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SchneckenBeckons [2013-01-24 19:18:03 +0000 UTC]

Overall

Vision

Originality

Technique

Impact

Alright as usual I'll give my little disclaimer here: I judge based off of the artist's current level/what they've done in past works. I try to be as fair and clear about the points that I make and believe that critiques should be used to help the artist improve.



1) Vision: I thought there was a good sense of vision here. The character seems engaged in the picture and there's a sense of movement which I liked. Overall I think the color choices were really good. It's hard sometimes to create a background in which the character doesnt look out of place if they have "non-conventional" colors or markings. The use of orange to contrast the blue tones works well and also meshes with the green and maroon colors of the character nicely. There are much better leading lines here than in previous works by the artist. The high saturation of the bucket and shovel is a bit distracting so maybe bringing those down a bit so they arnt so bright will help to bring some focus back to the character but I did like these editions, it adds a little more visual interest and also gives a playful sense to the picture.

2)Originality: Same thing with originality here as in my last critique, cant really do much that's exceptionally original with a beach scene, but that's ok, I think the artist worked with the scene well anyway.

3) Technique: This has indeed improved since the last submission from the artist. Here we're seeing some blending happening with the background and not the harsh lines as with the previous one. More elements are being included and you can tell that the artist is going out of their comfort zone and trying to add more visual interest to the entire piece. I'm not getting a sense that the background is being used to showcase the character rather than an after thought which is great to see.

4)Impact: The impact is a sum up of the rest of the points given so in this case it is a 3, also an improvement from the last piece. Overall I was pleased to see this picture, I think it's a definite step in the right direction and the artist should keep working to progress.


Now to my other comments:

Starting with background here, since it's a sun set, I feel that a little more color in the clouds was needed, creating that pink/purple hugh would help to better create the atmosphere of sunset.

The background almost seems scrunched to me and lengthening that horizon and the beach itself would help with that. Shrinking the size of the sun itself will help with this as well, even if it's just half the size that it is now.

I liked the color usage for the sun and that the sun was blurred as it would be naturally, I think blurring just the sun and the very first part of the water that touches the sun would help to be able to blend the character a little better with the surroundings. Because of the amount of blurring, it's a little hard on the eyes. It's all about just finding the right balance, and varying from piece to piece depending on what type of background you're working with.


Shading was much better for this one on the underside of the character where there would be harsher shadows. Because this is a sun set, the shadow the body/feet create can be stretched towards the viewer more, but overall the shadow usage was an improvement. I also liked the lightness of the tail that's facing towards the sun and the line of shadow on the tail facing away from the sun. Adding a thin line of brighter green or yellow just along the spine and neck will help to convey the brightness of the light source more.

Overall, much better, you should be proud of your improvements :3

Example of thin bright line usage: [link]

Atmospheric stuff like shine on the water from reflected sunlight: [link]

Example of lengthening the background to create more depth: [link]

Example of using different tones for sand to create more visual interest: [link]

Example of digital sunset scene (obviously yours isnt as dark as this one as far as color goes so ignore that) also has example of light reflecting on the water : [link]

Exampls of shadows and color usage for a sunset: [link]

Here are a few different reference pictures of beaches/sunsets that you might find helpful:

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[link] (you dont need to add those ray lines to the sun as this doesnt really translate well into a digital work unless you're just a god at digital painting...I've yet to see a good example of it being done lol)

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[link] (just some small wave examples, dont pay attention to the colors here)

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Hope this helps!

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Galaxy-Pup [2013-01-24 14:09:15 +0000 UTC]

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ChrisShieigoDeatheon [2013-01-24 07:52:35 +0000 UTC]

nice job

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