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Frostkit landed awkwardly on her chin with an "Ooph!" Opening her eyes she let out a gasp, and turned to the voice that had distracted her. "You made me lose my rabbit!" She accused, pawing a moss-ball.A queen flicked her tail, "Shhh, you're being to loud, you're going to wake up the kits and they just fell asleep. The nursery is too crowded for you to play in. Plus, you're not as small as you once were." the she-cat scolded.
The kit straightened,"I'm sorry, Fireberry...I just get bored by myself, Strawkit and Bearkit are sleeping, and your kits are too small to play with..."
The queen exchanged glances with her sister, Blueberry, and the other queen nodded.
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Page 2 of Chapter 2.
I like this page, but I don't like how I've drawin Frostkit, and panel 5 will definitely need to be redone because Blueberry and her kits are to faraway for how close they are in panel 6.
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"I'm sorry Catname." 
lol and Catkit... >w> If that's it's official name that would be hilarious
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I love the 4th panel so much! The ananomy is incredible!! 
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The fourth panel is awesome
Do you mind grammar corrections or are you going to clean up the sentences later on your own??
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THANK YOU
I'm going to clean the sentences up, but go a head and point out any mistakes you see. I can be forgetful when it comes to grammar
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Okay - Fourth panel: should be "Shhh, you're being too loud, [or you could end the sentence here and start a new one, it'll work either way] you're going to wake the kits and they just fell asleep." The last sentence should be "Plus, you're not as small as you were before."
Fifth panel: Should be "your kits are too small to play with"
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Alright, I'll fix those, thank you
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Awesome!
But I don't get how Frostkit says "...And your kits are too small to play with..." but then in the last pannel it says that Catkit and Bearkit are the same age as her...?
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Thanks!
Fireberry's kits are young and are sleeping, Blueberry's kits (Strawkit and Bearkit) are Frostkit's age, but are also taking a nap, which she should be doing, but isn't tired xP
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OH
Are you ever going to do this in colour?
Either Way, you have to continue!
I want to know what Frostkit and Darkdream have to do with eachother!
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Haha
Hopefully someday I shall color it
I'm glad!
Mwaha
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