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CyneNoir In reply to Vigilo [2011-02-09 13:41:13 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much for the lovely comment and fave! :]
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londonrey In reply to CyneNoir [2011-02-02 03:18:14 +0000 UTC]
you're always welcome
i adore your writing
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DamagedHomewrecker [2011-01-30 12:59:29 +0000 UTC]
i really like this. its gentle. its like a breeze. its like sitting on a porch swing. its like a sigh. i really like this.
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Avallynh [2011-01-30 08:52:38 +0000 UTC]
I love it. It's haunting and beautiful and heavy-hearted: nostalgia fraying gently at the edges.
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primer569 [2011-01-03 02:21:38 +0000 UTC]
You are only 15 wow you are really good. I too enjoyed your third stanza βthe yew trees befriend your sorrow; cradle it with their brittle arms like baby Moses in his basket of reeds. β awesome line though I am very new to this site and even newer to actually writing I hope that this helps you out in someway and hope that one day I might be as good as you.
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primer569 [2011-01-03 02:17:47 +0000 UTC]
Your only 15, wow, yes it was very good I really enjoyed the piece. I myself am very new to this site and eve newer to even writing though I feel that I am not schooled enough to actually give any type of real critique. But I too thought that your third stanza was really good "The yew trees befriend your sorrow; cradle it with their brittle arms like baby Moses in his basket of reeds" I hope that one day I might be as good as you.
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CyneNoir In reply to primer569 [2011-01-03 03:44:12 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for the lovely compliment! ^^
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mystia-solistra [2010-12-26 00:53:58 +0000 UTC]
Your writing is quite incredible. I just want to get that out of the way. And yes, I go back through older works quite often; usually to reassure myself that I'm actually halfway decent, because... well, look how bad I was when I thought I was good.
As for the actual poem, I think your word choice is impeccable. Just... truly amazing. The only thing that bothers me about this poem is that it reads better as prose. Seriously. The line breaks you have generally work, but every once in a while they're premature, and that introduces a somewhat ugly pause in an otherwise extraordinary piece. When all of the line breaks are taken out and the piece is read continuously, it's just gorgeous.
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mystia-solistra In reply to CyneNoir [2010-12-27 21:44:29 +0000 UTC]
You'll probably be sounding more and more like one as I continue to read your writing. As of now, I've only read three of the pieces in your gallery, and I'm interested in reading more as soon as I find the time to do so.
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CyneNoir In reply to Solarune [2010-12-21 18:32:42 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I'm glad you liked the ending- that was probably one of my favorite parts.
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