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Published: 2011-06-17 09:32:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 918; Favourites: 63; Downloads: 35
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Name: Ravin HaltonSex: Female
Birthdate: August 14
Age: 16
Blood type: O
Hobbies: helping orphanage
Fav Food: Potato Salad
Fav Drink: Carrot juice
Likes: Peace, mechanics, Alice
Dislikes: Organization that kidnapped Alice
She is known as a sister at orphanage during day. But at night she becomes a phantom thief, bounty hunter, and even a scientist!
In my story, she will be traveling around the world looking for her best friend Alice who was kidnapped by an evil organization.
next OC coming soon!
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sweet, if you need help making OCs i can help im good at stuff like that but dont ask me to draw one because i cant
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Thanks man that would help ou a lot:3 I'll ask you when I need help!
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Just as a critique, she feels like she's floating. She doesn't feel like she's standing. Anatomy is a little off, especially with the (our left) right leg. Her arms appear to be a tad bit short. Her chest is a bit too big/ thick and wide. Her hips aren't wide enough. And she feels like she is a little stiff. Try drawing gestural-ly and make sure you start with the feet and legs first. If not, at least draw a ground plane on her and try to make more weight rest on the ground. Also she is 5 heads long, not counting the space in which her arms occupy above her head. I would suggest making her 6 to 7 heads long. Preferably 6 to 6 and a half. In addition, try working on shadows. At the moment, the shadows are erratic. You have shadows on the right side of her; however, you have shadows pointing upwards and to the left as if the light is at her tummy. I do see what you are trying to do, so do not mistake my comment with saying your shadows are completely wrong. Her butt seems to show a little too much under her swimsuit, below her... well... crotch area. Keep the same proportions with her legs thickness on both legs, even if one is kinda in perspective (our right side is too thin compared to our left side, as viewers). Her knee cap isn't far down enough. And her head looks oddly positioned on her neck. Maybe a little bit too far to the right.
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She is very cute, I do like this a lot, so I am going to favorite it. I hope to see fixes possibly? :3 I like the color scheme, you have a great sense of making a face look cute. I think you will progressively get amazing after a couple more intense drawings. Remember, push yourself hard and try to achieve greatness Plus, bunny girls are hawtttt.... Maybe not as much as cat girls, but stillll @/////@
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Thank you so much for the Critique!! Yes I will draw her again with your advices in my head this time!^^ I never thought about drawing feet and legs first.. again thank you so much for the advices, I really appreciate it!!
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You're quite welcome. This is why I'm in art school. Unfortunately, I'm an animator, not an illustrator. So I don't have all the answers in the universe regarding drawings, but I can help to the best of my ability. I work more with gestures than anything else.
Good luck!
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Very cute girl. Nice pose and the wink is a nice touch.
She kind of looks a little like Melona from Queen's Blade though.
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I kneeeew someone would say dat lol bunny ear and the color of the hair is similar, yes. But I didn't want to make her hair too light pink though, I though it would look too much like super sonico><;
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Don't worry, I get comparisions to other characters for my OCs all the time.
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No prob and you've got my 2nd favorite duelist as your avatar.
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Oh yeah!
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what did you like about this drawing? just wondering
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