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Yumetachi — Instead of a Straw.
Published: 2006-03-31 05:42:39 +0000 UTC; Views: 1281; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 46
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Description If the evening never comes
When the days seem to long,
Know it will soon be gone,
Just listen to my song.

Don't think how many days
You'll live before you perish,
Just how many hours
Are left for you to cherish.

When your weary eyes won't open,
As the croaking dawn awakens,
Take to the new day hoping
With a spirit that wont' be shaken.

The parents are overbearing,
And The walls too close to move,
When they seem too caring,
Just remember, I'm here too.

When you know what to say,
But the words aren't there:
Just shout it out this way
And let it ring the air.

If your friends turn their back
From you in your sorrow,
Call me and and I'll pack
To be there by tomorrow

At night, lonely and alone,
With the only friend as tears.
Chilled down to the bones,
Shaking with tomorrow's fears.

Take tomorrow when she arrives.
But for now, just close your eyes,
Sleep and think not others' lives,
Just ours, the rest are heavy ties.

Take yourself to a better place
With just you, I and the sea.
Our friendship, our trust the face
Of my single, desperate plea.

If the straw is too far away
For your fingers to draw to clutch,
Then reach for my hand instead
And just hold on to my touch.

I'll pull you out the water,
Which now just seems too deep,
From currents who've caught her.
We'll to sandy the shores leap.

To bask in the warmth of sunshine
And call that beach your home.
Keep me in your heart to find
That you'll never really be alone.
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Comments: 53

Yues-Woman [2006-04-13 01:33:26 +0000 UTC]

*cries* You weren't at Minifest.
I HAVEN'T BEEN EXPOSED TO YOUR PRETTY FOR SO LONG!!!

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PisceanDreamer [2006-04-04 14:17:00 +0000 UTC]

I'm sure she loved it and I think you portrayed your feelings well. It doesn't matter how many times we do and say things, when it comes to things like this, each time feels new. Well done Yume

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Yumetachi In reply to PisceanDreamer [2006-04-04 14:25:59 +0000 UTC]

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PisceanDreamer In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-04 14:35:54 +0000 UTC]

I would imagine that the overarching feelings would be the same but everytime you think of her and with every paraphrase that you wrote, you would've been experiencing different emotions, even now they would be different again. I know I certainly do.

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kami-kara [2006-04-02 07:07:22 +0000 UTC]

absolutely gorgeous

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Yumetachi In reply to kami-kara [2006-04-02 09:50:39 +0000 UTC]

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kami-kara In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-02 10:12:28 +0000 UTC]

and thats what makes your work so brilliant

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Yumetachi In reply to kami-kara [2006-04-02 10:18:50 +0000 UTC]

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kami-kara In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-02 10:43:21 +0000 UTC]

i guess you don't have to put all your heart into all your poems. experiment, i guess. like, try unstructured poetry, or different forms. just a suggestion...

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Yumetachi In reply to kami-kara [2006-04-03 06:57:56 +0000 UTC]

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kami-kara In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-03 12:15:12 +0000 UTC]

it'd still be apart of the making of your own poems better - finding new ways of presenting ideas, etc. not that you need it, lol, so, i'll leave it there, hhahhaa...

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YuriKazumi [2006-04-01 05:19:54 +0000 UTC]

great poemya!!
owh owh TT^TT
*envy*

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Yumetachi In reply to YuriKazumi [2006-04-02 10:27:41 +0000 UTC]

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YuriKazumi In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-02 12:53:44 +0000 UTC]

^^

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AkaiOniNeko [2006-03-31 23:52:15 +0000 UTC]

You're an angel to write such a loving piece, Yumetachi. I absolutely loved it, and it definitely lifted my spirits.

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Yumetachi In reply to AkaiOniNeko [2006-04-03 07:19:42 +0000 UTC]

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AkaiOniNeko In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-03 08:36:40 +0000 UTC]

It can be for anything really. But this one really made me smile.

You know that saying that friends are angels in disguise? To this person, you're their guardian angel, really.

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Yumetachi In reply to AkaiOniNeko [2006-04-03 08:46:15 +0000 UTC]

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AkaiOniNeko In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-03 10:06:39 +0000 UTC]

-hugs tight- To mine eyes, I see the fluttering wings.

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Yumetachi In reply to AkaiOniNeko [2006-04-03 10:20:30 +0000 UTC]

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AkaiOniNeko In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-03 11:21:35 +0000 UTC]

A friend I hope to be to you, dear one. For I would hate to envy another for having those fluttering wings wrap around them, and while they see them not, I am left in the cold and see them plainly.

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Yumetachi In reply to AkaiOniNeko [2006-04-03 12:24:53 +0000 UTC]

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AkaiOniNeko In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-03 22:16:46 +0000 UTC]

Not sure about that one. You caught me there. ^_^

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Yumetachi In reply to AkaiOniNeko [2006-04-04 06:25:20 +0000 UTC]

Then accept my hand and live in warmth~!

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AkaiOniNeko In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-04 19:55:52 +0000 UTC]

That, I'd do any day. Thank you for being an angel to me as well.

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Yumetachi In reply to AkaiOniNeko [2006-04-05 05:37:27 +0000 UTC]

then let me be your angel, and be hapiiiiiiiiiiii

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AkaiOniNeko In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-05 07:38:34 +0000 UTC]

-Ish Happy!!!- ^__^ -<3

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Yumetachi In reply to AkaiOniNeko [2006-04-05 07:41:48 +0000 UTC]

There is so greater gift~

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AkaiOniNeko In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-05 09:00:05 +0000 UTC]

Nyu? Elaborate.

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Yumetachi In reply to AkaiOniNeko [2006-04-05 09:08:40 +0000 UTC]

there is no greater gift than a friend being happy ^^

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AkaiOniNeko In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-05 10:10:29 +0000 UTC]

Awww.

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bleed-away-bondage [2006-03-31 22:26:56 +0000 UTC]

Aw...

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Yumetachi In reply to bleed-away-bondage [2006-04-04 12:28:12 +0000 UTC]

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bleed-away-bondage In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-05 22:56:35 +0000 UTC]

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Aaureole-Complexion [2006-03-31 21:14:56 +0000 UTC]

awww linny is such a lucky girl!
i was thinking of drawing something for her
very invigorating poem :3

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Yumetachi In reply to Aaureole-Complexion [2006-04-01 01:01:11 +0000 UTC]

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Aaureole-Complexion In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-01 06:50:59 +0000 UTC]

when shes feels that theres so many things against her its hard for her to see i guess. shes a really swt and modest person

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Yumetachi In reply to Aaureole-Complexion [2006-04-02 00:38:26 +0000 UTC]

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Aaureole-Complexion In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-02 21:05:36 +0000 UTC]

lol w/e fallable means.. i remember when i first met her i was like what a great person yet she doesnt even acknowledge it

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Yumetachi In reply to Aaureole-Complexion [2006-04-03 06:48:29 +0000 UTC]

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Aaureole-Complexion In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-04 02:19:20 +0000 UTC]

oh yeahs!!! enCHANTMENT!!!!! you should ask her out!! ZOMG!!!!!!!! now that i think of it you guys would make the perfect couple!!!!!!! HOLY CRAP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! IM DRAWING A PIC!!!!!!!!

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Yumetachi In reply to Aaureole-Complexion [2006-04-04 12:23:56 +0000 UTC]

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Aaureole-Complexion In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-04 21:30:04 +0000 UTC]

............... heeeeeeeeeeheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee eeee!!!!!! i wanna draw so many things XB ive got a really good pic in my head.. muahahahaaa

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Yumetachi In reply to Aaureole-Complexion [2006-04-05 05:28:31 +0000 UTC]

and I think it's time I faved something from you..

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Aaureole-Complexion In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-05 20:30:46 +0000 UTC]

dont unless you really really like something -_="... personally i dont like ppl faving my stuff unless ive put 100% pure effort into it... which i havent yet lol

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Yumetachi In reply to Aaureole-Complexion [2006-04-08 05:11:23 +0000 UTC]

then i wanna see a full effort pic!!!!!!!!

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Aaureole-Complexion In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-10 02:17:32 +0000 UTC]

sighs im dying to do one but i always get lazy during inking -_="

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Yumetachi In reply to Aaureole-Complexion [2006-04-10 07:11:51 +0000 UTC]

blow me away and make me WOW

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Aaureole-Complexion In reply to Yumetachi [2006-04-11 23:34:25 +0000 UTC]

lol ill try

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Yumetachi In reply to Aaureole-Complexion [2006-07-01 11:44:40 +0000 UTC]

you have done well young one..

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