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Hey Bro:Hey Bro...
It's been awhile since I've come by
I guess that's my bad this time
A lot of stuff has changed recently
And I kind of wish that you could see it all
I've got a girlfriend now, she's sweet and caring
I remember when you used to joke that I'd never get one
It always used to make me so mad...
Did you know, she's got green eyes. My favourite colour
She makes great food and I really wish she could have met you
Diablo three finally came out and I know we were waiting for that one
You always used to promise that we'd play it together sometime
But I know that it's impossible with the way things are...
I thought a lot about getting the game, walked into the store even
I tried picking it up, but my hands just kept shaking
I ended up leaving without buying anything...
You know, I still have all of our old stuff...
Your dice, your miniatures, your Paladin character sheet
It's even got that little stain in the corner, the big yellow one
I remember how pissed you got after you put it there
And I'm pretty sure you're the only guy who tries to erase Dorito stains!
Ha, I'm laughing now. Remembering all that stuff
Yet at the same time, I always feel like crying...
Did you know, you taught me a lot about being a good man
You would always pick the tank or the healer in our games
And when I asked you why you did that, you said this:
"Those who are strong stand in front, so others don't have to."
Those words of yours, I still carry them with me today...
I thought about getting it tattoo'd sometime, but mom would explode
Y'know, your buddies told me all about what you did
And sometimes, it just makes me want to smack you...
I want to hit you, because you're hardheaded and brave
I want to hit you, for being the bravest fool in the world
But I'm also proud of you, because no man could ever do what you did.
And when they ask me about your story, when they ask about you
I can say that when they had my brother's back against the wall
He didn't hide and he didn't run. He found some cover and fought for his friend
He stood against the enemy, outnumbered and outgunned, but he gave it his all
Because when they shot your buddy in the leg, you knew you had bring him home.
And so you stood your ground and emptied every single mag they handed to you
You picked the enemy off, one by one, by staying calm and using your head
And in the end you succeeded, the enemy was beaten...
You managed to bring your buddy home,but I wish you came back with him...
-Chen Yuan Wen, 18th June 2012
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Well, like I am really impressed with1. your style at writing here and 2. your versatility with new forms and styles. This seems more than a mere free verse poem; it has rap/R&B rhythm to it a little, which strikes me just fine too. The attitude is also typical of that type, which demonstrates that you are keeping abreast of trends. I have written a poem about silence that resembles your older style, which demonstrates both my feeling for it and that you really influenced me lately. You also seemed to have increased length of stanza as well as lines. All-in-all, you are very flexible and your skill has not been affected negatively. 'T is cool!
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Thank ye fer enjoyin' th' emotion in this ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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all I want to know is, is this written through personal experience? Cos its so realistic I get choked up everytime I read it.. this is really nice.. so well written!
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No this isn't written on personal experience ^^ Instead I am a writer that combines acting with the art of writing, so when I write I try to envision the scenario in my mind and write in accordance with how a real person would feel in hat situation.
Thank you for reading and enjoying this :3
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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I am so glad that is not personal experience, cos the pain that I felt from reading that was so real.. KEEP writing, these are incredible!
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I have to admit, I very much enjoyed this one
It has a soft flow that you break out of sometimes, but saying it aloud makes it even better this way.
I very much enjoyed some of the details, the Diablo stanza is great. Altogether: good piece, moving.
Just one thing: I'm missing hints. You do hint that he's dead, but you don't hint the soldier part. I don't mean that the reader/listener should know it before the last stanza, but when re-reading, a truly great text with this kind of turm shoes for me when at second read you find references to the solution you never realised before
So: Great text, but not yet amazing.
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beautiful i love it makes me sad at the end i cryed
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This is absolutely amazing. Wonderfully written.
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Wow another solid piece of writing loving you're new style
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*For some reason, scrolls all the way down to comment*
I got a really bad feeling as soon as I hit the second stanza.
I though oh.. oh no.. and I if I had been listing to anything else but this happy music, I know I would've been closer to crying then I already was.
This was quite a beautiful peace! Thank you for sharing it!
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Aww, this made me cry. But, I love it 
Amazing job at conveying the right emotion! Keep it up!
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That's so sad, It reminds me of my cousin...
Beautiful poem Captain
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Wow... I for one really like this new technique. It makes it feel more like a story.
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I love this so much. You're so amazing. I wish I could write this well
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This is amazing, I have seen people around me go through things like this. And a few of my friends are off within the next year or so to training for the army or navy. I actually cried while reading this because of how true it sounds. And to make me cry is a talent, because I hardly ever cry. So, keep up your ability, it only gets better with everything I read.
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this is a wonderful powerful piece...it has a nice flow to it...i think this more open style really fit the subject well, the mix of emotions
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This...really touched my heart...
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Thank you kindly, I appreciate that ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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wow... i feel like you just stole from inside my very heart.... this is my technique...
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Sorry to say but I create this technique myself recently using a combination of method acting and free verse. I developed it after watching Avatar: The Last Airbender and of course the new Legend of Korra.
:3
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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haha If you'de like, swing by my gallery and look for a piece called Missing You Some.. you might get what I meant.. I really liked this btw, very well done
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Yes I've already dropped by :3. Thank you for enjoying it. I will be releasing a piece later that expands on the techniques I use :3
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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Haha thank you my dear friend, I'm glad to see my word bending skills have improved. Tell me how close did I come to evoking genuine emotion ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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the beginning was actually genuinely touchy, but as you progressed you lost some of that grip however in the end that grip was re-affirmed 
I think I will actually start mentioning you to the handful of people i talk poetry to ..
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I do really enjoy this poem! It was very powerful to me, just because I'm incredibly family oriented.
I like how this broke away a bit from what you usually do, but it's still incredibly similar to me. The free verse is fine, and I really love it! I just wonder if all the italicized text is really necessary...
Although, of course, that's really just a personal opinion! Your poetry is still very good, and I enjoy reading all of it, I'd just like to see some different technical things from you, maybe
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Well the italics were used to create breaks and differences in vibes. I might filter them out more as I advance forward, but for now I still like them. I'll be doing even more so don't worry ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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This was so beautiful Chen. Reminded me of marines fighting to bring their own home from battle, and the bravery that some of those men have. Such strong loyalty is hard to find.
Anyway, I LOVED this Chen.
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Thank you suki, I'm very glad you enjoyed it this much ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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wow, this is beautiful... amazingly written, made me cry a little just wow
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Thank you kindly, I'm very glad that it managed to evoke that level of emotion within you ^^. This is a new technique that I'm developing and I'm glad to see it go well :3
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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no idea what that is, but I hope it's a good comparison ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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>w< oh uh, dont worry its a good thing. Its a homestuck reference, its a really good online comic but its a comedy, so the fandom is mainly the actual sad parts, the character Dave loses his brother "Bro".
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"Those who are strong stand in front, so others don't have to."
I wish to own those words and make them part of my very being.
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Haha, sadly they already belong to me, but you are welcome to carry them with you. That way you can pass them on to those who need to hear it ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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It makes me want to cry it's so beautiful.
But I love every bit of it.
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Thank you so much, I'm very glad you enjoy it. It was made from my new technique so I'm very glad that it managed to evoke emotion within you ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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It's beautifully written. Powerful, but not overbearing. Although the theme is used quite often, this is of a rare quality, and I give 4 out of 4 stars. I don't cry at much, but reading this made me tear up. Thank you
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Thank you, it was a simple theme that I choose but I was going much more for the evocation of emotion. Thank you very much for enjoying it ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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Very well executed. Ben Fatto, Signore.
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