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Published: 2006-06-05 19:57:46 +0000 UTC; Views: 266; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 6
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Description I can never go back
this is just like before
you've all gone on with your lives
you don't need me around
they say it's where the heart is- home
then why isn't there room for me?

It's not that you're unpleasant to me
you're quite friendly when I'm back
but I'm lying when I say it's home
I may not have told you before
that even when you're around
I'm not a part of your lives

And although our friendship still lives
it's not the same to me
every time I turn around
I'm facing another back
and it's never long before
I start longing to be home

But just as soon as I'm home
I can see it's my fault I'm not in your lives
and I wish that I knew it before
and put a stop to the forces separating you and me
instead of falling down on my back
and lazily watching you buzz around

And so the cycle continues around
and I never quite feel at home
and all I want is to go back
to a time when we led simpler lives
when you always had time for me
and no one was more important to see before

But I guess it'll never be like before
and the next time I turn around
you'll be even farther from me
with you in your home
living out your lives
never thinking of looking back

Still, every night before I sleep I think of you in your home
and I wonder if you look around and reminisce on your lives
and if you ever think about me and wish I were back
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Comments: 9

ThornyEnglishRose [2007-01-25 17:56:34 +0000 UTC]

Oooops, here's another one I didn't read before.

I've only ever written sestinas if it was an assignment - I hate writing them. It's so hard to make them work. But you did a great job. My sestina-block meant I had to read it through twice, and I really picked up some vibes the second time - the language is beautiful.

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vix0r In reply to ThornyEnglishRose [2007-01-25 18:44:12 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! I actually like writing these restricted-form poems, but I never seem to have a topic or a reason to write them. Go figure!

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Unaccompanied-me [2006-12-13 03:01:02 +0000 UTC]

Oh, I like it a lot. No specific comments...I just liked it.

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vix0r In reply to Unaccompanied-me [2006-12-13 18:01:17 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, I'm glad!

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KaleiDoS-copic [2006-06-05 21:10:49 +0000 UTC]

definitely loved it..
it's deep somehow..
nice

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vix0r In reply to KaleiDoS-copic [2006-06-06 02:02:02 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much, I'm glad you like it

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paintergurlie [2006-06-05 21:09:57 +0000 UTC]

How about Alone in The Light?

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vix0r In reply to paintergurlie [2006-06-06 02:01:12 +0000 UTC]

I like it! Thanks!

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paintergurlie In reply to vix0r [2006-06-06 02:49:36 +0000 UTC]

yeppers

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