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iridianaA Pocket Full of Sky
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Description When I was young, my father would take me to the highest tower of Notre Dame precisely once a year. It would be cold. Freezing. But we'd stand there, and take deep breaths of air, and peer down, towards the tiny ants of people below. Down, towards the sprawling city beneath us. It was always winter, when we'd go. Always cold. Freezing, freezing. But however cold it was, and however dull and bleary the weather, my father would ask one thing, and one thing only: that we adhered to tradition.

"Lucie," he would say, with the fond smile and kind eyes I always remember. "Lucie, my peach. Whatever you become, and wherever your heart and mind leads you, you must always do for me one small, beautiful thing – take a handful of the sky, and place it in your pocket. Take a handful of the sky, and remember, always, that your feet need not always be imprisoned to the ground. Anything you could ever wish for, Lucie, can be yours – but only if you study hard, and always feel the freedom of the sky in your pocket; in your heart."

The sky was pale-pink, when he jumped. Pale-pink, touched with gold. I recall stealing all of his coats from our wardrobe and his office, and sitting cross-legged on my bed, carefully sorting and folding each one – searching each pocket. Inside. Out. He told me he had a lot of sky. I found none.
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Comments: 68

KyaniteArcher [2014-03-24 01:45:24 +0000 UTC]

I could imagine the cold night sky and the stars and everything you described so well. c: Great job.

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InklingsOfOblivion [2014-03-11 11:05:49 +0000 UTC]

This is beautiful. Short and sweet and I love it.

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DailyLitDeviations [2014-03-11 03:12:31 +0000 UTC]

Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: dailylitdeviations.deviantart.… Congratulations on your DD!

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.

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oviedomedina [2012-10-26 19:46:43 +0000 UTC]

That last paragraph is powerful.
Excellent!

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iridiana [2012-10-25 20:32:20 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, everyone who has commented and offered opinions on this piece. When I initially wrote this, I could scarcely imagine even a few people reading it. It just so happens that I returned to dA only yesterday after a long break from writing (having convinced myself that I wasn't particularly great at the whole 'creative writing' thing), only to be greeted by these wonderful messages and of course the DLD and DD. I feel positively honoured, and it's certainly helped boost a damaged confidence in my writing style! Thank you, so much.

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glossolalias [2012-10-25 05:22:24 +0000 UTC]

wow. this is powerful.

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soaring-heart [2012-10-25 05:20:07 +0000 UTC]

wow this is simply an amazing piece it really touched my heart

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breezybrutality [2012-10-25 04:38:18 +0000 UTC]

Oh, the feels ♥ 👍: 0 ⏩: 0

silvermoon442 [2012-10-25 02:31:29 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful. And the last paragraph is shocking!

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Dreamer-of-Magic [2012-10-25 01:00:46 +0000 UTC]

The last paragraph..O.o it startled me. This piece is amazing.
Congrats on a well-deserved DD

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LostNorthern [2012-10-25 00:59:53 +0000 UTC]

real or not :] just curious

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iridiana In reply to LostNorthern [2012-10-25 20:43:03 +0000 UTC]

It's fictional, thankfully!

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LostNorthern In reply to iridiana [2012-10-26 19:55:17 +0000 UTC]

c'était très bien pensée XD

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MelodySyper [2012-10-24 23:45:26 +0000 UTC]

Wow, this is a really gorgeous piece. Very moving. I like your style as well~

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ArynChris [2012-10-24 22:55:47 +0000 UTC]

All his sky was in his pockets when he jumped. And when he jumped, he released that sky-- because the sky should no more be imprisoned in our pockets than we be imprisoned by the ground.

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ThePaperCraneGirl [2012-10-24 22:46:06 +0000 UTC]

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thedreamer79 [2012-10-24 22:22:13 +0000 UTC]

I love your voice in this piece! Nice job!

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shilliard [2012-10-24 22:09:13 +0000 UTC]

Very moving piece. Very visual, and very startling with the last paragraph.

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FluteMaestro [2012-10-24 21:44:45 +0000 UTC]

Goosebumps everywhere. I'm still tingling. This is beautiful. My jaw dropped at the end and my heart froze. So sad and yet so beautiful ;.;

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lovenovels [2012-10-24 21:41:12 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful.

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Lynchly [2012-10-24 21:16:32 +0000 UTC]

It's really great how you've managed to stuff so much story into such a small space. I think this is beautiful.

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RoseBlossom100 [2012-10-24 21:04:56 +0000 UTC]

What what a phenomenal turn!!! So great!

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yarryanotak [2012-10-24 20:43:59 +0000 UTC]

Stunning.

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Nevuela [2012-10-24 19:58:23 +0000 UTC]

Wow. Just... wow. I don't even know what to say here.

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Nyatto [2012-10-24 19:55:31 +0000 UTC]

Absolutely beautiful, poignant, and very heartbreaking. The amount of eloquence you manage to pack into three paragraphs is incredible. Congrats on the DD!

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Nickkat1985 [2012-10-24 19:37:45 +0000 UTC]

I would never think that three paragraphs could have create such a deep story in my head. Thanks for that.

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ArtisticAfflare [2012-10-24 19:37:05 +0000 UTC]

This is amazing, it doesn't even need to be long for the reader to get the point.

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Gemknight [2012-10-24 19:23:01 +0000 UTC]

I love the way this story just sucks in the reader and then the ending wraps it up very well. Congrats on the DD

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Alakazam [2012-10-24 18:39:28 +0000 UTC]

Such a lovely story. And heart breaking
Congratulations on your DD

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0okami-Rei [2012-10-24 18:39:27 +0000 UTC]

A truly beautiful read. Thank you for this.

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AFineWar [2012-10-24 18:33:11 +0000 UTC]

This was beautifully written, really touched my heart.
Congrats on your DD

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Ashley502 [2012-10-24 18:27:58 +0000 UTC]

It was very moving.

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neurotype-on-discord [2012-10-24 18:12:07 +0000 UTC]

This is very open to interpretation, and I love it.

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ANIMAfelis [2012-10-24 17:54:20 +0000 UTC]

This. Was. Beautiful.

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FoolsGolde [2012-10-24 17:17:09 +0000 UTC]

beautifully heartbreaking

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Gemdrop [2012-10-24 16:29:17 +0000 UTC]

This is so sad and awesome. Well done.

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halcyonshores [2012-10-24 16:22:03 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations to you.

Thank you, for writing and sharing this priceless treasure.

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beeswingblue [2012-10-24 15:04:15 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations on the DD! This piece has been in my favorites for what seems like forever. I'm so glad that it's getting the attention it deserves.

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nosugarjustanger [2012-10-24 14:18:24 +0000 UTC]

That was an emotional read. You managed to do so in such a short story. I particularly liked the last line.

Congratulations on your DD - very well-deserved indeed.

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Nyiana-sama [2012-10-24 13:38:36 +0000 UTC]

Congrats on the daily deviation!

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FirstAndLastMen [2012-10-24 13:01:09 +0000 UTC]

woah...

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Cavecanum [2012-10-24 12:42:52 +0000 UTC]

Oh, it's lovely.., poor you.

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Cheshire-Shadow [2012-10-24 11:44:00 +0000 UTC]

Tragically beautiful. I had to read it three times over to really wrap my mind around it, and each time cut a little deeper.

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Foxstarr [2012-10-24 11:25:10 +0000 UTC]

This is such a well written and beautiful little snippet! You captured so much truth in just those last two sentences.

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Tianithen [2012-10-24 11:04:53 +0000 UTC]

Brought a tear to my eye.

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schachay [2012-10-24 10:39:50 +0000 UTC]

Great!

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PippinFox [2012-10-24 10:15:10 +0000 UTC]

Wow. This is incredible

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PikaCheeka [2012-10-24 08:43:54 +0000 UTC]

Gorgeous and provocative piece. I'd never know if it was based on truth or not, it's written so emotionally.

Congrats on the DD. I may follow you now.

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Lintu47 [2012-10-24 08:17:24 +0000 UTC]

Congrats on the well deserved DD!

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Flane-Erenaeoth [2012-10-24 07:58:52 +0000 UTC]

Very much enjoyed reading A powerful piece.

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