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MissChibiChild [2013-04-20 02:54:07 +0000 UTC]

Overall

Vision

Originality

Technique

Impact

The dynamics of the two bodies is done very well. The shading on the bodies is very good as well. The character designs are very intriguing! I want to know more about these two! My critique on the characters would be their expressions. I would say both look just a wee bit too calm for the situation. The girl's body suggests a very bold, fiery fighting stance. However, her expression could be that as if she was looking at the boy from across the table on a date. Her expression is calm and relaxed, which does convey that she knows what she's doing. My suggestion would be to have maybe angled her eyebrows as if they were slanting down to give a fiery expression that matches the pose. Also, she looks more as if she's looking at his neck rather than his face. To correct this, my suggestion would be to angle her head up a little more so that they would be making eye contact. As for the boy, his pose expresses surprise, and a defensive position, but his face looks more like he might be considering his next move in a chess match rather than fend off a girl with a dagger and a sword. The background, I'm afraid, does confuse me a little. I'm not entirely sure where they are, though it is excellently drawn. I especially like how you used white shadows around their feet rather than gray or black.
In closing, I would say that this is an original piece of art, the vision it gives contrasts well and catches the eye. The painting techniques are spot on, just watch those small details, like facial expression. Think about the emotions your subjects are feeling, even practice how you'd react in a mirror! The impact is a little confusing, yes, but definitely intriguing. I want to know more about this scene!

P.S. I realize the things I've critiqued may have been exactly what you were going for, if so then it was a job well done! I apologize in advance if I offended you in anyway, these are just the things I would tell myself if I draw something like this!

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LunaGorn [2013-04-19 09:54:57 +0000 UTC]

They look so cool!
I like how you did the bg~

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