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I watched her nervously as she gazed out across the water and we stopped walking on the dock. The glassy green waters reflected back the evening sky in ripples of lavender and rose. The ship was a dim shape in the falling dusk, but as we stepped closer the ornate carvings I had made along every board became more visible, and the coloured parchments I had hung as curtains over the portholes and windows changed the flickering light from inside into a rainbow of hues. As the sky darkened, the green water faded to black, and the ripples now shimmered with a dozen colours. The sail, white and pure and clean, billowed in the wind. The name along the hull read, "The Consummation.""What do you think?" I asked.
"You built this yourself ...?"
"For you. For us."
"Where will we go--?"
"Onward. I don't know--Another world, another life. I cannot erase the past, and I cannot bring completion to it. But I could complete -this-. We'll search for a cure for you. Begin something else, somewhere else. If you'll have me. If you want this. Nothing is finished, nothing is static; and maybe ... just maybe, I can learn to live with that."
"Can my sister come?"
"... Of course. If she wants."
"You hate her."
"No ... you know I don't. She needs a fresh start as much as we do."
Then she blinked and gasped, squinting up at the deck. The glowing figure of our divine lady patron had emerged into view, and then disappeared below-decks.
"What's -She- doing here?"
"She's finally found the courage to walk away from the pantheon and start something new ... She's coming with us." I smiled. "Sometimes even gods don't know what's next."
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This simple but elegant hand-crafted sea glass pendant includes silver plated wire entwined around a green glass bead and a well-worn piece of luminous green beach glass . Pendant measures 1 inch in length and comes with a complementary ribbon or cord pending availability; ribbons and cords may vary with stock.
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Thank you! Glad it is finally finding a home!
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Is this the start of a story or part of a bigger one? because I'm hooked now 
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It's actually a bit near the end of a very long story
There are a couple other snippets which are from the same universe as the one you just read:
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And if you're curious about the story I'm working on now, here are some relevant snippets for your reading pleasure:
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really!! Awesome!! I could see myself doing that in five years or something.. xD
Ok I'll see
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When you do, it'll be amazing
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thank you! I hope so too!
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I'm sure!! And when you publish it.. well how exactly does that work? And will I be able to buy a copy anywhere?
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I'm self-publishing because I can't go through an editor due to issues of creative control. I have to painstakingly edit my own work. It's an integrity thing. Anyway, you'll be able to buy it as an eBook eventually. I loathe this distributor Smashwords, but I don't think there's really much choice but to go through them. They send books out to Amazon, B&N, etc, and people can download a zillion formats directly on their site too (here's my boyfriend's book as an example: www.smashwords.com/books/view/… . And I -think- it will be under the print-on-demand page limit, which means I can also make it available as a paperback through Amazon without it being ridiculously overpriced. I'm really hoping that there will be more distributors to choose from in a few years.
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Ok!
Oh cool! Took a look!! Looks like it could be interesting
Haha ok
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I always think of writing like sculpting. Writing a draft is like taking the first go at the stone or clay or whatever and getting the basic shape. If you pass it off to an editor at that point, it's like telling someone "here, finish this as you see fit." But sculptors don't do that. They sit there and make pass after pass after pass until they flesh out what they are really looking to create. I find it kind of weird that hardly anyone seems to approach writing that way. I think it may have something to do with the fact that the word processor is a relatively recent invention in history. Back when people had to write pen on paper, there was no way to do all those passes. So you needed a team, hoped for the best, and went with the result. Now though, you can edit to your heart's content.
Title of my book? I think it will be Talystasia: A Fairy-Tale for Grown-Ups. Volume I: In the City.
My boyfriend's writing is soooo much better than mine.
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yeah.. but then again with a sculptor they're focusing on two tasks- to make themselves enjoy it and make one other person enjoy it enough to buy it(or just the first one if it's their job.) However a writer has many more people they have to please since there is not one thing they're trying to promote but many many of the same thing over and over. They have to make it that people pick it and enjoy it over and over- many different people. Now, maybe an editor is just one person and you don't need them, but it can be quite helpful to share your writing with others- friends, even random people. That way you can shape your book so it fits all of those needs and not just one. I'm not saying you need anyone more than yourself but feedback from others can always help
haha cool! I love long titles
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That's a good point. I suppose I hadn't thought of it that way, mostly because I'm not writing for the money
Hahah, I feel the same way about titles. Well, I suck at coming up with them. For a long time it was just going to be "Talystasia" (and then the volume numbers and subtitles), but I like it better with the descriptor. I have an even more ridiculous sentence title in mind for the story you read the snippet of. "Iztaru: A Tale of Love, Loss and Vengeance in Mesoamerica." 
Shawn's writing is scary good. If I had never met him in my life, he'd still be one of my favourite writers. I am easily biased toward people I know and like personally, so the fact that I'd love his work if I didn't know him tells me how good it is
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no, no I know what you're taking about
haha I can be ok.. but I have to have aaalllll the main ideas or main occurrences in front of me and then I can come up with one. However since in most of my books I haven't made a plot outlined that detailed I still don't really have names for them- just working titles. And I think I like it too with the descriptor because it gives it more of a uniqueness
That's awesome.. do you actually study his writing at all like "hey shove over some of your writing. Hmmm now let's see what makes it so good..." cause you know how studying different writing styles and all that can help a lot
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Yes, exactly! I figure if even one person gets something valuable out of reading my book, that's a good thing
I keep detailed outlines of what I see too. They often come in all out of order though, and it can be very amazing to watch the pieces fall together. Or sometimes I won't understand a "past" event on a timeline until way way later when some "future" event makes me look at the past in a new way. It's weird writing something confusing or bizarre down and taking it on faith that someday you'll understand it. And then one day ... you do.
I definitely study Shawn's writing. I've learned a ton from him. I can tell he's learned some stuff from me too. And when I read any book, I'm always earmarking all the pages that I think the author did something really amazing on. My favourite writer is Tanith Lee. So many earmarked pages.
He doesn't have an account on here. He's on G+ plus.google.com/+ShawnMichelde… , but he only adds people who write to say who they are. Or if you're looking for his writing, I am pretty sure there's a substantial preview on Amazon of his book: www.amazon.com/Melody-Pier-For… .
K.
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That's an interesting thought... I don't believe it myself but I respect you for
Yeah.. well normally... with mine I have a beginning, end, and basic in-between. Then details pop into my head randomly- like maybe while I'm walking or the seconds before I fall asleep. The small details I don't write down. just keep in my head so I can tweak them. However, since the sours you are writing from is much different than my own I can see why you'd need to do that
I bet.. 
Ok thanks!!
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Most of my stuff comes to me when I'm in the shower or falling asleep (or waking up). I can retain a lot of it in my head, but just like in real life, I tend to forget a lot of it if I don't write it down. I used to have a much better memory when I was younger :/ When I was in highschool, I could recite conversations I had weeks before, word for word. Those were the days hahah.
Sometimes I think about works as a whole, but I notice what keeps me turning the pages seems to be the details. I suppose there is a reason I am nearsighted
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wow really?? I'm in high school... and that is defintally not true xD Maybe your brain valued conversations and looked for them and memorized them subcaounsouly because it was a way of life. But once out you no longer had need and stopped? Who knows xD And sometimes the good thing with forgetting is you can replace it with something better
I see I guess... but the details make the whole.. and sometimes the details are in every thing- every line- and are there the whole time. Who knows! I haven't tried so... xp and I'm nearsighted too!! but it's no surprise since both of my parents are xp
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I know that a lot of young children are very good at memorization. That's why it's easier for children to learn foreign languages. I remember when I was a kid, if I watched a movie like two times, I could recite it. I knew other kids who could do that too. My memorization abilities probably hung on a little longer than most peoples' for some random reason. I can't imagine any reason I'd ever want to forget how to do something like that. My brain just doesn't do it anymore.
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I love how much these two pieces complement each other.
It seems as though you have a great story going too, I want to read more!
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Thank you!!
Btw, I'm already on the second series of Doctor Who heheh. -totally obsessed now-
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The season with Ten and Rose is one of my favourites!
Have you seen the episode with Madame de Pompadour yet? It's my favourite episode with Ten in it, because he is the most hilarious drunk.
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Not yet! Maybe it'll come up today heheh! I'm all fretting though about how they're going to write Rose out of the show ...
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Rose gets probably as close to a Happy Ending as Doctor Who can manage.
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thanks for the reassurance! I did love the episode you said was your favourite! Only got a few left in the season.
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just finished the season last night! wahhhhhh so sad!!!
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(Don't worry too much though, Rose will come back!)
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I know, but wahhhhh.
Waiting for Series 3 and Series 1 of Torchwood to show up at the library now. this is the fastest I've devoured a tv show in years.
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Lovely wrap and such a nice bright bead! Very pretty work
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Thank you! It's always lovely to receive a comment from you.
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The last line of this story is absolutely awesome, and I love these swoopy lines.
!yoJ
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Thank you!! 
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Still kicking, mostly. I've been zonked since my birthday, but I still have a heap of new shinies to post tomorrow.
!yoJ
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I agree with heavenriver. These 3 pieces share a lot, although mantaining each its own personality. And here it suits very well the use of the silver wire, with more definite and simple volutes, wrapping up the stone without limiting it. As always, very nice work!
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It is a difficult thing to make something unique over and over again with the exact same materials. Sadly sea glass only comes in several colours typically, so I must always find a new way to make green and silver interesting. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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It is, sure. But there're also only 7 notes. And you sure know how to craft your serenades.
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that's the most poetic comment ever.
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Mareld, Fragment and Road to the Sea share a lot of characteristics with it, but I like two peculiarities this one has: the more rugged shape of the stone itself, and the overall design of the wire it is wrapped up with.
The prose is, as always, very enjoyable, and it resembles those you had written before as well. You might really want to start a series both with jewels and prose. I actually think it'd be a great story.
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most of these are excerpts/glimpses of my novel work; it's the easiest thing to do, and helps generate interest in that for whenever I decide to release it (and helps me see my stories in a new light); I do want to do a series with though! As well as a conceptual series with .
Those pendants do indeed share a lot of traits, namely the same materials--most sea glass only comes in green, brown and white, so I have to always find something new to do with the same materials, which is a major challenge.
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I think you could actually make a living with what you write, at least as much as you do for artisan crafts. I'm looking forward for more extracts!
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I'd love to make a living on my writing. It's a long process before I can have something ready to start posting though! Thank you for your encouragement!
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Very nice prose and very nice piece. This is my new favorite and i cannot tell you why....just something about it....Maybe it is better than words cannot describe the feeling.
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Thank you, that means a lot to me from you! 
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you are very welcome. I agree.
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