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Published: 2010-04-01 01:21:19 +0000 UTC; Views: 1321; Favourites: 59; Downloads: 31
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Description I am in a coma, and this seems like it's happening but it isn't. I am living in my head- a universe where I'm 18 years old but I'll wake up 36. I can see gravity, I can see the wind, I can see all the universes packed inside everyone's heads and it's tiring. it's a loud place here. in my head, I can't react to the environment around me the same way in reality, I'm not moving and I'm living off of the life that the machines give to me. I am disconnected and dead, but sadly not dead enough. I will open my eyes and everything will be different.

cold cement beneath my bare feet. I take this poison every morning. the doctor says it'll help and he recently increased my dosage. these pills govern me. at first I was excited, to be honest. finally, I would feel better. but fuck that- I'm numb to everything and it's all blurs and colours swirling. there are doors opening and closing but there is no sound. there is a sheet blowing in the wind- if you close your eyes, you can see it. there is static on the television screen and faded yellow pictures scattered all over the kitchen floor.



veins of rivers dividing and tearing in my body. monstrous, ugly, and victorious- they win every time, pushing my head underwater, glaring into my skull. this is electricity frying me, cutting me open and-

and it's like putting silver spoons on the fillings on your teeth or glass shattering on your kitchen floor

and it should make you shiver, but you can't feel a thing.
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Comments: 37

ZeNessiness [2010-10-12 17:26:45 +0000 UTC]

the last three paragraphs.
raw, intense, heart shattering
& i can't get enough

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Awasteof-paint In reply to ZeNessiness [2010-11-04 01:28:50 +0000 UTC]

3 of my favourite words to describe something.
so thank you
thank you
thank you.

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apocalyptic-monkey [2010-04-19 03:23:05 +0000 UTC]

woww. .so to be honest i just skimmed it till i read this: "and it should make you shiver, but you can't feel a thing." and that was so haunting i had to go back and read it all.
love it.

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Awasteof-paint In reply to apocalyptic-monkey [2010-04-19 23:17:25 +0000 UTC]

ahh i'm glad. thank you soso much!

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apocalyptic-monkey In reply to Awasteof-paint [2010-04-20 00:30:14 +0000 UTC]

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Cinnamoncandy [2010-04-06 02:53:17 +0000 UTC]

Hello!

You have been featured in my journal [link] and in this news article [link]

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Awasteof-paint In reply to Cinnamoncandy [2010-04-15 22:53:23 +0000 UTC]

aww thank you so much!
(sorry it's late)

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captainizzy [2010-04-04 23:35:47 +0000 UTC]

stellar work. no, i don't know how it feels outside of the one time i was so sick i kept fainting on the floor of my bathroom, and it felt a lot like how you described that, to imagine having it for reasons unrelated to sickness is horrible to consider. again, wonderful job.

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Awasteof-paint In reply to captainizzy [2010-04-15 22:53:12 +0000 UTC]

aww, thank you, lovely.
im not really sure why i said that in the authors comment.
it was just how i was feeling at the time, i suppose.

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storyofmylife054 [2010-04-02 23:26:33 +0000 UTC]

gorgeous!

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Awasteof-paint In reply to storyofmylife054 [2010-04-15 22:52:35 +0000 UTC]

thank you!

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storyofmylife054 In reply to Awasteof-paint [2010-04-17 22:34:33 +0000 UTC]

anytime hon!

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MaydayWeCrashed [2010-04-01 19:35:36 +0000 UTC]

lovely<3

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Awasteof-paint In reply to MaydayWeCrashed [2010-04-02 22:11:19 +0000 UTC]

thank you (:

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kallia-goldenwings [2010-04-01 08:16:41 +0000 UTC]

wow that was just amazing.

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Awasteof-paint In reply to kallia-goldenwings [2010-04-02 22:11:27 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

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SOLIDER-1st [2010-04-01 04:09:20 +0000 UTC]

This is rather ironic timing, as I've just gone through a rather strange passing out spell. They say is Vasal Vagal syndrome or somesuch. But they used that word.

Iss good

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Awasteof-paint In reply to SOLIDER-1st [2010-04-02 22:12:21 +0000 UTC]

wow, that is strange.
i just thought the idea of being unconsious/ in a coma was so interesting and i had to write about it.
thank you

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WillSchenck [2010-04-01 03:16:21 +0000 UTC]

wow...
now this...
i just want to drift away in the beginning... i'm floating around, and i feel a strange whisper of melancholy, but i just want to float away...

and then the second stanza rips me from the sky and from the floating abyss. it drives me down, down, it's bitter and sinister...

but beautifully arranged.
it's a masterpiece.
thanks, so much.

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Awasteof-paint In reply to WillSchenck [2010-04-02 22:13:19 +0000 UTC]

oh wow. thank you soso much!
comments like that make me think i really got the main mood conveyed that i was going for!

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WillSchenck In reply to Awasteof-paint [2010-04-05 01:03:49 +0000 UTC]

well you certainly accomplished that, no doubt about it.

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Magickbender [2010-04-01 02:28:40 +0000 UTC]

You, my dear, are freaking amazing. This makes me feel... i dunno. Whatever it does, whatever you do, is powerful.

"dont think" what?

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Awasteof-paint In reply to Magickbender [2010-04-02 22:14:41 +0000 UTC]

that means so much! thank you <3

and i guess at the moment i was in this weird mood that was like, "no. you wouldnt understand this. so dont say you do." or something.

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Magickbender In reply to Awasteof-paint [2010-04-03 15:40:43 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome

I get that. I've felt that was sometimes. (ironicly enough)

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FictionalSoul [2010-04-01 01:33:52 +0000 UTC]

wow! the ending gave me shivers. love it

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Awasteof-paint In reply to FictionalSoul [2010-04-02 22:11:09 +0000 UTC]

aw, thank you! <3

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SmootHope [2010-04-01 01:30:50 +0000 UTC]

Wooooooooooooow.

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Awasteof-paint In reply to SmootHope [2010-04-02 22:11:01 +0000 UTC]

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softsilhouettes [2010-04-01 01:25:22 +0000 UTC]

we both go through this, or somewhat the same. i'm sorry michele.. but you have written about it beautifully.

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Awasteof-paint In reply to softsilhouettes [2010-04-01 01:27:40 +0000 UTC]

thank you, love

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ChloroformBoy [2010-04-01 01:24:45 +0000 UTC]

you've still got it

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Awasteof-paint In reply to ChloroformBoy [2010-04-01 01:27:28 +0000 UTC]

thank you <3

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unusualcutie400 [2010-04-01 01:24:36 +0000 UTC]

So Good

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Awasteof-paint In reply to unusualcutie400 [2010-04-01 01:27:19 +0000 UTC]

aw, thank you

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melancholy-colonist [2010-04-01 01:24:36 +0000 UTC]

Wow. Powerful. Moving.

Love it.

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Awasteof-paint In reply to melancholy-colonist [2010-04-01 01:27:13 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

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melancholy-colonist In reply to Awasteof-paint [2010-04-02 00:57:09 +0000 UTC]

your welcome

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