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Description PATTY CAKES: THE REMAKE
Made by GlitchyProductions
Original story by Pegacorn Ondacob.


Fluttershy sat content in her kitchen, sitting in a dark room all by herself feeling a plethora of emotions. All she had been working for up to this point in her life, she thought that nothing was of value. Her lovely animals and her lovely friends were there to comfort her when she was upset; there was something that broke her down from the start. She was lonely, she wanted someone to live with her and give her some love and attention.

Fluttershy had turned off all the lights in her house and sat down in the middle of the kitchen in front of the large dining table, a massive wooden table that had a massive jar that held a collection of rare flowers that were found all over Equestria. She rested her head onto the surface of the table and wrapped her arms around her head and closed her eyes.

Thinking of all the things that she had done in secrecy without the notice and help of her friends, buying baby clothing and items to prepare herself for her motherhood in future life, there was something ultimately missing from her plan. It was a child of her own, she spent money on something that she may of never would get from being such a shy woman. Being too scared to talk to most of the men in RumsVille.

She wanted a baby, and she wanted one to complete her life.

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Rainbow Dash ran down the forest path as fast as her strong athletic legs would let her, it was time for her to get ready for the running of the leaves soon and she had to practice with only three days to prepare for the insanity unlike last year. She was wearing her usual attire of clothing, a thin blue tracksuit that she wore over her tank top, on the side of her tracksuit she had a large image that shown a rainbow and a cloud mixed together to make a rather childish tattoo. She was wearing her autumn trousers, blue denim trousers that complimented her blue tracksuit making her look like one of the weather rangers.

She ran down the forest path as fast as she could, passing by passersby and chunks loads of tress in the forest path. Nearly doing an entire lap around the whole town jogging she passed by Sweet Apple Acres and the Sugar cube Corner saying hello to her friends and making devious taunts to Applejack at the farm for the next big race.

One person that she didn't say hello to was her best friend Fluttershy, the girl she had known for so long who kept herself to herself. The shyest girl around RumsVille and she had nothing to say, as said by the men of the town. It peeved her to think that men would taunt and make fun of such a lovely girl like Fluttershy and it was time to visit her.

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Fluttershy slumped herself into her living room, feeling tired of her proud work from the sleepless nights of buying baby products and storing them into her converted nursery. She worked her way to her couch and stood in front of it, she saw a cardboard box filled to the brim with her latest order of baby supplies. He picked it up and placed it on the ground next to one of the other boxes filled with baby clothing.

She slowly let herself go and rested her body on the top of the couch; she spread her entire body all over the couch feeling like she was on her big fluffy bed. Closing her eyes and feeling the tension inside her body dissapear after three hours of reading the Canterlot. Co catalogue after ordering baby clothing and items, she had preparing herself for at least 2 years in secrecy before meeting her friends.

Her desires for a child were very secretive, only Rarity knew about the whole secret. She even helped out by giving some money to Fluttershy to help her buy some of the supplies and help out with the transformation of her spare room being turned into a nursery.

Looking up at the ceiling seeing the light from the crack in the windows reflect onto her soft face, she saw a strange shadow rising up at the front door. She knew who it was and it was time for her to visit.

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"Fluttershy, you in there?" Rainbow Dash knocked on the door, she was in schedule and she did not want to waste time. She hammered on the door as hard as she could without tearing it down.

Multiple sounds of locks being clicked out of place on the other side of the door was heard, Rainbow Dash couldn't wait to get inside and relax for the 30 minutes she was given by herself for training.

"I'll be right there..." A small squeak of a sound was heard on the other side of the door was heard, Rainbow Dash smirked, contently waiting for the door to open.

The door fully opened and Fluttershy was greeted by Rainbow Dash standing at the front of the door, happy and impatient as ever.

"Hello Rainbow Dash, what brings you here?" Fluttershy blushed; she looked up at Rainbow Dash who was rearing to go.

"I'm just training for the running of the leaves and I happened to jog down the path that goes to your house, so I thought I might as well come to this shin-dig and rest for a while." Rainbow Dash stretched her arms and smirked.

"Please, come in." Fluttershy smiled, she moved out of the door and allowed Dash to enter her house.

"Sure." Rainbow Dash walked in and gave a small light hug to Fluttershy, she blushed and hugged back. Rainbow Dash let go and made her way into the living room, to her surprise it was pretty dark inside and she noticed that the lights were off and some of the curtains were closed.

"What's with the house being so dark Fluttershy?" Rainbow Dash could barely see what was going on.

"Oops... I'm so sorry Rainbow Dash, I had a little head ache from the lights and I wanted to have a quick nap." Fluttershy replied.

"But it's 9.30, it's just barely sunrise." Rainbow Dash turned round to Fluttershy rather confused.

"I was up all night." Fluttershy looked down at the ground.

"Why?" Rainbow Dash sternly looked at her.

"Umm... I couldn't get to sleep."

Rainbow Dash started to stretch her arms in the middle of the living room, looking at Fluttershy she was a little concerned about what was going on.

"Is there something you need to tell me?" Rainbow Dash raised her arm into the air, pointing at the ceiling.

"Umm... I don't have anything to say." Fluttershy looked at the ground.

"Sure?" Rainbow Dash wanted to give up, it wasn't any use talking.

"Yes Rainbow Dash, sorry for making you think that something is wrong." Fluttershy apologized.

"Don't sweat it." Rainbow Dash smiled.

Fluttershy walked over to the light switch and turned it on, the kitchen and the living room lights, the whole room was refreshed with a lively boom of light.

"There we go." Fluttershy smiled.

Rainbow Dash kept on stretching her arms and looked around the room; it was clean, very clean. Fluttershy usually liked keeping her house clean, but it was too clean. All the dust resting on the TV and the shelves and cupboards was wiped clean and the video games that they played last week had all been put back into their respective boxes.

"What's with the cleaning?" Rainbow Dash asked.

"What?" Fluttershy miss-heard.

"What's with the seriously bogus cleaning?" Rainbow Dash inspected the living room.

"Oh, I'm just... uh... cleaning the house a little..." Fluttershy blushed.

"Okay." Rainbow Dash ignored her response; she was more interested in the couch.

"Shall I make some nice warm tea?" Fluttershy asked Rainbow Dash.

"Yeah sure, do whatever you want." Rainbow Dash walked over to the couch and slumped over it, knocking over some of the perfectly positioned pillows. She slipped off her jogging shoes and spread out her legs and arms and rested herself.

There was a small minute of silence before anyone could speak, Fluttershy went into the kitchen and Rainbow Dash soon followed her. Rainbow Dash was resting on the side of the fridge and Fluttershy was making some warm tea for the both of them.

"Where's Angel?" Rainbow Dash asked Fluttershy, she stopped what she was doing and turned round to see Rainbow Dash stretching her arms and legs continuously in the kitchen.

"Oh... it's mating season for bunnies and-" Fluttershy began to speak.

"What?! Seriously?!" Rainbow Dash replied, rather shocked.

"Umm... Yes..." Fluttershy blushed and continued her work on the warm tea.

"Atta' boy!" Rainbow Dash cheered, raising her fist into the air.

"Yes." Fluttershy giggled a little.

"I bet he is going to get all the lady bunnies, he's such a pro." Rainbow Dash joked.

"I don't mean to sound bad or anything, but it's just... umm... he was doing things before... uh... mating season." Fluttershy continued her work.

"What do you mean?" Rainbow Dash asked.

"He was... umm... humping objects..." Fluttershy blushed.

Rainbow Dash threw out into a burst of laughter; she didn't expect a well-controlled bunny like Angel to do such a thing. She held her stomach and kept herself upright.

"He left the house yesterday." Fluttershy mentioned.

"I'm sure it's normal for an animal to do something like that." Rainbow Dash wiped one of the tears from her face, she couldn't believe it. On the other hand Fluttershy felt a little insecure now that information about Angel had been told about his mating season.

"It is, the forest animals do it as they please." Fluttershy blushed crimson red.

"Let's just sit down before I explode." Rainbow Dash giggled.

---

Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy had turned on the TV after leaving the kitchen, they decided what TV show to watch and it was by Fluttershy's decision that they would both watch cartoons together. It was a strange cartoon about a talking rabbit being chased by a hunter and a black duck on rabbit season.

It was a very funny cartoon and both couldn't help but laugh at it. Fluttershy noticed that Rainbow Dash had taken off her tracksuit and shown off her small tank top, it was a blue tank top that held the image of her tattoo cutie mark. The tank top shown off her belly and the rest of her stomach and belly button. Rainbow Dash on the other hand rubbed her belly in delight, she was smiling at her rubbing her own belly and Fluttershy took notice to this strange action.

Rainbow Dash was curious, she knew that Fluttershy was a very shy girl and whenever a boy spoke to her she could nearly faint at just the sight of them. Knowing that she isn't romantically swinging to girls or having a fear of boys themselves she was wondering what was with all of the cardboard boxes next to the couch. They looked like they were filled with items but she wondered what was inside, curiosity was killing the cat.

"Rainbow Dash." Fluttershy whispered in the middle of the cartoon. It was rather loud and wacky.

"Yeah Fluttershy?" Rainbow Dash turned her head from the cartoons and looked at Fluttershy.

"Can I tell you something?" Fluttershy blushed; she lowered her head and looked away towards the TV screen.

"Sup?" Rainbow Dash crossed her arms and smirked.

"I need to go to the bathroom." Fluttershy blushed.

"You don't need to tell me that." Rainbow Dash smiled, she raised her arm and patted Fluttershy's shoulder.

"Umm... I'm sorry..." Fluttershy smiled, yet blushed at the same time.

"Don't worry about it; now go do your business." Rainbow Dash smiled.

Fluttershy slowly got up and walked over to the stairs and made her way upstairs, after Rainbow Dash watched the shy girl make her way upstairs it was time to see what was inside those cardboard boxes. It was killing her to find out what was inside them.

"Right..." Rainbow Dash took a deep breath; she got herself off the couch and got ready to see what was inside the boxes. She hoped it wasn't anything bad that was inside.

She took an inspection of one of the cardboard boxes resting next to the fire place. The cardboard box was a very small and fragile box that looked like it had taken a beating in the mail. It had a massive label across one of the sides that read out in a very large print:

"CUSTOMER: FLUTTERSHY, BABY CO. ORDER #23,567 - Babiez Absorbent Diapers Sizes 6 - 8 + Snuggle bun Pink Pacifier w/ Snuggle bun One-Fits-All Onesie Limited Edition."


Rainbows stomach did a small twist and turn, she didn't expect something like this to be in Fluttershy's house. Millions of thoughts ran across Rainbows head and they were all good and bad.

"Why the hell has she got this?" She whispered to herself.

Rainbow Dash opened the card board box from the side and opened it to reveal the inside of the box was filled with strange little polyester chips inside them, obviously covering up the items inside to protect them from being damaged. She dug her hands into the packaging and felt something soft; it felt like a strange plastic object with a strange rubber ending. She grabbed onto it and then pulled it out of the box, launching some of the chips inside the box onto the floor around the box.

She had grabbed onto a large pink pacifier and saw it was covered in strange little yellow butterflies. Her heart had stopped for a moment and wondered why Fluttershy had this in one of the boxes.

"Fluttershy... what the hell..." She whispered again.

She threw the pacifier to the side and then dug her grubby hands into the polyester chips again and searched for even more items, she was expecting a monster or something to pop out and grab her judging by how weird the contents of the cardboard box had been.

She finally felt something at the very bottom of the box, slowly grabbing onto it and lifting it up trying to not to spill out the chips inside the box. She found out it was a pack of "Babiez Absorbent Diapers" wrapped in a thick plastic wrapping, she saw through the thin transparent plastic to see a pack of 24 diapers, neatly folded against each other sporting images and logos of rattles, bottles, butterflies and rainbows. Strangely big enough to fit a normal sized child.

"What the..." Rainbow Dash gulped, it felt like she was swallowing a massive stone that was being forced down her throat. She was confused to why Fluttershy would order items like this, was she hiding something? Did she have problems when sleeping? Was she going to pull off a massive prank involving diapers? Too many questions and so little answers.

Rainbow Dash slowly lifted up the giant pack of diapers and placed them to the side of the cardboard box, slowly brushing the polyester chips aside and started to dig down for that so called "Onesie" that was supposedly inside the bottom of the box.

She started to rummage through the box again and searched for that onesie, she found felt up a strange cotton material lying at the base of the cardboard box mixed with the polyester chips, and she grabbed the object and inspected the material and moved it out of the box to reveal an onesie.

"Dude... what the hell..." Rainbow Dash gulped, she didn't like the feeling inside of her stomach. It was as if a wrench was turning the cogs in her guts apart, causing them to fall out of place and break.

She looked at what she was holding, a medium sized onesie that would perfectly fit any baby or child. It was the colour of a light cyan blue that wrapped itself around the whole onesie; it seemed to be a strange type of onesie showing how there isn't any covering for the legs and the crotch pad had been slightly edited with some of the buttons missing.

Rainbow Dash thought it was about time to confront Fluttershy about the items in one of her packages from the RumsVille mail, there was no way that Derpy had switched up the boxes as it had Fluttershy's name printed on the side of it and the address to the house was also on there.

Dash rose up and turned around to see Fluttershy standing at the base of the stairs, Rainbow Dash was startled by her friend watching her, causing her to fall back upon seeing her friend stand in what was left of the shadows.

"Rainbow Dash... this isn't what it looks like..." Fluttershy panicked.

Rainbow Dash fell over the cardboard box with the giant packet of diapers to soften her fall at the very least, nearly hitting her head on the side of the couch feeling sick at the sight that her friend had been watching her the whole time.

Fluttershy had tears in her eyes, feeling the doom that was bestowed upon her as her best friend that she knew since childhood found out about her recently imported baby supplies. Word would spread all over RumsVille and the whole town would be on the secret.

"Looks like?!" Rainbow Dash yelled.

Fluttershy quickly cowered and lowered her head in shame.

"What is going on?! What's with all of these baby supplies?" Rainbow Dash got up and walked over to Fluttershy rather quickly. Fluttershy took a step back awaiting a massive shouting from her best friend.

"I c-can explain..." Fluttershy whispered, afraid to even speak in front of the angry Rainbow Dash.

"Listen, I'm a little freaked out, why are you buying baby supplies?" Rainbow Dash calmed her down and turned away from Fluttershy and walked over to pick up the giant packet of diapers. "Can you explain these?" Rainbow Dash gestured, she shook the package up and down and gave it to Fluttershy, who she slowly grabbed hold of the diaper package.

"Well?" Rainbow Dash tapped her foot.

"I... umm... I..." Fluttershy dropped the giant package and quickly made a run for it upstairs, quickly running upstairs with every footstep making a loud bang on the wooden stairs with the bedroom door closed shut with a loud slam. Rainbow Dash stood in place calling her name hoping that she would return back.

"Fluttershy wait!" Rainbow Dash yelled.

---

Fluttershy sobbed harder than anything that her emotions ever felt, she sat on her small wooden bed on top of her giant pink fluffy blanket. In her hands was a small fluffy teddy bear with a large pink ribbon attached to its ears, she hugged it tightly as hard as she could trying to relieve all of her emotions by transferring them into the teddy bear.

"Fluttershy?" A faint whisper was heard on the opposite side of her room, Fluttershy didn't dare to look up knowing what was going to happen. The last time Fluttershy told one of her close friends a secret, everything got out of control and she ended up modelling for an old woman with a passion for fashion.

"P-please go away..." Fluttershy squeaked.

"I'm going to leave until you tell me what's up?" Rainbow Dash yelled.

This caused Fluttershy to crawl in her shell once more and she squeezed the teddy bear even tighter than before, she started to sob even louder making it sound like wailing.

"I c-can't! It's too silly!" Fluttershy whispered.

Fluttershy felt a hand on her shoulder, she looked up and opened her eyes to see Rainbow Dash sitting down on her bed next to her, feeling rather worried about what was going on and the sudden transformation of her bedroom into what looked like a nursery.

"Nothing is too silly, just look at Pinkie Pie." Rainbow Dash didn't smile at her own joke.

"It's t-too silly..." Fluttershy droned on again.

"If you don't tell me what is wrong then I can't help you, just spill the beans..." Rainbow Dash put her arms around her crying friend and slowly hugged her calmly, feeling Fluttershy's delicate body shaking as if a jackhammer had been stuffed into her head.

Fluttershy wiped all the tears off her face and slowly gained the courage to look at her best friend; she looked up and saw Rainbow Dash staring at her ready for an answer.

"Remember College?" Fluttershy sniffled.

"College? I sure do! That was crazy!" Rainbow Dash burst out loud, knocking down Fluttershy's confidence again. She realized what she did and broke Fluttershy's concentration. "Oh, sorry..." Rainbow Dash apologized.

"Remember that time we did all of those dares that you are Rarity did back when we had apartments to stay in." Fluttershy blushed.

"Yeah, they were pretty rad; I did most of the cool dares." Rainbow Dash boasted.

"Do you remember that Infantilism dare that Rarity had to do?" Fluttershy asked Rainbow Dash, still feeling unsure about everything.

"Infa- who?" Rainbow Dash didn't follow at all, especially with a word like that.

"That time where you dares Rarity to drink that weird liquor and then she started acting like a baby without her control." Fluttershy looked back down at the teddy bear she was holding.

"Yeah, that was pretty..." Rainbow Dash paused to think of the appropriate word. "Stange..." She finished.

"Well those made me think a little..." Fluttershy paused. "Ever since that time I had to look after her while you fetched out Principle Celestia's help... I thought of something since the years went by." Fluttershy continued.

"What?" Rainbow Dash leaned closer.

"I... Wanted a baby..." Fluttershy closed her eyes and started to sniffle again.

"A baby?" Rainbow Dash leaned back.

"Yes." Fluttershy smiled a little.

"You're too young to have a baby, just enjoy life with some apple cider and then get drunk for fun." Rainbow Dash said.

"It's been my little secret with Rarity; I wanted a baby of mine to look after. My obsession died down a little after we got our jobs, but then there was that time I had to look after Spike and the Cutie Mark Crusaders and then the idea stayed in my head like glue." Fluttershy ran her fingers through her air.

"I know that you are good with kids, but you are only 22. You can't just have a baby so young and not party a little with the others." Rainbow Dash patted Fluttershy on the back, hoping to calm her down.

"I don't want to party..." Fluttershy audibly spoke.

"Wait till your thirties until you want a kid, I don't want a little icky gross kid that cries all the time. But that's just me." Rainbow Dash said.

"Babies are very cute, umm... just saying..." Fluttershy blushed.

"Hey, I'm sure you'll be a good parent in a few years after tasting loads of cider and eating some of Pinkie's cupcakes. I hear they are to apparently die for." Rainbow Dash licked her lips.

"Ooh... I'm just too stupid, I wanted a man to help me getting pregnant to so I can have my own child and I can love them forever. No man would ever want me!" Fluttershy tried to shout.

"Whoa, calm down." Rainbow Dash held Fluttershy in her arms and repeatedly brushed her pink hair.

"I don't even have the courage to babysit anymore because of my obsession with getting a baby; I always think that I might end up stealing one or trying to keep one..." Fluttershy sobbed.

"Hey, hey. Calm down Fluttershy. I'm sure you'll work something out; I mean... you always get what you want in the end. You'll find a nice enough guy you can fall in love with, you should try Big Mac or something." Rainbow Dash offered.

"Didn't Big Mac do strange things to Applejack during his birthday?" Fluttershy asked.

"I don't know, whether he gets her pregnant, that's their problem not ours." Rainbow Dash yawned.

"Oh... Okay..." Fluttershy lowered her head and looked at her Teddy Bear.

"How long have you been buying all of these baby toys and supplies? It looks like you have been doing it for years." Rainbow Dash looked around her bedroom to see a rather fitting crib on the other side of the room. With packages of diapers, baby bottles, bits, rattles and other accessories that would keep a baby happy.

"Since we left college, I kind of stopped when we met Twilight and her son, Spike." Fluttershy smiled a little.

"You can't have got all of these items just by 5 years, who helped you?" Rainbow Dash raised an eyebrow at her friend.

"Umm... don't tell on her please..." Fluttershy started, she noticed Rainbow Dash was still looking at her. "Umm... Rarity, I told her my obsession and she helped me out by giving Sweetie Belles baby toys and old supplies to me..." She blushed.

"She did, huh?" Rainbow Dash crossed her arms.

"Yes, she said that she would support me in my time of need." Fluttershy wiped the last of her tears from her face.

"What are friends for?" Rainbow Dash sarcastically huffed.

"If it makes you feel better, I'll stay here with you until you are in a better mood." Rainbow Dash offered.

"Oh no... You couldn't... didn't you say that you were training for the big run? It's more important than me..." Fluttershy quickly turned round the offer.

"I've got a couple of days until the big run, don't worry about it." Rainbow Dash smiled.

"Are you sure? I don't want to sound strange..." Fluttershy blushed.

"I'll get some rest or something downstairs on the couch, I'll turn on the TV and we could just have a doozy." Rainbow Dash stood up, walking past the transformed nursery and stood next to the bedroom door. "I'm waaaiting!" Rainbow Dash tapped her foot.

"Sure." Fluttershy giggled, reminding her of the cartoon she watched with Dash just only a few minutes ago.

---

Fluttershy made her way downstairs before Rainbow Dash, she looked around the living room and saw the giant package of diapers that were thrown across the living room, and she picked up the onesie, pacifier and the pack of diapers and put them on the couch. She thought for a moment that another person knows of her big secret for wanting a child, Rainbow Dash was a good friend and she had never told a secret to others that were so deep and personal.

But was this wanted and loving obsession for wanting a baby be so good? She would have to build up the perfect amount of confidence to find the perfect man and make love to him, resulting in pregnancy and then waiting nine months for the child to be ready to let out. But would it be for waste if the child died during its birth? Which Fluttershy didn't want to go through as the pain would be unbearable?

But what if she didn't have to give birth to a baby? That question pondered her head once in a while, she wondered if asking someone to be the baby for her could please her obsession and help her get it out of her head. Although it being a sick thing from experience after watching her one of her fashion diva friends act in the same way back in College because of that sick drug.

She sat down on the couch and closed her eyes, dreaming of the possibilities that would also include managing to get a baby without the pain and waiting, it made her feel very selfish in every single way.

She looked at the baby supplies that came from the box that Rainbow Dash had opened and had an image deep in her mind that no sane person would ever want to see, it would be insane to say it. She wanted Rainbow Dash.

Fluttershy opened her eyes to cast out the image that should not be, only to find that a massive pair of purple eyes were staring back at her. She didn't dare to move because of how close they were.

"BOO!"

"YAAAAAAAAAHHHHH-" Fluttershy screamed, nearly jumping off her chair and landing face first onto the floor.

"Whoa, calm down Fluts, it's just me." Rainbow Dash giggled, she didn't keep her laughing to herself. She let it roar out of her.

Fluttershy moved her hands out of the way to see that Rainbow Dash stood before her, although something was different about her. She was perfectly normal, the same blue tank top. The denim jeans. But she was strangely wearing a baby diaper over her jeans.

"Rainbow...? What are you doing?!" Fluttershy gasped for air.

"Don't worry about it, I'm just messing around." Rainbow Dash giggled.

"Why are you wearing that diaper?" Fluttershy demanded to know.

"Oh this? Nah, I'm just messing around." Rainbow Dash looked down to see the diaper, she grabbed the front end of it and ripped it off her crotch area as if it were a piece of paper being ripped in half, hearing the loud rips of the tapes and the crinkling the diaper landing on the ground.

"Sorry for scaring you, I just had to." Rainbow Dash giggled again.

"It's okay; you just gave me a little fright that's all." Fluttershy looked up at Dash.

"That's what I was going for." Rainbow Dash replied, holding out her hand to Fluttershy.

"I'm sorry about the whole baby thing." Fluttershy repeated.

"You don't have to say sorry, if you want a baby it's your choice. I don't want a baby. I've already got Scootaloo." Rainbow Dash groaned.

"What's wrong with Scootaloo?" Fluttershy asked.

"She's always crying and moaning about me never taking her to a Wonderbolt Concert, but she ain't old enough." Rainbow Dash explained.

"Isn't the new Wonderbolt album coming out soon?" Fluttershy wondered.

"Yeah, it's called Wisconsin Death Trip or something." Rainbow Dash placed the name off the top of her head.

"I'd like to listen to it one day." Fluttershy smiled.

Rainbow Dash was a little puzzled. "You said that you didn't like the Wonderbolts, ever since they made that album with that Lou Reed dude." Rainbow Dash said.

Fluttershy wanted to tell the truth, she didn't want to stall; she only wanted the truth and facts coming from her mouth for Rainbow Dash. She needed to get this over with.

"Going back the subject of the baby... That's if you don't mind... I mean... we can talk about the Wonderbolts again..." Fluttershy said.

"Just tell me and I'll try and help you out with it." Rainbow Dash looked at Fluttershy.

"Well... umm...Β Β remember in College when you said that you would do anything for me..." Fluttershy asked.

Rainbow Dash paused for a moment, trying to think back to when she said that.

"Go on..." Rainbow Dash replied.

"I'd like you to help me get a baby." Fluttershy held her hands together, hoping that this would work.

"I'm not a guy." Rainbow joked, although Fluttershy didn't understand.

"I want you to help me with something, but I don't know how to explain it..." Fluttershy lowered her head, feeling the ensemble of tears coming out in a minute or so.

"Hey, I said I'll help you out with anything didn't I?" Rainbow Dash wrapped her arm around Fluttershy.

"Well... I want you to... oh it's just too silly..." Fluttershy nodded her head sideways.

"What?" Rainbow Dash was curious.



"Well... I want you to be the baby..."
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Comments: 17

Niathediaperedcat [2022-11-27 00:43:05 +0000 UTC]

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TheLordFanboy [2013-01-28 05:17:08 +0000 UTC]

The ending to the first part is terrific and unexpected. To think, she wants rainbow dash to BE THE FOAL. Unexpected! And did you mean your version had more creepiness and fetishes in then th original, or the other way around.

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GamertheHedgehog [2013-01-11 23:30:41 +0000 UTC]

Just by glancing at this, I can already say this version is better than the original.

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GlitchyProductions In reply to GamertheHedgehog [2013-01-12 00:15:44 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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GamertheHedgehog In reply to GlitchyProductions [2013-01-12 00:22:53 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome

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CUZIN21 [2012-10-09 19:48:41 +0000 UTC]

Great job on the story, bro! This is my 3rd month on DeviantART. And I REALLY do like your ¨Tails' Nightmare¨ series too!

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iamli3 [2012-08-20 16:17:38 +0000 UTC]

>sue me
>sues you
>progression 2012
lols......

but hey that actually sounds like a good idea , i clopped to the original (and now im going to hell.ponyconfessionimage.jpg(sue me)) cause i have a tim bit for it's tone (the first one , second installment was fucking gay) even though im so against the very concept i have murderous reaction to the subject , so perhaps this remake will be all good and no bad although......
dang no ponies D
0/atafa.......

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AndytheB-Artist [2012-05-01 00:59:19 +0000 UTC]

From what I've seen so far, it seems like you're trying to smooth out some of the more jagged edges of "Pattycakes". Word of God says that this was supposed to be a parody of "Cupcakes", but doesn't have any satire in it though. This does. [link]

Would this make a good theme song for Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash's relationship in this story? [link]

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Ian16545 [2012-03-10 20:40:46 +0000 UTC]

At first glance, I thought this was MLP:FIM's idea of "Baby Mama"... job well done thus far!

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suescungaray [2012-03-10 17:03:03 +0000 UTC]

wait...Big Mac did WHAT?!!!

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GlitchyProductions In reply to suescungaray [2012-03-10 19:53:25 +0000 UTC]

Orgy.

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TheLordFanboy In reply to GlitchyProductions [2013-01-28 05:19:38 +0000 UTC]

How do you know, and too whom?

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suescungaray In reply to suescungaray [2012-03-10 17:11:03 +0000 UTC]

Btw, I haven't read the original, but if you say you weak this one so it can be way less hard than the original....I gotta say that you did a really good remake adaptation

Really well done!! I'll read the next one right away!! (even if I don't agree with this story, it's really well done )

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PsychoStreakProny In reply to suescungaray [2012-03-10 18:13:12 +0000 UTC]

Yea th-... the... original... its flat out illogical smut. someone wrote it while cumming to make other people cum

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GlitchyProductions In reply to PsychoStreakProny [2012-03-27 21:38:19 +0000 UTC]

Heh, heh.

Out of all the stories that I've read that use the MLP franchise. Pattycakes (Original) is my guilty pleasure for when it comes to reading.

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PsychoStreakProny [2012-03-10 08:46:51 +0000 UTC]

I'll be brutally honest here.

1; fuck 90% of the bronies out there in their tight asses, to this day I refuse to go to a brony community site due to the absolute disgust I feel thinking of the hilarity of their "love and tolerance for all" policy, which doesn't include anything like rule 34 of ponies (not to mention how much they spaz out about logical things.... see the 'derpy wars' i think it was called?). The 'reviews' of pattycakes were of course shitty because, as usual, being something that most people don't understand, it was just seen as sick and creepy. You like it or you don't, and if you don't like it, you have a 1/1,000,000 chance to understand that FETISHES ARE 90% OF THE TIME IRRATIONAL. Everyone has their own tastes, everyone else just has to get used to that.

2; this is incredible. You've managed to make a semi-readable smut story into one of the few (for lack of a better term) porn stories where by the end of 1 part, I haven't jizzed and that doesn't upset me! This story has actual substance to it and is in a seemingly well thought out parallel. The minor minor little things that made me go "o_o... huh?" seem to be the kind of thing that's implied but not explicitly stated (a technique that I'm horrible with, I always fear that the reader won't get an implication so I tend to in a roundabout way say what I'm trying to say). Unlike most porn stories, I only skipped a few lines due to me not really being riveted. It kept my attention, it made me VERY interested as it went on to find out just how else things worked in this parallel. It was overall a very nice read with little to no weaknesses.... with really good stuff like this.... ugh, its my natural critic...ness... that kinda makes me unable to fully enjoy them, because finding one mistake, even a minor one can kinda derail the happy train...

""I'd like to help me get a baby."" YOU ARE NOT AN IDIOT, I HAVE INDUCTED THIS FROM THIS WRITING. Y U MAKE TINY MISTAKE AT END!?! I don't have any REAL problems with a mistake or two, we're all human, it just irks me. You forgot the "you", either that or you made a bad sentence.

I plan to read part two tomorrow, I do hope it doesn't go downhill from here.

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GlitchyProductions In reply to PsychoStreakProny [2012-03-10 10:06:03 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the comment.

I'll get right on that little error, thanks for pointing that out.

It's a shame that people can't accept other people for who and what they are and their preferences in having fun and what-not.

Again, thanks for the review on the story and I'll take note into what you said. I'll try and finish off the other chapters and stuff like that when I have the proper time.

Thank you.

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