am on the furthest right spire, myself, but the common threads are definitely aspects of life and thought processes I've had myself.
What an amazing concept, you pulled it off beautifully.
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Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link]
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I think it's an incredibly solid peace of work, the form reads right into the meanings and it' still simple enough to get a strong point across. it also doesn't meander off or have extra filler just to make volume, which I like.
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Wow... this is really beautiful. I love the symbolism of the three spires, too. Amazing job and well-deserved DD! 8)
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I really like how you show all that's common to all three "groups" (I hate calling them groups, but that was the best word I could think of) instead of those who separate them into almost alien...tribes or something. 
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wow. I just love this. It's like everything I've always wanted to say, but could never quite find the words to. Stunning.
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this is so amazing
thank you so much for sharing
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This is really great. I wanted to say something unique and encouraging, but I think all the words have probably been said... Great job and a well deserved DD
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Very, very nice. The words are lovely, and the way you arranged them really gets across the idea that despite all people's differences, we still have more in common than not. I love how the three voices merge so seamlessly. Just, very good work!
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This is brilliant! I love that you used such a different way of writing, and as a few other people mentioned, how the poem is non-linear. It even kind of fits the subject matter, that you're a little confused at first, and you don't know where to start, or how to read it (i.e. how to relate to the other people's beliefs ; ) ). I love that you looked at perspectives from three different theories. And I love that in the end, you united them. If only more people looked at it that way. I think this is brilliant.
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You're about to get a lot of comments. This is positively stunning, and simply a treasure to read.
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I am always shy to favorite things that turn up on daily deviations. I figure there's enough praise to go around for them as it is and, maybe foolishly, that I might only be doing it because of the mass approval- and I was caught up in the moment.
I mention this because even so, I've favorited this piece. It's beautiful and poignant enough to coax me over my own silliness, because I'd like to read it again. And rather often, I should think. I wish I was eloquent enough to describe how it touched me, but as I'm not, my little parable is all I have to offer.
This made me smile, and think. And I thank you.
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dA does allow such formatting, so in theory it should do it, except it'd be extremely time-consuming to do such a relatively complicated image.
I love this, great job. It doesn't happen to me often that I think 'wow, I wish I had written that' but it did now - I mean, I could have written it except I didn't come up with the idea, and I couldn't have done it this well myself. But I recognise my own thoughts a lot in this.
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It reminds me the book "The Saviors Of Gog" by Nikos Kazantzakis, check it out! good job!
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I'll have to check it out! Thanks for the comment!
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when you do tell me what was your thoughts
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("The Saviors Of God")
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