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A shorter one.Used page 19 of "Last Things" by David Searcy.
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This has a vaguely hypertext literature quality to it. Or maybe a schizophrenic flowchart vibe...
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this is how i feel
when i listen to notes
at 11.23pm.
thank you
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I do wonder, though, if what you've accomplished here is much different than Searcy's original. Perhaps what you've shown is that his idea could have been effectively conveyed in all of a few poetic lines. Though of course there are differences.
I would wager that there are more differences between the other poems you've made with longer passages, but you blacked all the other words out so I can't tell
I do like that last line "like someone passing away into silence." In English we have over 500 idioms for death. Or so I've heard. Passing away is a good, ripe with double meanings and ambiguities that make it useful for poetry.
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its beautiful and really clever.
quite an original idea too.
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I love this. It was a bit confusing at first but I really like it.
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This is like, one of the most interesting things I've been in while o.o
Definately a fav xD
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You've been in the poem?! You'll definitely need to show me how this is done!
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ah ~.~ yes, well, : cough : , when I said 'been', it was really 'seen' in disguise.
: slinks away to my loser corner :
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Hahaha... just playin'!
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That's very interesting; I like. I've heard of people doing this, but never actually seen it. Nicely done. =]
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Hahaha... found poetry is a bit esoteric. I don't know of very many poets that do it, although Austin Kleon is pretty good (check him out!).
Glad you like!
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I checked out Autin Kleon, like you suggested, and while I loved his "Agoraphobia", I think you're better than him. 
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That's what she said!
J/k, j/k. Glad you like it!
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great ideas love this concreteness of the poem
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Cool. Glad you like!
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Oh yes. Different kind of blackout poem. I'm enjoying these.
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Thanks... and a link to my profile, too?
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A strangely meditative bit - wistful but not necessarily sadly so. How do you feel about these efforts so far? How does the process feel to you and how does it satisfy your compositional urge?
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Oh, it's satisfying me like a mo-fo. These found poems are a nice change of pace for me, actually.
Thanks for the comment, Dave!
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Like a mo-fo 
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You think so? Please expound!
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convoluted as in it takes work to read the poem, what with the lines leading the eye from one word to the next. it makes the read interesting because the reader's mind, and eye) is engaged in following the poem. At the same time, it takes a a bit of effort to follow, meaning it may take a bit longer to fully interpret and "take apart" the poem
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I love the concept-map you created for the poem. I especially love how both works (the authorβs and the poet) are haunting pieces of writing and you can read both. Like the poet revealed a deeper meaning of the authors words...as only poets can. Beautiful.
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Ah, that's very nice of you to say.
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This is absolutely beautiful. Took my breath away(: Lovely.
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*gives back your breath*
Thank you!
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Favorite! ^^ Short, simple, flowing and beautiful
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Ah, thank you very much!
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