medreaming [2010-08-03 20:45:53 +0000 UTC]
I really love this story. The mystery of the unicorn really adds to the story, although you could flesh out the encounter somewhat more, especially the woman's reaction and how the unicorn looked. Other than that, the last paragraph is also brilliant— that last line with the satire just completes the story perfectly.(And Terry Pratchett FTW. )
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GirlWithAHat In reply to medreaming [2010-08-04 06:25:55 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for the helpful comment and the fav. True, the encounter wasn't that good, I wrote it the morning after the rest because someone distracted me the night before, and I had lost touch to the story. I tried to improve it now, though.
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were-were-wolfy [2010-08-03 12:55:11 +0000 UTC]
Yeaahh! Pratchett reference! Really great story. But I'm afraid you left someone out at the end.
GirlWithAHat In reply to were-were-wolfy [2010-08-03 14:28:29 +0000 UTC]
What do you mean?
were-were-wolfy In reply to GirlWithAHat [2010-08-03 18:12:37 +0000 UTC]
Uhmm, I guess DEATH should have had a side appearance somewhere. Although considering the style of the story, I think it is better as it is.
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GirlWithAHat In reply to were-were-wolfy [2010-08-03 19:00:10 +0000 UTC]
Of course! Although I prefer the death of rats with its SNH, SNH, SNH. But they story wasn't meant to be that funny, sad as it is.
Soakers In reply to were-were-wolfy [2010-08-03 18:25:16 +0000 UTC]
Susan was due to show up, but there was a parent teacher meeting.Nice story btw