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YouInventedMe In reply to ??? [2010-06-11 23:27:43 +0000 UTC]
these things happen
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YouInventedMe In reply to Aadea [2010-03-21 15:03:00 +0000 UTC]
thank you, my love.
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brassteeth [2010-03-12 08:59:56 +0000 UTC]
Fantastic finish.
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gedwaylem [2010-03-11 18:40:53 +0000 UTC]
'when there's nothing left to burn you have to set yourself on fire.'
an interesting piece.
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yr-s3cond [2010-03-11 00:11:47 +0000 UTC]
some say the heart will end in fire, some in ice
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yr-s3cond In reply to YouInventedMe [2010-04-19 12:52:00 +0000 UTC]
that if it could only perish once, from what I have known of you, I'd hope the world would end in fire, and brighter on the view.
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lastbestthing [2010-03-10 22:07:11 +0000 UTC]
have you heard the song "i love you, let's light ourselves on fire"? that's what this reminds me of.
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YouInventedMe In reply to lastbestthing [2010-03-11 09:23:27 +0000 UTC]
I do not know this song, but I would like to.
help?
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YouInventedMe In reply to spoems [2010-03-11 09:21:51 +0000 UTC]
thanks. I'm always surprised when old pieces
like this get love.
much obliged, shaneshane.
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verticalness [2010-03-08 23:47:58 +0000 UTC]
lovelylovely.
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rebel-brat [2010-03-07 16:18:42 +0000 UTC]
i don't know why, but i found the ending too contrite. the beginning was wonderful, the middle pure ecstasy and the matchstick men ingenious. but the ending... too sudden, too abrupt... too cynical.
it actually hurt.
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YouInventedMe In reply to rebel-brat [2010-03-08 10:36:57 +0000 UTC]
interesting. always appreciate the input.
thanks!
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ohsostarryeyed [2010-03-07 03:17:14 +0000 UTC]
i missed you, good sir.
this, what a shock, is lovely.
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ohsostarryeyed In reply to YouInventedMe [2010-03-13 23:00:43 +0000 UTC]
it's okay, life happens. we can't all always live on a website. or so i head.
oh, looking forward to that!
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licoricefactory [2010-03-06 15:47:25 +0000 UTC]
you really do write the best poems.
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artifice-child [2010-03-05 19:47:07 +0000 UTC]
you have the sort of simple, yet composite meaning behind all your pieces that I wish I could wrap my own style around.
although I feel like the comma in the last line shouldn't be there.
love the overrunning motif of the temperature metaphor.
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YouInventedMe In reply to artifice-child [2010-03-06 12:59:44 +0000 UTC]
thanks. this piece is actually one of my first
bits of writing. well, it was written in the first
few months I started writing regularly.
I'm always interested in hearing people's reactions
to the super old stuff. that's one of the reasons
I dust these things off.
I've been spit shining pieces from the very start of
my gallery and moving forward. to word edits or anything.
mostly just typos & spacing. frankly, I'm still at a point
in my gallery where a lot of it makes me cringe, but going
through slowly like this is like watching my own style
develop. (one of the other reasons I'm going through my
gallery. ha.)
anyway, appreciate the input.
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artifice-child In reply to YouInventedMe [2010-03-06 20:14:03 +0000 UTC]
seeing the progress you've made is always an ego-boost (once you get over the initial cringe of "oh my GOD I showed that to PEOPLE?")
my FIRST first bits of writing are too absurdly idiotic to foist upon the innocent public eye, but every once in a while I revamp something from a year or so back. sometimes you have thoughts that are worthwhile, but at the time you have no idea how to give them that punch and impact--sometimes revision works for me, sometimes it doesn't.
keep it up. = )
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bronsautracks [2010-03-04 05:53:07 +0000 UTC]
i love this. it feels easy to relate to.
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luminousmoon [2010-03-04 05:50:52 +0000 UTC]
I wonder what would happen if someone wrote a book of concluding lines. I love how you let words settle. ^-^
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vampireempress [2010-03-02 22:37:24 +0000 UTC]
This is wonderful! i got directly tearful after reading this! and no, of course your age and the date when you wrote this doesn't matter!
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