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I hope it's readable...
The only text-only page of the intro - don't be afraid...the next are all drawn
(srry for the typos - if you see one; let me know! I'm horrible with typing...)
Cheederians are large, horse-sized FELINES with some metaphysical powers. They look like a Oriental cat - lynx- tiger hybrid, living on the Northern hemisphere.
Cheederian species, characters and story by me. Please don't copy and/or use it without my permission!
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Β No, they are not felines but feliform - that's something different if you know more aboutΒ phylogeny. Felidae and hyaenidae are two distinct families within the suborder of feliform carnivora.
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Love this comic and I am excited to read more.
One correction: occurred (it has two r's)
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Thanks! I haven't answered earlier because I tend to keep comments with corrections until I really have fixed the mistake...haven't done that yet though (plz remember to correct it anyway XD). Enjoy the comic!
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"Physical energy versus life energy...
Power versus numbers...
Claws versus teeth."
That there was awesome! I like how you use contrasts that build like that.
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Hi! by screening though some comments I haven't answered I discovered a lot of ncie comments of you...I haven't answered them but read them and I appreciate it...so sorry for the LATE answer of maybe 3 monts later...
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quick question. do u know if these cheederian are still a living species or not?
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In my fantasy they are alive
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ok. so they're not a real species outside ur mind then
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Should I continue to let you know about typos? xD
Well I will cuz it's fun for me. Let me know if it bothers you for some reason, I just like to help and I'm really good at this so...
I feel like Cheederians should be capitalized, and there doesn't seem to be a space between it and the comma. Either "as a* mighty predator" or "as mighty predatorS".
Like I said before, since Cheederians are a species, I feel like they would be capitalized. Goes for all the rest obviously. Just "prey", and "predators, and competed". Northern was capitalized before, should hemisphere have been, and should they be for the hyenas, thus making hyenas possibly need to be capitalized as well?
I think it would be "Power versus numbers" but I'm not quite sure what you mean by number here. If it's something to do with there being more hyenas, then it would be plural. If there's some sort of...idk. It could be properly used as singular, I just can't come up with a good example.
Get a* grip and each other* twice. Then and* instead of And.
Oh yes and there is a random underscore between the and everlasting, first sentence of third paragraph.
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Thanks a lot!!! Finally took the time to fixx it
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It's readable, don't worry)
Can't wait to see the northern hyenas)
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hehe look carefully in the bg XDD
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I've already looked)
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Great work - I love how you explain things whilst still keeping a certain majesty to the story, and I love the subtle background drawings! 
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Thanks! Good to hear that hehe! I have actually no experience with writing at all, so I just do something XD
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No problem!
And really? You seem to be very good at it as far as I can tell. <3
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wow it's great! some good history layed out and some hints at Yves secrecy! YEAH! More more!
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Thanks! Yeps - it's very layered...I will spoil: keep a close eye on the northern hyena lady with the name 'Sabi' - she has very fuzzy neckfur and the colour of a lynx.
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if she harms a hair on Yves's head she's cat-food. But wow, that sounds like a really cool NH! And I like that name...
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Thanks - I'll not spoil anything as it comes to Sabi - unless you ask for it
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well let me ask this one question if itas allowed is she a nice NH or is she a secrative little deamon? *my hackles raise in tension of a potentional threat*
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Sabi is a rather calm and wise hyena who thinks carefully about what she does - I don't say more about her, but she appears in the next 3 pages.
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hum alright then, my fur is still bristled though but at least she's not a spazz I guess I give her her due respect for being smart rather than just acting on impulse. Power to her. But still-Stay off Mineuh's turff until further judgement is passed 
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Spoiler: that will be very, very difficult with Sabi...
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hum, well Mineuh is too stubborn to back down.
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hehe you seem to like it? I actually suck at writing but I try do do my best not to write something like a boring scientific paper. The rest will be much more drawings and art, but still with a very scientific point of view
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*to do.
I do like it, I like it a lot! The backgrounds are extremely brilliant and really add to the atmosphere!
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Awesome! I just can't wait to see these northern hyenas!
Great job, I'm so excited to see the next pages!
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See the background - it also prepares you for the next page XDD
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It's quite hard to see XD
But I see bribes of the creatures in it, it looks wonderful.
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Readable. Nice summary of the overall situation.
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Thanks - I felt it was necessary to explain the role of metaphysics, evolution and competition between species...just to get the rigth point of view on the story.
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