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Published: 2010-02-26 20:53:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 2059; Favourites: 54; Downloads: 15
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Description for the first time
since november
human contact
isn't like flurries
of marching ants
over a wasteland
of puckered skin
stretched from
growth spurts
and sun burns


for the first time
since november
knees falter into
bedridden comas
on copper ground
wearing matching
threads of violet
defying the sky
and breathless
communication


for the first time
since november
fingers scamper
to find loopholes
in coiled muscles
and weak tendons
to break up bonds
as if not to allow
the movements
of feeble wings


for the first time
since november
blood cells swim
in thick fluid from
noses onto lipstick
hiding the fractures
and forming ripples
in words gushing
into air until it's
time to swallow
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Comments: 60

forestsofazure [2010-03-28 15:08:09 +0000 UTC]

it's one of those very few pieces of writing that gave me goosebumps

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hush-lullaby In reply to forestsofazure [2010-04-04 23:28:05 +0000 UTC]

Oh gosh. Thanks so much <3

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forestsofazure In reply to hush-lullaby [2010-04-04 23:38:08 +0000 UTC]

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Athazagoraphobias [2010-03-28 06:28:06 +0000 UTC]

Wow.

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hush-lullaby In reply to Athazagoraphobias [2010-04-04 23:27:53 +0000 UTC]

!

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Freethepeas [2010-03-07 00:23:47 +0000 UTC]

This is very sensitive and yet harsh at the same time, if that makes any sense. The vulnerability of it makes it really good, as do the compact images and the strict formatting, really makes me want to write something like it (though I don't think I could keep up that structuring with such effective imagery).

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hush-lullaby In reply to Freethepeas [2010-03-08 00:43:50 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

(If you ever write something similar, I would love to read it)

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teenyxtinyxtina [2010-03-06 23:01:45 +0000 UTC]

The imagery of this is stunning. It's halting, and yet so beautiful.

knees falter into
bedridden comas
on copper ground

Love!

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hush-lullaby In reply to teenyxtinyxtina [2010-03-08 00:44:12 +0000 UTC]

Ahh, thank you! lskdfjkjsdhf

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licoricefactory [2010-03-06 15:45:10 +0000 UTC]

that last stanza...wow

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hush-lullaby In reply to licoricefactory [2010-03-08 00:44:43 +0000 UTC]

!

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schriftsteller [2010-03-06 05:19:14 +0000 UTC]

Okay, this piece alone warrants a watch.

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hush-lullaby In reply to schriftsteller [2010-03-08 00:46:03 +0000 UTC]

thank you. I really do appreciate it.

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krish-x [2010-03-04 12:10:54 +0000 UTC]

i liked the last stanza the best

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hush-lullaby In reply to krish-x [2010-03-04 18:16:14 +0000 UTC]

yayy <3

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ToaAkatsuki [2010-03-01 22:08:44 +0000 UTC]

Sooo~ What happened in November?

This is strong. It's like.. it tells a story, but still leaves a lot to the imagination.

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hush-lullaby In reply to ToaAkatsuki [2010-03-04 18:10:32 +0000 UTC]

I drifted away from someone I really care about. We're starting to become closer again though. Slowly but surely.

I was hoping for something of a similar effect. Yayy. Thank you

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ToaAkatsuki In reply to hush-lullaby [2010-03-04 19:44:19 +0000 UTC]

That's good.

You're welcome.

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bright-eyes25 [2010-03-01 16:31:46 +0000 UTC]

beautiful work here.. i love your repetition throughout the piece. something that seems so simple but different to master.

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hush-lullaby In reply to bright-eyes25 [2010-03-04 18:05:59 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so so much <3

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Stuzzi [2010-03-01 08:30:46 +0000 UTC]

A wonderful tale woven with words, paints a clear naturalistic image in my mind.

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hush-lullaby In reply to Stuzzi [2010-03-04 18:05:31 +0000 UTC]

Ah, thank you so much !

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Stuzzi In reply to hush-lullaby [2010-03-22 10:50:59 +0000 UTC]

You're most welcome!

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AlecBell [2010-02-28 09:05:41 +0000 UTC]

I like the dense, organically rooted imagery, the suggestion that spirit is slumbering still.

Most worthy of a DLD.

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hush-lullaby In reply to AlecBell [2010-03-04 17:56:37 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much. I appreciate it.

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AlecBell In reply to hush-lullaby [2010-03-04 22:27:46 +0000 UTC]

Most welcome

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SadisticIceCream [2010-02-28 05:37:27 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful imagery.

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hush-lullaby In reply to SadisticIceCream [2010-03-04 17:56:10 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so so much

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SadisticIceCream In reply to hush-lullaby [2010-03-05 01:36:50 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome.

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HelzCullen [2010-02-27 23:54:20 +0000 UTC]

I reeeeeeeeally like that last stanza. And now I want to know what happened last November. D:<

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hush-lullaby In reply to HelzCullen [2010-03-01 22:15:31 +0000 UTC]

Gah. You already read it. Ignore what I said in my reply.

Everything got a little colder last November.

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HelzCullen In reply to hush-lullaby [2010-03-03 21:30:41 +0000 UTC]

Kay, it confuzled me nayway.

Yes. Autumn tends to do that. >:l More plz?
Do I have to note you? D:

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i8l90 [2010-02-27 21:30:56 +0000 UTC]

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hush-lullaby In reply to i8l90 [2010-03-04 17:56:00 +0000 UTC]

!

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bleusman [2010-02-27 21:06:28 +0000 UTC]

Great meter, great flow, great language. Awesome!

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hush-lullaby In reply to bleusman [2010-03-04 17:55:51 +0000 UTC]

laksjd thank you !

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storyofmylife054 [2010-02-27 20:13:50 +0000 UTC]

I could have sworn that I favorited this yesterday. How odd .
Wonderful piece!!

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hush-lullaby In reply to storyofmylife054 [2010-03-04 17:55:42 +0000 UTC]

Hahah. Thanks so much

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storyofmylife054 In reply to hush-lullaby [2010-03-04 19:08:26 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome (:

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medreaming [2010-02-27 20:03:32 +0000 UTC]

I love how you repeat that phrase over and over.

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hush-lullaby In reply to medreaming [2010-03-04 17:55:23 +0000 UTC]

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DailyLitDeviations [2010-02-27 20:01:00 +0000 UTC]

Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]
Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.

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lachrymose1316 [2010-02-27 18:20:17 +0000 UTC]

this is really good

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hush-lullaby In reply to lachrymose1316 [2010-03-04 17:55:13 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much

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bowie-loon123 [2010-02-27 16:16:24 +0000 UTC]

Hi there! Your wonderful work has been featured in this daily news article.

Keep up the good work! Be sure to the news article and spread the word so that you can achieve the recognition you deserve!

~bowie-loon123 - Founder of #PPPLit

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phantasmicmelody [2010-02-27 03:29:58 +0000 UTC]

this is very very good

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hush-lullaby In reply to phantasmicmelody [2010-03-04 17:54:09 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much

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phantasmicmelody In reply to hush-lullaby [2010-03-04 19:43:38 +0000 UTC]

Of course

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linaeria [2010-02-27 01:08:41 +0000 UTC]

beautiful.

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hush-lullaby In reply to linaeria [2010-03-04 17:53:54 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much !

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