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Published: 2004-05-21 00:47:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 92; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 17
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There is a fire
In the sky tonight
Making some things dull
And some things bright

Shades of blue
Hues of red
All blending together
In the sky’s bed

There’s a fire
A light to be seen
It all looks
Like just a dream

The new blends
With the old
Leaving new stories
To be told

The shadows, black
Are cast
Across the lawn
Memories of the past

There is a fire
In the sky tonight
Making some things dull
And some things bright

One thing I know
Is that
You light the fire within
No matter where I am at.
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Comments: 9

sugarstoned [2004-05-22 03:50:06 +0000 UTC]

Wow Lauren! That is too cool for school!! I realllly like the picture tons and lots and the poem is great! I envy when people can make their poems rhyme w/o it sounding forced! Cool stuff!!!

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zeemaku In reply to sugarstoned [2004-05-22 18:26:01 +0000 UTC]

-grin- Thanks Diaaaane. -bow-

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leira [2004-05-22 03:25:56 +0000 UTC]

I love it!! OMFG is that REALLY the sky though???????????? whoaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa

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zeemaku In reply to leira [2004-05-22 18:26:33 +0000 UTC]

Yup, Ar, that tis really the sky. xP Silly goose.

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vixenku [2004-05-21 11:07:02 +0000 UTC]

Love it! I adore that picture, absolutely adore it, and this poem is good. +Noddu.+ Great minds think alike right? "There's a fire, burning beneath you" lmfao. That's what I was reminded of when I read it, my poem The Fire. Lmfao.

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zeemaku In reply to vixenku [2004-05-21 23:06:25 +0000 UTC]

OMFG. When I read "there's a fire burning beneath you" I'm like. Oh. Where? haha.

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vixenku In reply to zeemaku [2004-05-22 00:32:51 +0000 UTC]

Lmfao. You silly goose.

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LordoftheMorning [2004-05-21 00:54:35 +0000 UTC]

The picture and poem are both very nice.

If there was one thing I would point out it is that I find the third line in the last stanza ("You light the fire within") to be a little cliche but it still works well in the poem.

Again, good job!

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zeemaku In reply to LordoftheMorning [2004-05-21 23:05:37 +0000 UTC]

-bow- Thank you!

I know it's a bit overused and such... But I still like it. lol

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