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Zarak342 — Good cop Bad cop
Published: 2011-02-09 20:51:52 +0000 UTC; Views: 7071; Favourites: 177; Downloads: 63
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What do you think he's whispering?I was prompted. is that a word?
Looking at my gallery will probably tell you that I'm usually not the drawer of slashy stuff... Well, long while back I just had a bit too much of all that manga squee unrealistic slash couples and yaoi, so I just ignored it.
No, I don't hate it. Got over it a couple of years ago.
And I don't have a problem with it.
Plus, this was rather fun.
Erh, anyways.
I got Allspark Almanac a week or two ago, my little bro's late christmas gift (shipping took forever), and knew I had to draw something TFA with the new wonderful reference pictures.. A bit later I got SAI, and knew I needed an idea even more. *BitterSweetDrug said to draw something slashy between TFA Jazz and Prowl (with draft design), and a couple of minutes later someone (I don't remember who) said 'good cop bad cop'.
And PANG, this idea was in my head. Began three days ago or something. Jazz with his nunchucks, hurr.
Was originally supposed to be much more simply and a closeup of the heads, but what the heck.
It was fun. SAI is lots of fun to play around with!
SO ENJOY YOUR SLASH!
... I should really draw and post more stuff on DA, huh? I still need traning... but hey, I made Valentine's Day thing before time 8D
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Comments: 45
Vision – Does the artwork present or reflect a point of view, theme or idea?
Your good cop, bad cop joke is right up my alley. I definitely approve. It sounds like you had an idea and then went for it. It's not some huge statement about life or a particularly complex idea but there is still a overall idea tying the picture together.
Originality – Is the artwork fresh or new in its style, execution or approach? Is it something you haven’t seen before in its particular genre? Does it surprise you?
While I'm sure there are other good cop, bad cop pictures out there with Prowl, I can't think of one that looks like this. You had to make a TFA cop Prowl design to pull it off too, which gets you points in my book.
Technique – Was the artwork skillfully created? Does the artist exhibit advanced knowledge of the medium and/or bring special focus to the craft of the medium used.
It sounds like you are still new to SAI so this picture would qualify as practice. Still, you requested a critique and I think your technique is probably the weakest part.
Line art wise, you look good. TFA proportions are weird, period. My rule of thumb is, if nothing is distracting, you did it right. I can understand what both Prowl and Jazz are doing and it looks like TFA so you did good there. If I felt like nitpicking, I'd point out Prowl's left elbow (on the viewer's right) is awkwardly positioned, as if he is trying to elbow Jazz in the gut. However, that's a small thing compared to some of the canon mistakes.
Your coloring is the part bothers me. Don't get me wrong, it's not terrible. You did a decent job. However, you could do better. Most of the shading on the characters is very soft, which doesn't reflect the fact they are made of metal. Also, there are some places where the shadow doesn't reach all the way to the line art. For example, on the top of Prowl's right leg and the top of the circle thing on his right shoulder. It's distracting and amateurish. You're new to SAI, so that is understandable. However, the final piece is what it is.
I'm also not a fan of the background. The red reads more as aggressive than passionate to me. That might just be me, though. The big problem is that I have no idea where Prowl and Jazz are. The gray blobs make me wonder if they are actually in a room but it's blurred out. I don't know if this picture would have worked with a detailed background since Prowl and Jazz are supposed to be the focus. Nevertheless, I would have liked it better if the background read more easily as an abstract and/or graphic piece.
Impact – Does the artwork resonate with you or evoke strong emotions? Does it make you think? Does it blow your mind?
The silhouette could have been a little clearer but the characters pop and your viewer immediately knows what's going on. It's a kind of funny, slashy moment between Prowl and Jazz. This picture accomplishes exactly what you wanted it to accomplish, so I'd call it a success.
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I had to think twice when I saw the big blob of text to figure out I've gotten a critique, my first one even. Thank you!
Technique
Yeah, I am pretty new at SAI and could use some practice.
The thing about Prowl's elbow amused me when I read it, because I hadn't really noticed it before. And to be honest, I almost thought why not, because being shocked enough, he probably would end up doing that. (You gave me an idea, by the way, thanks)
Hm, yeah, I know it is quite soft. It wasn't how it was original intended really, but it just grew that way. But I totally get what you mean, it is too soft for metal. And the whole not reaching part... well, that's probably my own laziness. Also wish I had had the smudge tool from photoshop, for some reason at the time I found it hard to fill out.
Ouch, backgrounds, my weak point. I'm in general horrible with backgrounds, and would rather leave it without, but that always look bad. I'll try with better backgrounds in the future!
Point is, you made me want to recolor the whole thing, and I might try that.
Thanks :]
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Sorry for the late reply! Your comment ended up underneath another critique comment and they combined into a wall-of-text like no other.
I like Photoshop but sometimes I wish I knew SAI since it sounds like a lot of people use it and I can't give solid advice right now. Oh well.
Prowl elbowing Jazz makes this picture instantly funnier, lol.
Backgrounds are a pain for everyone. I don't usually go for graphic backgrounds but there are plenty of people who do. I'm sure you could find a style that inspired you if you looked around a little bit.
Awesome! I look forward to seeing a version 2.
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Don't worry, I know and dread it very much myself XDD
You should try SAI out. Not that expensive either.
Hm, yeah, I should probably browse for some background styles. Thanks for the tip!
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Hey Zarak342, can I use this as inspiration for the fanfiction I'm working on? I'm not exactly a fan of slash, but this... is an exception. The reaction of Prowl is so priceless! And Jazz's smirk! OMP!!!!!!!!
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I'll give you credit in the fic. 
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No problem! And leave me a link when you're done!
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LOL TOTALLY XD
Thanks!
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First of all; I adore the faces they make! Jazz the sneaky one and Prowl being all shy and blushing
Also you did the posing very well and I also like the way your lines are very straight and clean. Also the broadness of them is very good, I always have trouble with that :/
Love the whole concept and the colors (thu I have to agree with Res, the coloration itself is very well done, but would look more fitting to TFA with flats) ~!
Luv ya really for doing this so nicely and sorry for late comment, but ya know exams and so ooon :'O
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Thanks, the face was probably the easiest thing to draw, just doodled it a bit and 'THERE'S JAZZ!' XD
Thanks for all the praise 
Late comments are a-okay, better late than never and all that jazz XD
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lolness! Great job! Love the g1/animated prowl look!
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Thank you! I'm glad you like it!
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... Thank you again!! XD
double post XD
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Omg, thank you so, so much!!!
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Indeed, so many functions~
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hehehehehehehe X3 i bet he's saying things that are juuuuuuuuuuuust right. X3
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You betcha he is XD And the limit is only your own imagination (really need a raise-eyebrows-nudge-nudge kinda smiley).
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oh absolutely. X3 wink wink nudge nudge say no more say no more. X3
also i love that you used his draft design.
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PRECISELY! XD I'm glad you know that XD
Thanks, thougt it was a bit hard since the pictre in the book was tiny XD
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hehehe love Monty Python X3 <3
welcome. 
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Agreed, Monty Python rocks! XD
Ah, cool, I have to check that out!
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absolutely X3 hehehe
yeah and i see you did!
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Thank you, I'm really happy you like it!
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You're more than welcome! ♥
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Please do, attention is always good XD
And thanks!
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wow this looks so cool and awesome
Jazz: now it’s time for the strip-search
Prowl: O.o
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Thank you!
Haha, that's probaby just what he's saying, poor Prowler XD
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