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athena1999 [2009-08-22 17:27:20 +0000 UTC]

Whoa, Meg! This is absolutely amaaaazing, especially for your first time working with lineless art! *_* It's so difficult to break out of one's artistic comfort zone and try new colouring techniques, but you have done it, and I hope to see more of this from you! (And you will be quicker at these with practice, I guarantee it.)

First of all, you did a great job making the outlines on the girl nice and smooth like that, not to mention the girl is very pretty-- she looks almost sad and wistful, like the storm represents how she's in the midst of a tough time, and yet she still has that hope that things will improve for her. At least, that's my own individual interpretation, as I know the artist probably had a different vision.

I also like the delicate shading on her facial features, especially around the nose area, and how her hair looks wet, as if she really has been out in the rain for a while. The individual strands of hair around the edges make a very lovely touch indeed.

Also, I am seriously loving the dandelion seeds and how they're flying every which way-- it really does look as if they're being carried on a wind, and the way some of the seeds are still on their parent flower makes a lovely touch!

I'm digging the background as well, especially the rain, and the lightning definitely adds a dramatic effect.

I know how proud you are of this, and in my opinion this is very impressive, but there are still a few minor areas for critiquing here and there--

First, I seriously commend you for drawing the hand so well! I couldn't draw hands like that at your age, and mine still haven't reached that quality. However, I think it may be a bit small-- the hand is generally the length of the face from the tip of the fingers to the bottom of the palm. Also, she probably wouldn't be clutching the dandelion in her palm like that-- what I'd do is move it outward, and also extend the fingers outward so it looks like she's holding it between the thumb and the edge of her fingers. People don't generally clutch something as light as a flower in their palms, hahaha

Also, maybe bend the dandelion stem a bit? Flower stems are never perfectly stiff and straight like twigs are, and this one probably would bend a bit in the wind of the storm. (:

One more tip on the colouring-- the colour of the girl seems a bit bright and saturated in comparison to the dark, gloomy surroundings. Since it looks like a storm in the middle of the night, her skin and hair would be a much darker and bluer shade. If you were going for realistic shading, I'd probably make the shading on her skin and hair much more dramatic, like a dark blue shade to match the night sky. Although i think the shade of her skin you have now is perfect for the highlighting near the light source of the lightning! The rim lighting on her cheeks make a nice touch as well, and I suggest creating a rim light around the edges of her skin and hair for an extra three-dimensional appearance.

Her facial anatomy looks great for the most part, and I definitely commend you for tackling that realism! I especially like how you outlined her nose-- it looks perfect! The only things that I suggest that need work are her mouth and eyes-- her lips look a bit small-- I'd make the bottom lip larger and rounder, and the top lip is generally darker than the bottom one. I like the way the chin curves out, but I suggest making it a bit longer and rounder, as the mouth is halfway between the nose and chin, and her nose looks a bit large for the rest of her face. Maybe add a bit of extra shading where the jawline meets the neck as well. (: Also, this is just me, but her eye looks a bit... anime-ish? Maybe it's the dark outlining. From the side, the eye should form a teardrop shape, with the narrower part on the outside of the face, and the eyelashes generally curve out to the front. Other than that, the face looks wonderful and you did a great job with the proportions and shading!

One final suggestion-- the glowing around the lightning bolt looks wonderful, but it wouldn't only light up the surrounding areas in the sky. Maybe add a bit of extra lighting to the ground area near the lightning bolt, as well as the edges of the clouds that are facing the light source. Generally the area of the cloud that produces the lightning bolt has a vibrant glow as well.

Overall, it could use a bit of improvements here and there (as every piece of art does, so please don't let my critiquing discourage you!) Overall you did an amazing job without the lineart, and this picture definitely tells a story with all of its symbolism, and I can tell a lot of work went into this piece! I'm very proud of you, so keep on improving and creating masterpieces!

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BackslashEcho [2009-08-17 17:33:31 +0000 UTC]

APUSH is teh epic sux.
Just don't do it. We never did; we passed just fine.

A mi me gusta mucho esta dibuja, but if I may, the hand seems a tad undersized considering how close the POV is to her head. On the other hand, considering how obsessive you tend to be with lineart, it's quite impressive that you managed such a nice picture without it. How much time do you think you saved, exactly?

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AngusMcTavish [2009-08-17 04:10:44 +0000 UTC]

Fantastic! Must have taken a while with all those dandelion bits. Great detail!

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