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Description Birth Name: Sayuri Agalaia

Soul Name: Hana

Aliases: The Angel of Fire, Chai, Dragon Enchantress, Ikumatsu, among others.

Eyes: Usually from 'smoky winter sky' to 'starry sapphire' to 'hazy but passionate cerulean,' as described by her soulmate and soulbound, Zuko. When she gets angry or distressed, her eyes flash gold; when she is blissfully happy, her eyes fade to softest blue. Sadness makes her eyes dark and dim; contentment turns them warm, cocoa brown.

Hair: Shimmering brown sugar, tousled bronze, sun-kissed mahogany, and abundant chestnut all working in harmony. The white highlights around her face are from the Spirit of the Moon, who touched her when she was a child.

Scent: Sayuri smells enticingly of lacy sandalwood, ivory tea rose, and herbal night-blossom.

Bending: Sayuri can bend love, which is called "affectionbending," and only a select few are ever gifted with it. She learned to do this through her intensely good heart. She can also bend water and fire, thanks to the fact that her mother was a waterbender and her father was a firebender. Somehow she inherited both traits through a freak problem of nature.

Because she was raised by a water dragon, she bears the ability to speak to animals, and can also control the weather by channeling her dragon's power through her body.

Special Skill: Sayuri is a spy for the banished prince Zuko. She was always a child prodigy with all of her bending arts, and can perform any type of martial art extraordinarily well thanks to the powers she can control through her dragon guardian. Her dragon's powers also allow her to do numerous other special things, e.g. fly with his wings.

Trademark: Sayuri is often remembered for her full, pouting lips, her cascading curls, and her flawless, glowing-tan skin. Only Zuko knows about her exotic birthmark.

Special Character Relation: She is Zhao's niece.


Historical Background/Life Story:

Sayuri was born the daughter of Zhao's brother Udo and the intensely beautiful waterbending/healing prodigy, Miyatori Alcyone Agalaia. Miyatori was captured by Udo when he invaded the Earth Kingdom Village of Chai; he took her to the Fire Nation, claimed her as his bride, and married her because of her immense beauty and powerful bending.

Somehow, Miyatori grew to love her captor and forced husband. After all, fear can turn to love. They lived together in the royal city of the Fire Nation.

Miyatori soon bore a child to Udo, whom she named 'Sayuri' after her mother.
The child was, however, blind at birth, according to the doctor who delivered her.

Miyatori prayed to her Spirits, the Spirits of the Moon and of the Ocean.

Both spirits answered her prayer. The Spirit of the Ocean touched Sayuri's eyes, and gifted her with sight. The Spirit of the Ocean touched Sayuri's heart, and gave her a warm, kind spirit, always open and always accepting.

The Ocean's gift caused Sayuri's eyes to be their characteristic misty blue color, and also caused them to have the strange trait of varying in coloration according to her mood.

The Moon's gift caused Sayuri to have white hair framing her face.

Being the daughter of a reputed beauty and a handsome Fire Nation soldier (Udo was far more attractive than his brother, Zhao), the child was so beautiful even as a babe that Miyatori decided to present Sayuri to the royal court.

Fire Lord Azulon was impressed with her pretigious pedigree. He forced his son Ozai to have her betrothed to Ozai's only son, the young Prince Zuko, who was not even a year old at the time.

This betrothal was deemed questionable by the citizens of the Fire Nation, but it was accepted, and Sayuri's life up until she was five years old was wonderful, filled with parties and royalty and special treatment.

Unfortunately, during a vacation to the hot springs in the north of the Fire Nation, Udo, Miyatori, and Sayuri were ambushed and pillaged in their coach by a group of nomads.

Udo and Miyatori were killed.

Little Sayuri had barely turned five years old.

She was left buried in the rubble of the coach and her parents' dead bodies.

Somehow, she dragged herself out and to the side of the road, where she fainted.

When she awoke, she was in a warm cave. A long, scaly, gray-blue body was draped around her. She looked, and saw that it was a winged water dragon who had rescued her.

That dragon's name was Suzu. He had found her because he had sensed the aura of the Moon and Ocean coming off of her. He was, after all, a water dragon.

He nursed her back to health and raised her for the rest of her life, until she was sixteen, blessing her with powers that no normal human could ever have. He gave her a 'soulname,' which only exists among dragons: "Hana." He told her that this soulname was not to be told to ANYONE, or else that person would have complete control over Sayuri.

He also trained her bending skills, helped her find her affectionbending, and granted her supernatural perception skills.

He also gave her the ability learn any form of physical activity or martial art with incredible ease by mixing a little of his magic-laden blood into hers.

When she turned sixteen, she decided to leave to find a new life, away from her guardian dragon. Suzu assured her that he'd always be there for her; she had but to reach out to him to have his power channel through her, and she could use his power for anything. In fact, she used his power to sprout a pair of translucent dragon wings and fly over the land, searching for a new place to live.

She travelled to numerous towns and villages, and soon became famous for her intense beauty and amazing bending skills. She went by the alias "Chai," which she produced from a childhood story she'd once heard her mother tell her.

Men loved her everywhere she went, and courted her. She didn't know that she was twisting the poor souls' minds with her affectionbending; she hadn't learned to control it yet. Some tried to marry her, others tried to seduce her. Most tried to seduce her. She refused all of them coyly, feeling in her heart that she had a destiny with a greater love.

Finally, she came to the Fire Nation, trailed by her famous reputation. It looked very familiar to her.

She went to the royal court out of curiosity.

Ozai recognized her, because she resembled her mother. He hated her for her betrothal to his son; after all, he wanted control over his son's fate, being the power-hungry dictator he was at the time. He gave orders to have her arrested and killed, under the pretense that her family had betrayed the Nation with treason. This was, of course, heinous, but the Nation agreed, and had her arrested. After all, no one really knew why her parents had been killed--Sayuri included.

Utilizing Suzu's power, which she called on to help her escape the prison, she broke through the heavy walls, her eyes pale white, surrounded by an eerie glow.

Ozai saw her power, as did the rest of the Fire Nation.

The Fire Lord then became bent on capturing her for his purposes of capturing the Avatar; somehow, he thought that he could brainwash her into using her powers for his benefit.

Sayuri, however, left, using Suzu's wings to fly her far away from the Nation she had been born in.

She found herself over the ocean, flying without a destination.

After so much travel over open, empty water, she was tired, and ailing, and needed rest. The air had also grown cold; she figured that she was somewhere near the North Pole, using her extraordinary powers of perception that Suzu had granted her with earlier in her life.

That was when she came upon a floating mass of driftwood. It would suffice to rest on, for a while.

But, as she came closer to the driftwood, she realized that there were two bodies floating on the largest piece. There was also a makeshift sail that had been erected on the raft.

She used Suzu's insulation as a water dragon to land in the water and sneak up on the floating wood.

When she peered over the edge, she saw that the two people were alive, but sleeping. One was an older man, potbellied, with whitish gray hair. The other was a young man with a ponytail topknot, and a scar-scathed face.

She felt a strange pang in her heart when she looked at the young man; it was a rush of feeling that clenched her heart and made her feel an intense wave of belonging and comfort.

But it was gone before she could truly register its real meaning...

Deciding that she wasn't really all that tired, she made up her mind to find out who these two men were, and began to follow them from that day forth.

When the two men finally came to a bathhouse in a sakura forest after much travel over the sea, Sayuri decided to reveal her presence to them.

But the two men became involved in a desperate struggle to escape the clutches of Azula, the fire princess--someone that Sayuri barely remembered from her childhood and from the rumors she'd heard of the princess.

The two men ran off.
Sayuri followed them in secret.

She watched as the two of them took refuge beside a stream, and removed their topknots from their hair.

She watched over them as they escaped into the forest and began a life as nomads.

She watched them as a guardian angel; the Angel of Water and Fire.


During the time she watched them, she finally realized who they were: Zuko and Iroh, two faces from her past. She remembered Iroh from his silliness; she remembered Zuko from the times they had romped together as children.

She also felt that she should remember something else about Zuko; something significant. But she couldn't recall anything that held weight.

When Zuko decided to take his leave of his Uncle, and became a nomad himself, she was faced with a tough decision; follow Zuko, or Iroh?

Well, actually, the decision wasn't all that hard; she had come to love Zuko intensely over the time she'd spent following them. It wasn't just a crush; she knew it was true love.

[Also, Zuko had started to feel her presence around them; he didn't know what the presence was, but he was comforted by it. In fact, he had come to somehow care for that presence, against his will. He loved the presence; it was warm, and comforting; caring, and gentle.]

She followed Zuko.

After he had revealed his true identity to a small Earth Kingdom village, and had shortly departed due to the distaste of the villagers at that revelation, Sayuri decided that the time was ripe to reveal herself to him.

It was night.

Zuko was sitting beside a fire he had kindled for himself using his firebending.

Sayuri used Suzu's powers to make herself barely visible. She then stepped out to greet him.

At first, Zuko thought he was hallucinating, thanks to all the strange things that had happened to him over the past few days.

But when she became more solid, and told him that she was Ikumatsu, his guardian angel, he was amazed; he realized that she had been that comforting presence he had constantly felt. Tears came to his eyes, and he began to weep.

But Sayuri felt terrible for lying to him and not telling him her true identity; after all, if she remembered him, shouldn't he remember her?

So she sat down across from him, and in the firelight, revealed that she was not really a guardian angel, but Sayuri, daughter of Udo and Miyatori.

Zuko gasped, recognizing her; the white hair that framed her face gave her away immediately, as did her strange, haunting blue eyes.

They spent that entire night chatting about the past and their childhoods, and finally, falling in love with each other irrevocably.

That was when Sayuri dedicated herself completely to Zuko, by telling him her soulname, Hana.

Suzu approved. (He sent his approval through mindspeak).

Zuko took her into his arms and kissed her passionately, knowing that the two of them belonged to each other entirely.

She became his guardian, and truly his guardian angel, following him in silence for the rest of his journey, only coming to see him at night.

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OH, SUES.

<33333333333

They make me happy.

Except... not.


(Please, never make characters this intensely overdone. It's disgusting. Seriously.)


-The Kat
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Comments: 47

Ispell2 [2013-11-04 01:42:04 +0000 UTC]

The 'Soulname' thing... Earthsea fan Iwish-Iwish?

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TigerBanga [2011-09-30 01:39:10 +0000 UTC]

I THINK I LOVE YOU FOR THIS. XD

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Luminosion In reply to TigerBanga [2011-10-17 22:13:22 +0000 UTC]

Hahahaha. :3
I'm glad you like it!

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Hot-Sauce-Vixxen [2008-11-01 23:28:20 +0000 UTC]

Some people's OCs are like this.

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Luminosion In reply to Hot-Sauce-Vixxen [2009-02-09 07:37:43 +0000 UTC]

I realize that.
It's part of the reason I drew it: to show how absurd that kind of writing is.

Makes me want to vomit.

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Hot-Sauce-Vixxen In reply to Luminosion [2009-02-09 21:04:23 +0000 UTC]

I hate Mary Sues. D8

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AriTeir [2008-04-05 08:54:05 +0000 UTC]

I'm sorry to say that I have stumbled across Characters more suey than this ...It has scarred me. Most of them even failed the 'so bad it's good' catergory, which is really the best acheivement a mary sue can make.

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Luminosion In reply to AriTeir [2008-04-05 14:45:57 +0000 UTC]

I'm am sincerely sorry that Sues have scarred you, as well!

I despise all Sues.
So, so much...

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AriTeir In reply to Luminosion [2008-04-05 19:35:34 +0000 UTC]

It's hard not to!

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bluemoonchild [2007-10-17 05:02:02 +0000 UTC]

*reads the last line* OH THANK GOODNESS

I was briefly, very, very afraid. Definitely an effective spoof, it actually had me questioning if it was for real, what with the sheer amount of detail. Like whoa. O_O

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Luminosion In reply to bluemoonchild [2007-10-24 20:16:17 +0000 UTC]



Poor dear!

I am pleased that you think my Sue is effective, but if she's THAT convincing....

.... Maybe there should be a disclaimer at the top that says: "THIS IS NOT REAL, IT WAS THE PRODUCT OF A WRITER'S EXTREME BOREDOM AND URGE TO SHOW SUES' TRUE COLORS THE WORLD." ?

Hahha. Glad you enjoyed her. Even if you believed she was a serious attempt at an original character for a while. At least that means she's fulfilling her purpose; some people actually create these characters........ which was why I made her.... hopefully she shows the foolishness of those creations?

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MewMoonie [2007-10-03 22:25:57 +0000 UTC]

Haha! I saw the preveiw and went "She looks like a sue." Read some of the description. "HOLY CRAP SUE" read the end part. laughed my butt off.

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Luminosion In reply to MewMoonie [2007-10-04 15:15:24 +0000 UTC]

*bows*

I exist to serve your amusement.

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CaribbeanMouse [2007-09-22 01:57:21 +0000 UTC]

Aha! That's fantastic. The look on my face reading this must have been hysterical, because I was over here going, "Oh, please, for the love of all things Holy, TELL ME this isn't serious..." Unfortunately, I have come across perfectly serious bios much like this while moding for rpgs...gah. Oo Makes you want to curl up and die when they're serious.
Kudos! And hey, a fantastic colouring job! ^^

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Luminosion In reply to CaribbeanMouse [2007-09-25 13:53:59 +0000 UTC]

Oohh, modding for rpgs... *hiss intake of breath*
I once attempted that. It was so painful that I couldn't take it.
I can imagine the face you were making, because I'm sure I've made it before.

I'm glad that it was somewhat a convincing Mary Sue... I was drawing on countless horrific encounters on ff.net and on roleplay sites for her bio. I wanted to make her as terrifyingly Sue-ish as possible.

... I think it worked.

And yes.
It does make you want to curl up and die when they're serious.
Especially since they're serious SO often. *shiver* So. Scary.

I'm glad you enjoyed it, even if it made you cringe at first!
Thanks for the praise on the coloring! :3

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Ecosauna [2007-07-11 21:05:35 +0000 UTC]

I could never imagine Zuko kissing "passionately" or being a good kisser. But I really like your character. But I don't see her running off with that outfit, her boobs would fall out evry second XD I would do over the outfit, but she's ur character so if u like it...i cant change dat cuz ur the creator.

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Ecosauna [2007-07-11 21:04:17 +0000 UTC]

I could never imagine Zuko kissing "passionately" or being a good kisser. But I really like your character. But I don't see her running off with that outfit, her boobs would fall out evry second XD I would do over the outfit, but she's ur character so if u like it...i cant change dat cuz ur the creator.

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runo-chan [2007-02-18 23:57:17 +0000 UTC]

Wow. I have got to say, I have seen a lot of Mary Sues, but that is definitely the worst (best)? I wish I could make a Sue like that. Oh, curse my ability to only make good, balanced characters. x_X;;; I'm jealous. Once again, that is one greatly hideous Sue. Totally worth a fav.

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Wainwright-Chan [2006-10-09 23:51:24 +0000 UTC]

you gotta love ur mary-sues

favs

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Luminosion In reply to Wainwright-Chan [2006-10-10 03:12:48 +0000 UTC]

Oh, I know.

Aren't they wonderful?

Thank you so much for the fav, darling.

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Wainwright-Chan In reply to Luminosion [2006-10-13 04:43:42 +0000 UTC]

welcome

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FireGal6 [2006-05-17 21:34:32 +0000 UTC]

love bending! lol, great mary sue! Congrats that you won!

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Luminosion In reply to FireGal6 [2006-05-17 21:56:50 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!!

I can't believe it, still...

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Fangfingers [2006-05-14 21:18:34 +0000 UTC]

THat's excellent !...you should have WON ! ...





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it's the internet ! Let's ROCK AND SCROLL ! ~ Fangfingers

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Luminosion In reply to Fangfingers [2006-05-14 22:23:30 +0000 UTC]

Deadline is tomorrow...

I dont' know if I'll win or not....

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Fangfingers In reply to Luminosion [2006-05-14 22:32:06 +0000 UTC]

oh kool !..then you still have chance !... i must have misread the submission date ... i'm always late for dinner too ...lol

Good luck!!



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Tom Sizemore always dies. ~Fangism

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Luminosion In reply to Fangfingers [2006-05-14 22:38:26 +0000 UTC]

X3.

Thank you!

I'm glad you like the picture/have faith in it.

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sobe-elixer [2006-05-14 05:33:46 +0000 UTC]

*bows to the awesome terrifying power of your Mary-Sue*

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Luminosion In reply to sobe-elixer [2006-05-14 06:12:26 +0000 UTC]

*is humbled*

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sobe-elixer In reply to Luminosion [2006-05-14 17:06:54 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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Avatar-OC-club [2006-05-14 03:30:30 +0000 UTC]

Avatar-OC-club: The horror! : seizure:

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Luminosion In reply to Avatar-OC-club [2006-05-14 04:05:44 +0000 UTC]

XDDDDD.

*flail*

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Sinsia [2006-05-14 03:01:34 +0000 UTC]

O_O awesome character background and design. Soul name... sounds like ElfQuest ^^

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Luminosion In reply to Sinsia [2006-05-14 03:12:56 +0000 UTC]

ElfQuest?

.....

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Sinsia In reply to Luminosion [2006-05-14 03:31:25 +0000 UTC]

Yeah. Its a graphic novel by WaRP, eight so volumes that follows the stories of a young Elf Chief named Cutter.

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Luminosion In reply to Sinsia [2006-05-14 04:05:29 +0000 UTC]

Cool!

I think I'd probably like it....

Haha, strange that my drawing would look like it, seeing as I've never heard of it before...

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Sinsia In reply to Luminosion [2006-05-14 04:07:41 +0000 UTC]

Its my favorite comic book series

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Isaia [2006-05-14 02:57:16 +0000 UTC]

LOL the elf ears!

This should/must/can win the Mary Sue contest

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Luminosion In reply to Isaia [2006-05-14 03:12:34 +0000 UTC]

X3.

<3333333333

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Anastasia14 [2006-05-14 01:57:47 +0000 UTC]

It'z NoT a SuE!11 WhAt ArE YoU SaYiNG? ShE iS gReAt!!11
(God typing like that takes forever.)
Anyway, very nice Sue I was laughing the whole way through.

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Luminosion In reply to Anastasia14 [2006-05-14 02:00:08 +0000 UTC]

Hee. "Very nice Sue."

That's such an oxymoron.

XDDD.

But I appreciate the compliment, LOLOLZZZ!!!

X333333333.

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KaseyKase [2006-05-14 01:44:01 +0000 UTC]

OMG KAT. THIS IS GREAT.

Seriously, I think you're gonna win that contest.

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Luminosion In reply to KaseyKase [2006-05-14 01:51:54 +0000 UTC]

Pshhhhhhhh. *blushes* I am NOT.

I just had fun making her.

I really, really, REALLY did.

She was HILARIOUS!!! The storyline was the most fun.... And her coloring job = the best digital coloring I've ever done.... Which is strange... Seeing as she's a Sue....

(I totally ripped off of Suelia for some of her looks/backstory...)

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KaseyKase In reply to Luminosion [2006-05-14 01:53:46 +0000 UTC]

I had fun making my Sue, too.

Probably more fun than I should have...

Eh, what can I say? Making things overexaggerated out of humor is fun.

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Luminosion In reply to KaseyKase [2006-05-14 02:01:33 +0000 UTC]

OMG I DIED WHEN I READ YOUR SUE'S DESCRIPTION.

She's HILARIOUS.

YOU are totally going to win.

"omg she is Zuko's main squeeze" was what REALLY got me...

And yes, it's so much fun to make things overexaggerated...

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Sajira [2006-05-14 01:38:38 +0000 UTC]

She is Purty!!! Love bending huh? This wouldn't be for the Avatar OC club contest would it?

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Luminosion In reply to Sajira [2006-05-14 01:41:51 +0000 UTC]

Hmmm....

Of COURSE not.....

XDDD Yeah, she's for the OC club contest.

I had fun with all the layerzzz........ X3.

/her whole design, because she was hilarious to create.

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