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ilikethesky [2012-09-23 06:23:15 +0000 UTC]
Overall
Vision
Originality
Technique
Impact
SO, i clicked on this poem, wondering what it would be about....and it was the voice of a guy speaking about someone he liked. And I really enjoyed the description of how she was shy and sweet but never would give in and the part about her to afraid to say it but would like to hold hands....
awww. thats just too sweet.
The last part about him taking a chance, to steal her heart, i thought that was a lovely twist. This isn't your usual "I wish i was with ____ but i cant be poem. ^_^
So, for technique, I liked that it was in a simple, line by line form, it made it easy to read, and i could picture just any guy saying this to someone.
Also, Vision: Excellent. I never would have thought of something like this, great job. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s⦠" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/>
Originality: I know there are a lot of love poems out there, but this one, wasn't about the usual heartbreak scenario. SO i really like the new situation and plot-"But in the end she never got to you so I think ill take this chance..."
Impact-Huge-at least on me. Haha I am a shy person around people sometimes, and super silent if i don't know them. SO the part about her being quiet(not to mention a klutz like me XD) was really touching, and the description of her was just..really great.
Kudos! I really liked it e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s⦠" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/>
Hahah. It makes me happy to read a poem like this.
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WordOfChen In reply to ilikethesky [2012-09-24 02:48:30 +0000 UTC]
Welcome ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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WordOfChen In reply to ivoryK1tt3n [2012-09-17 02:01:08 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for enjoying and giving the critic ^^
However with respect to vision. I believe it may be due to the difference in perspective. You cannot see someone saying this, but I easily could probably because it is based upon a younger me ^^
I think the vision criteria is not how you see it in the literal sense, but rather it means, does the individual show 'perception' of the characters and does he show a genuine understanding of the situation, which is what you gave me for impact xD.
For future critiques you should not mark down vision unless the poet/writer/artist has failed to put realism into the character (it is therefore not based on whether or not you can see it, but rather it is based on the artist, remember that all critique factors are based on the poem and not the critique)
Other than that, thank you for taking the time and come back and read more works anytime you like ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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ivoryK1tt3n In reply to WordOfChen [2012-09-17 15:36:46 +0000 UTC]
Well thank you for explaining it to me, and like I said in the beginning of my critique, it was my first. I appreciate you explaining it to me. Now, I apologize for marking down vision than, because if that was so, than the vision should be what I was originally gonna give you, which was going to be about a 4.5. I apologize.
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WordOfChen In reply to ivoryK1tt3n [2012-09-17 16:05:42 +0000 UTC]
Nah, no need to apologise. Critics and writers work in harmony ^^ You don't have to worry and I'm happy to be your first critique. After all, without experience we can't learn.
So please continue to critique my works in future ^^ I shall be in your care my friend :3
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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WordOfChen In reply to ChristineAnne25 [2013-03-22 06:56:59 +0000 UTC]
Bwahaha is that so? Well that's interesting xD
-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates
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FrozenAngelBrony [2012-11-04 16:31:20 +0000 UTC]
oh my gosh ~!!! i adore this !!! like you wrote this and.... its like, MARRY MEEEE~~!!!
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WordOfChen In reply to FrozenAngelBrony [2012-11-04 17:48:54 +0000 UTC]
bwahaha, sorrrry I has a girl that I love very much :3
2 year anniversary coming soon xD
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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FrozenAngelBrony In reply to WordOfChen [2012-11-06 23:10:48 +0000 UTC]
aaawww!!! how cute XDD I'l just go be forever alone somewhere else...
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WordOfChen In reply to FrozenAngelBrony [2012-11-27 06:19:49 +0000 UTC]
xD N'awww don't be sad :3 We can be friends xD
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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o0SHeeP0o [2012-10-08 10:49:30 +0000 UTC]
[] Yes
[] No
[x] I just met you and this is crazy, but if I made you laugh then call me maybe?
looool the romantic is here! raise all the curtains!
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xXXxWolfie-FiendXxxX [2012-10-06 17:50:27 +0000 UTC]
I'm only just reading this now, and all I can think is, 'god, he's so cute!' That was such an adorable poem. Plus, I just watched the first episode of Word of Chen, and now I'm reading stuff in your voice. Sorry if I gush a bit, but you're so effing cute!
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ZodiacZombieChic [2012-10-02 21:48:46 +0000 UTC]
Do you mind if I read one of your poems in my English Class? I would give you credit for writing it of course.
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WordOfChen In reply to ZodiacZombieChic [2012-10-04 16:15:41 +0000 UTC]
Go ahead ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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CremePuffMarshmallow [2012-09-29 01:28:07 +0000 UTC]
The girl sounds a bit like me,except I was the one who was friendzoned -_-
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Copperfrost [2012-09-28 21:26:47 +0000 UTC]
IT WAS AWESOME DESU!
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WordOfChen In reply to Copperfrost [2012-09-29 04:57:46 +0000 UTC]
Thank yoooou!
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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SailorMeowMeow [2012-09-23 03:09:30 +0000 UTC]
Omg! You totally are a dark poet, no wonder why I love reading ur poems out loud.!! This one was really cute for a change
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WordOfChen In reply to SailorMeowMeow [2012-09-29 04:58:07 +0000 UTC]
Haha, thank you, I want to do more dark works soon...especially in the lead up to Halloween ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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SailorMeowMeow In reply to WordOfChen [2012-10-05 02:10:05 +0000 UTC]
Oh i can't wait, Im trying to start memorizing poems just for fun, and my friends always look at me weird when i read urs out loud. They ask me why I memorize such "scary" poems. lol. That's a win for you, eh?
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WordOfChen In reply to SailorMeowMeow [2012-10-05 02:34:33 +0000 UTC]
Which one did you read, can't have been this one xD
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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SailorMeowMeow In reply to WordOfChen [2012-10-07 03:24:41 +0000 UTC]
Oh, it was the "aren't you ashamed yet?". I guess my friends didn't expect so much hatred to come out of me.
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WordOfChen In reply to Nestharon [2012-09-29 04:59:04 +0000 UTC]
Hehe, I apparently have a way of relating to people so I'm glad you found such meaning in my works.
May your love life be blessed. Cherish your partner well ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
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SkyLoverMeg [2012-09-19 17:57:13 +0000 UTC]
this is really good. when you read it you know it is relate able to many. which is one reason why many ppl would like it. It flows real well and to be honest I think you can add more to it make it even more into something, it just might take time.
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WordOfChen In reply to SkyLoverMeg [2012-09-29 05:02:51 +0000 UTC]
Haha well I think more would sort of detract from the meaning of the piece. We always have to think between making it too long and making it just right ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
P.S. Sorry about the late reply I have no excuse for my phail
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TwiUnderSeeker [2012-09-19 08:53:26 +0000 UTC]
This is absolutely amazing. This is so much like me. I wish there was a guy like this out there for every girl who wanted one. Beautiful.
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WordOfChen In reply to TwiUnderSeeker [2012-09-29 05:03:05 +0000 UTC]
Definitely would be nice ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
P.S. Sorry about the late reply I have no excuse for my phail
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merawalaid [2012-09-19 04:14:16 +0000 UTC]
made me remember my high school crush.
Its very nice...
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WordOfChen In reply to merawalaid [2012-09-29 05:03:16 +0000 UTC]
Hehe I hope it was a pleasant read ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
P.S. Sorry about the late reply I have no excuse for my phail
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WordOfChen In reply to alyksirrom [2012-09-29 05:03:27 +0000 UTC]
Thank you my dear friend for reading and enjoying :3
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
P.S. Sorry about the late reply I have no excuse for my phail
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WordOfChen In reply to EnragedCupcake [2012-09-29 05:03:56 +0000 UTC]
Haha, thank you very much, but it wasn't a fail in the sense of the poem, it was a fail in the original idea I had xD
Thanks for enjoying it ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
P.S. Sorry about the late reply I have no excuse for my phail
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devinemrs [2012-09-18 19:36:57 +0000 UTC]
You may be a dark poet but love lets in a light even you cannot fight.
Beautiful and touching...
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WordOfChen In reply to devinemrs [2012-09-29 05:04:06 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for enjoying this ^^
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
P.S. Sorry about the late reply I have no excuse for my phail
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WordOfChen In reply to ladydarkness2012 [2012-09-29 05:04:28 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for enjoying :3
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates
P.S. Sorry about the late reply I have no excuse for my phail
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