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Stewie106 [2016-11-22 04:24:35 +0000 UTC]

Gosh darn...

This looks absolutely FANTASTIC!!! Like WOWW!!


The Synopsis alone reminds me of the SEGA game Comix Zone~

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Size-And-Stupidity [2016-08-13 01:26:38 +0000 UTC]

Great work...the title itself is a masterpiece!

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FirebornForm [2016-08-03 08:50:30 +0000 UTC]

Ahoy

Looking at this piece I think you are trying to "showcase" too much at once. For the most part you've got a very solid groundwork for composition and arrangement of your characters but my eye is repeatedly drawn to the guy in green. I don't know why you chose to make him upsidedown if this is story related or not but it's highly distracting. It's not per say just due to the upsidedownness of him, but also how close proximity he is on the page right next to the girl from your 2 main focal characters in front and in addition his perspective on doesn't match up with the stairs and he feels out of place without proper grounding. This can be overly tricky to try to free-hand someone standing upsidedown so make use of programs that can rotate the canvas.

For your hands that you've prominently chosen to be a big part of the image don't forget about the muscle bulge of the thumb that will give the palm some depth instead of looking like a flat surface, even in simplified form theres typically always some indication of it. Look at your own hand in the mirror or just grab some reference for it.

Consider lighting and contrast to sell the page. This looks like it's supposed to be dramatic but most of it is fairly bright or midtones. Contrast is THE most powerful tool for visual drama and a very good way to bring down a busy design to something more attention grabbing. Here's a rough adjustment to your values sta.sh/0119swv8wp5k note how much more the 2 characters and title are brought to the front, even though the upsidedown guy is still there the contrast drop in his face makes it much less distracting.

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xXSerena-CrosseXx [2016-08-01 02:02:23 +0000 UTC]

ProjectComment Member here~

First off I would like to praise your composition, it is rather phenomenal and quite impressive.
It looks like you have been doing covers and/or posters for a good amount of time to get the idea down
so well on where everything should be placed. I like how everything lays perfectly on their own layer, from
the foreground from the background-and so on. The added outline around your main two in the front was
a great touch in my opinion and helps portray who the main characters are rather well. Keeping
the villain so shadowed worked great in this the hand being out forward like that came out well.
Most have difficulty with that specific position-so cudos to you~.

Now really the main "problem" I see with this picture is really based on the style which gives a tad wonky propotions
of the face/head, but again this is just a style choice. All around I believe in time you will continue to refine your style and
it won't be so much of a "problem" as you are already near that now.

There is one other thing I did notice which is kind of a strange thing to see, the tiger guy-his legs get suddenly
chopped off abruptly and compared to everyone else who has a reason to get cut off or fades into everything seamlessly-
he doesn't. It's an extreme nit-pick though lol 

A bit of extra advice, that may help bring more focus, is adding a slight overlaying layer to darken or give a tint of colour
to those behind the main two which would make them pop more. It would be a really quick and easy fix and is fun to play
around with =3

Excellent work my friend!

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CiCi-Arts [2016-07-31 04:24:18 +0000 UTC]

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I love the variety of this piece. Not only in the characters and their appearances, but also in the scenery in the background. Your anatomy is spot on for all of these characters, and it looks great the way you shaded the wolf and some of the man & woman as well with the soft, blue light. It's subtle and a lovely touch. Speaking of lighting, the shades on the clothes, particularly of the upside down boy, are very natural and give this piece a lot of depth, especially in conjunction with the perspective of the two hands grabbing toward the viewer. 

The hand of the bird like creature looks great, but the man's hand is a little flat & bland. Perhaps if you'd added a few wrinkles to the glove or even a seam around the side of the thumb, it would've added a lot. Continuing on that train of thought, I'd say that adding seams to the rest of the clothes would be a good idea (you did so with the tiger humanoid's pants, but not so much with anything else). Also on the subject of the man with the white gloves, it seems that maybe his eyes are a little too far up on his head. The bridge of his nose is quite long looking because of it. And while I do think the buildings on the right-hand side of the background look good, the buildings above the tiger humanoid are a little flat. I do like the contrast between the lineless buildings and the lined foreground, however.

Something that really sticks out to me is the red cross in the word "Author". It's almost jarring how it was just plopped right in the middle of it and my brain at first didn't register it as a "t". I'd assume that non-native speakers of English would have a slightly difficult time with this as well. I'd say that maybe it should've been a little more stylized to go along with the calligraphy so it would be very obviously a "t" and a red cross. The author name at the bottom does integrate seamlessly into the piece.

My last complaint has got to be the papers strewn across the background. They are a little on the flat side and would've benefited from darker shading in the very back (to indicate that they're farther away) and perhaps more wrinkles and folds. It's quite difficult to keep paper unwrinkled once you take it out of the package, especially if said paper is flying around on the ground.

Getting out of the technical aspects, I'd like to speak of the creative and conceptual aspects. As a whole, this cover draws attention to the reader. Not only are the colors striking and the style cartoonishly appealing, but the fact that the perspective has two large hands pointed right toward the viewer would get almost anyone to take a second glance. The viewer can see there's some sort of strange, supernatural or science fictional goings -on here, with the almost demonic looking wolf and bird creature, as well at the boy seemingly trapped in M. C. Escher's "Relativity".

I also love the intense shading here; it works well and gives the piece a darker edge to it. I, personally, am intrigued by the style of clothes they're wearing. The main male and female seem to be dressed as doctors or scientists, whereas the boy and the tiger humanoid are dressed in a very "normal" way, wearing clothes that one would see when walking through the store literally anywhere in the world. Adding to that the fact that this has something to do with an "Author", it makes me wonder what any of these characters have to do with writing. And why's the man's glove look like it has something reflecting off of it? Just questions that can only be answered by delving into the comic series.

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rei-kaa [2016-07-30 03:35:49 +0000 UTC]

Hello I'm from Project Comments

First of all my first impression of this work is that it has a thoughtful composition. It's very easy to tell who are the main characters, and the personality of the characters are conveyed through facial expressions and they way they pose. I can sense that the lighting of this work is well thought out, as I can see you did add the blues reflect light on the outline of the characters to increase the misty atmosphere.
For parts that might need some improvement, I will start with the colors :

I did a quick color pick of the main tones, and realized that the tones on top do go well together, but the tones on the bottom role seem to contrast the browns too much, breaking the harmony of the color palette. One thing to keep in mind is the saturation of the colors, as I found out the reds on the background is highly saturated. Using too many saturated tones will make the colors look too strong and imbalanced overall. Color theory will help you to understand more on how color works
 
Then I checked the values of these colors (Value = how dark / light a color is), and realizing there are 6 dark values, 4 mid tones and only one light value. A balanced value of a picture should have mid tones dominating over the darkest and lightest tones. (It's a bit hard to explain values, D: I would suggest you to find some tutorials on colors and value, but I've got a good color palette website for you, it is called designseeds. Although it's more of a website for graphic design , it can inspire you when you struggle with considering colors )  Also, I see that you used colors that are almost black, or complete black, I would suggest you to avoid using blacks because it will make the picture less colorful. (the wolf and the guy behind for example)

Secondly, I realized the thickness of the lineart is a little bit consistent.  I found an image to help me explain this : i.ytimg.com/vi/evaKohGnJF0/max… . The line art on the left has lines that have almost the same thickness, which seems to look stiffer compared to the one on the right which has smoother lines with a combination of thickness (etc the tip of the hair is thinner than the rest) That might have to do with pen pressure settings. You can work on adding variation of thickness to your line art to make it more detailed and naturalistic. 

Some other minor points to mention is when I look at the poster as a thumbnail, the foreshortened hands are dominating the picture, drifting audience's attention away from the characters. Maybe you can show the face of the back character more, to avoid repeating the stretched hand pose the main character already have. I actually liked the font and the effect you did with the title, and I would prefer you to keep the "t" the same font with the rest but change its gradient to red, to keep a consistency in terms of the overall design.
I think you've put a lot of effort in this work, I think you have the potential improve Making an original comic isn't easy, I feel like your character designs are great so keep up the good work!     Hope this can help ^^

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Starframe3D [2016-07-29 09:53:49 +0000 UTC]

First of all, you did a great job at coloring (with saturated colors ).
Also I especially like the composition of this piece,
as the placement of the characters seems harmonic .
Also the particle like effect of the papers flying around adds a nice effect to your artwork. 
At the other hand I think you where a bit too careful not to overdo it
with the glow effect on the sheets and the skin on the main characters ? hand.
If you look at this  or this picture for the hand or this one for the sheets of paper,
you'll know, what I mean. You could just be a bit bolder .
Also I'd like to point out, that the opposite applies to your title.
A title should always be in some way separated from the background and in applying so much glow to it,
you somewhat merged it with the background.
You could fix this only by placing your texts outline over the glow instead of under it,
or designing it like you already did with the authors tag.
Now on to some positive points again ^^.
The red background complements the blue foreground nicely and adds a bit more contrast
to the artwork without distracting from everything else.

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goricat [2016-07-25 16:22:09 +0000 UTC]

This poster is very effective in how it portrays characters and plot. To improve I would suggest adding more details to the main characters or adding blue/red highlights and shadows to connect them to the background and the title. I would, for the male character in front bring his hair up higher, because his eyes or so high the higher the hair/skull would look more natural. For the title I think the red cross should be in the same fashion as the other letters because at the moment it stands out and creates a focal point below all of the characters. Lastly create different poses as such pose has been used before, create different posters and refer to other posters for ideas. creativity and unique characters create interest, where readers will want to read you book! 

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LinkenparkLove [2016-07-25 09:30:04 +0000 UTC]

This is very nice work. A simple and subtle background that doesn't steal focus from the characters. I like the placement of the characters, they are in a circle that nicely leads the viewers eyes around to see all of them.
There is one thing i would change though. The titel text is placed very low on the page and seems disconnected from the focus point. I would move it upwards, closer to the main characters raised hand. That way when you look around to all the characters and end up back at the hand you would automatically look down at the text. Right now there is nothing leading me to look down at the title. 
I like the way you designed the title, both the text and the colors. It looks very interesting and makes me want to read the manga. Over all very well done

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MartinBlur [2016-07-25 01:31:50 +0000 UTC]

Hi! I'm come from

When it comes to the creation of original stories, the struggle is real. And even although this piece goes deep into widely over-used resources, that's not a lot to say when it is done right. But first...
Let's check each and every point.

The placement of the characters is likely well though as it makes for an excellent implementation of cover composition (more on that later) and gives you very rough idea of how they may be, yet not where they are leading to. And that's what you want when it comes to attracting audience into getting to watch your story.

Consistency from the standpoint of overall painting style is also remarkably well conserved, not just between characters of course, but also with the background and others elements, which is highly necessary to accomplish a neat, presentable cover, and here, that is more important than with most other forms of artwork. Because it's not just a single frame of this big story. Is the first frame and also the most important.
Good work on this, but be more careful with blending excessively on a cell shaded artwork. Make sharper lightning to some clothes angles, the main character's blue clothe looks a little too dull, for example.

VERY IMPORTANT: You might want to make the viewer focus in something, let's say the hand. Well, in this specific case, you will really want to give more detail into it, and also more shading, as it is now overly flat and is hard to differentiate it from "the power". You want to add more sparkle. Maybe something in Add or Color dodge layer, to give "the power" more strength and contrast.

You also did a very good job on poses but I have to mark you a couple of minor details you should take care of. Check the pose of the main male character. Is a little too stiff, even for whatever thing he is doing here (excuse me my ignorance on the subject). If it weren't for the visual feedback from "the power", i could easily think he is either "stopping me" right there, or "waving" at me, with a very sarcastic, unwelcome kind of face. A "nicer" way of fixing it could be either doing something (whatever) with his other arm, like (for the sake of the example) holding a ripped book maybe, OR angling is head just a bit down, to give it some aggressiveness, to a light degree at least. You'll be benefited from more study on body expression. Sycra has well covered that, for sure.

Excellent work with the face expressions, BUT... I'd like to see you take more risks and experiment more with exaggerations. Or at least I expect it to be done as practice. It will serve a great boost on your millage and will help you give watchers more awareness of the feelings of the characters.

Frame composition and thumbnailing: Have you checked how would have it looked with a dark gradient from the lower edge to roughly the middle of the image? It would no doubt give more impact to the title, which is amazing btw. BUT (again) talking about that... The red cross "T" letter:
No. Sorry. It is kind of breaking the sketchiness and roughness of the rest of the text. Is too plain and flat looking for such an artwork, you could add some light shading, glow or dirt and rougher edges. Just a bit of virtually anything should be enough, because how it is now, it looks almost copy-pasted, as this cross-styled letter could easily BREAK the image altogether if this was a much more serious environment. Fortunately, I don't see the need of getting rid of it, as long as you do something about it at all.

IN THE END...

Be careful of getting way too careful, or the story of this gentlemen might fall short as a fatal victim of visible amounts of cliche, since the composition with the characters and the mainstream structure they are following, as good as it goes, is something I am seeing quite often. Now your mission is to go and show everybody how wrong I am, and I'd like it to happen, as I'm yet to read the story and I can certainly expect to see stuff that I could not have imagined myself.
On the other side: Is hard to see stuff of this level on DA so in some degree it is still outstanding: not from just from this frame, but also from what it comes with it, and forward. Nevertheless, I think I like how it turned out.

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Fluffy-fez [2016-07-25 00:59:12 +0000 UTC]

Things I like about this piece:
So firstly, love the shading in this piece. I feel you could've taken things a bit too far like most people do with the blue lights, but yours actually seems to work. It has a good light source that you enforce very well throughout the piece, and adds a sense of atmosphere to the claw that's reigning upon the group. 
I also like the character designs. They aren't as simple as most people would like, but I feel that they're unique without being too "Mary Sue" (for lack of a better word.) 
I like how much time and effort you put into the title cover of your comic, I've seen quite a few people half-ass this sort of thing. I also sometimes see people half-ass the comic itself. And even though this title cover has some problems, it's obvious that you put a lot of work into it anyhow, and can bring any reader in.

Things I feel need to be improved:
Firstly, I feel that the red cross for the title stands out a bit much. It seems to off-set the color palette, and it doesn't have any shadows, so it just seems "out of place". 
I also feel the front character needs to be improved upon. I understand hands are hard to draw and you'll get better over time, so we're not even going to go over that. However his face just doesn't seem right, he kinda looks like he has no cheekbones in all honesty. I'm sure he'll look better as the comic goes on, but I just (personally) don't like the design for his face.
I would also suggest next time, to shade darker around the back of the picture. The background characters seem about as bright as the front characters, and has the viewer distracted by the background. Sure having a lot in a picture to look at can be good, but not when it takes focus away from the main character.

Overall, I'm going to binge-read your comic, and I hope this critique can help you  

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MSSeymour [2016-07-24 23:43:55 +0000 UTC]

Hi! I’m from project comment.

There are a lot of things that I really like about this piece. I love the use of many different dimensions and perspectives. The stairs in the background going off one way, the contrasting flatness of the skyline on the left, and the boy who is floating upside down! It is a nice touch without being overwhelming and having all of the characters helter-skelter all over the place. I also like how you have used light and darkness to say a lot about each character. The man in the back and the wolf are clearly villainous from the dark forms and glowing red eyes (very sinister, by the way!). Immediately on looking at this piece I was gripped by the talons! They really draw you in and the lighting on them is spectacular. I love the glimmer of blue light that is reflected on all the characters. The design of the tiger-man is very interesting and the coloration is well done to blend believably into skin. I like how he is half in the light and half in the dark; it gives him a sense of mystery and makes you wonder if he is really one of the good guys.

I also like how the large talons reaching out mimic your protagonist’s reaching out. The light in his hand is well done, but I would suggest a possible halo effect if you want it to look even more like the light is spreading out from the center. Right now there is clearly light, and the light seems to be wrapping around the characters, but it seems well contained in his palm. I like the way you have drawn their hands; the proportions are correct and perspective is interesting. My only comment is for a cover, I would expect to see just a few hints of palm lines like you have done in the palm of the taloned hand. 

I like the style in which you have drawn all of your characters. It’s very unique and clearly yours. The protagonist’s eyes seem a very flat blue, however, compared to his female counterpart. Perhaps a tad more dimension would suit him well. Fascinating work! I’m sure that your cover will draw people in to read it, which is, after all, the point of a cover.

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Danieljamieson [2016-07-24 22:29:42 +0000 UTC]

This is an interesting piece. I like the way that the characters are placed. I am guessing that Arthur is a doctor with the use of the + symbol. Im a little confused with this front cover but thats okay for a comic. 
I think there could be more indication that this is about arthurs book comming to life like words on the papers behind him as i get the feeling in this image like those are doctors papers like he is a detective.
with the tiger guy im not sure he is a good guy or a bad guy as he is to close to the evil guy in the background. the placement of the boy floating upside down is an interesting concept it makes me think he has something to do 
with the big evil guy as he is looking at him quite happily. 
The text gives off a feeling like this is about ghosts. 
I looked at the first attempt and think that that is much better then this one as it more cleaner and easier to understand. sometimes effects don't do much you have to use these effects to your advantage and i think that you have used to many effects here.  
Hope this helps you have achieved thing in here like making the main character Arthur the point of focus.  
good work keep it up there is room for improvement here but other then that it looks good.

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tatwsmelys [2016-07-24 21:00:58 +0000 UTC]

Hello there. Came here from Project Comment.

Really dynamic piece that's already telling an interesting story. You're letting me know you've got magic, mystery and monsters, adventure, making me want to read on with the comics. Your style is very inviting and extremely clear, it works well for a comic book style. There's some good composition/positioning going on and the colour gradient, going from light blue in the foreground and deep red in the background, is very effective at catching the eye. Personally I'd push the contrast a bit more to create depth. Contrast just adds drama, it's all a matter of how much do you want. Be careful with your light sources aswell. One thing about the composition that bothers me a little is the upside down boy, maybe there is a reason for his floating, hanged man stance, but he just needs to come in a little to the middle and down a bit to balance the image and maybe be rotated around. He looks off, like he's just been plonked there.
 Your character design is great too, they're full of expression. I'm getting a feel for their personalities in how you've drawn the emotions on their face. Who likes a good joke, who is naughty, who is gruff but lovable, a flawed unwilling hero who ultimately steps up? It's great. You've already got me investing in your characters! I also really like your ghostly, magical ether font for the title. I do agree with the comment below that said it made them think 'medical' but it also makes me think 'magical healing powers' which is compelling. If you don't want that vibe I'd match your T with the rest of the writing.
Anyway I hope this is encouraging/helpful feedback for you. I'm now reading your comic. Thanks

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DSegno92 [2016-07-24 19:52:30 +0000 UTC]

A very effective poster, there's plenty you can understand just only from this: who is the protagonist, who is the companion, the villain, the anti-hero, the element who is needed for the plot...also, you managed to show even some of their abilities, powers and personalities just from their poses and expressions, and that the contest of the story will be of the supernatural genre. Even giving away these elements, there still is a shroud of mistery, something that says "you think you have understood all there is? Come here, and I'll show you how much you're wrong!".
From the confront with your previous versions, I've seen you took many steps in improving the shadows. But I feel obliged to praise you for the group: it's compact, but not chaotic, it fills the picture and shows the characters, giving them equal importance, it's very well balanced.
I don't have anything to say about your style or eventual flaws, considering that I can't find any of them. It looks like, how is called that way between manga and comic, western manga? Anyway, it's very personal, and this is the best thing, keep like that.

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nihidea [2016-07-24 18:01:27 +0000 UTC]

Hello there, I am here from ProjectComment !

Taking in this piece at first glance, it seems like a very striking cover or poster for a story, one that could be easily imagined on the cover of a comic. The composition of the characters and elements on the page is very well done, it allows a good look at everything without making the page seem to cluttered and crowded. The characters' design is simple yet expressive so that you can tell from looking at the picture what kind of personality they might have or what role they might play in the story. The pose and expression especially of the woman in the lab coat and the guy with the tiger stripes are very meaningful with regard to the impression the viewer gets of them, as is the fact that the latter is half hidden in shadows. The escher-esque stairs in the background and the boy on them were probably the element that intrigued me the most with regards to the content of the story. The title and the pages flying and lying around are also doing a good job alluding to the premise of the story.

As for things to criticize; here's a few small issues I noticed: 
First of all, the actual visual design of the title seems to me somewhat contradicting its content, especially with the rec cross as the "t", one would rather expect that kind of design in a title like "the Doctor" or something like that. It might be, that this design has a justification within the story, but like this it seems counter-intuitive. While the paper, as I said, is a nice touch, I think in the execution they could be a bit more detailed. Especially the ones lying on the ground behind the woman seem rather flat and could use some more realistic shading to give them more depth. Maybe it would also make sense to have something written on the pages, since the story seems to be about a writer/author?
Additionally I feel that, while some areas of the picture, are wonderfully detailed, others seem to lack detail and therefore fall a little flat. For example, and this is the first thing I noticed when I looked at the picture, one would expect that the outstretched hand of the person in the front would have some lines on them, some creases, to indicate that it is more than a flat surface drawn on a page. I had the same feeling with the faces and hair of the man and woman in the front - they might really benefit from some structure or small details (more strands in the hair, some lines to indicate the shape of their face or the crease of their eyelids, etc).
I realize that in a comic one usually tries to not indulge into too fine details so it doesn't become too much work, but I think a title page/poster can definitely benefit from some more details - it might help to make more people develop an interest for your comic.

I hope this comment helped you and in the end I can only say that this poster definitely intrigued me into looking into your comic, especially after taking a much closer look at it after the first glance.

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Jagabe [2016-07-24 04:45:53 +0000 UTC]

This looks wicked!! 

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stalker034 [2016-07-23 20:13:53 +0000 UTC]

epically magnificent  great perfectly wonderful art !   

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EstelleHasse [2016-07-23 08:43:16 +0000 UTC]

I absolutely LOVE the glowing effect! 
The only thing that's bugging me between this one and the second-attempt is the shading on the upside down stairs.
(Also, I knew his powers we medic-based! Knew it!...Unless I'm wrong. Even then. Oh well.)

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